for Yoru - Gamer Between Dimensions12/5/2018 c3 Helily
Well, alright, it seems I will probably be able to possibly like your version of Danzo. Maybe. Years of hate, hard to manage XD
Love how calm Yoru is. Yes, it's artificial, however, it makes for some lovely reading. Thank you for making the choices you do.
I am loving this fanfic, by the way, and I like the name Yoru. And yes I will decline to read certain fics if I hate a name...cough. It's bad of me, I know...
Ahem, anyway, yes, thank you and good luck with chapter 4 :D
Well, alright, it seems I will probably be able to possibly like your version of Danzo. Maybe. Years of hate, hard to manage XD
Love how calm Yoru is. Yes, it's artificial, however, it makes for some lovely reading. Thank you for making the choices you do.
I am loving this fanfic, by the way, and I like the name Yoru. And yes I will decline to read certain fics if I hate a name...cough. It's bad of me, I know...
Ahem, anyway, yes, thank you and good luck with chapter 4 :D
12/3/2018 c3 Zedukel
*sees new chapter*
*cums*
*scrolls down to bottom to report this to the author*
*shit i just washed these*
*sees new chapter*
*cums*
*scrolls down to bottom to report this to the author*
*shit i just washed these*
12/4/2018 c3 FenrirCrinos
good history, I like the kakashi gaiden plot you takes, left more space to work
I hope see more of your work, is pretty good
good history, I like the kakashi gaiden plot you takes, left more space to work
I hope see more of your work, is pretty good
12/4/2018 c3 GGPD
nice chapter i just hope he does not reveal too much of the system if he even does in the future.
nice chapter i just hope he does not reveal too much of the system if he even does in the future.
12/2/2018 c2 Unbenannt
Just wanted to point out that team minato wasn’t formed until kakashi was nine, and the obito and rin were older than kakashi by only one year.
Just wanted to point out that team minato wasn’t formed until kakashi was nine, and the obito and rin were older than kakashi by only one year.
1012/2/2018 c3 RealSaberwolf
Excellent chapter. Cleared alot of doubts for people. Now I don't have to be afraid of evil Danzo! Greatly written and good interactions. Definitely can see elements of Roots of Darkness fanfiction. Good job on characters and powers and their backstories. Do try to deviate from Roots of Darkness, like you are doing. Add your own spin to it. Overall I was VERY satisfied with this chapter. Settled alot of my fears regarding Danzo!
Excellent chapter. Cleared alot of doubts for people. Now I don't have to be afraid of evil Danzo! Greatly written and good interactions. Definitely can see elements of Roots of Darkness fanfiction. Good job on characters and powers and their backstories. Do try to deviate from Roots of Darkness, like you are doing. Add your own spin to it. Overall I was VERY satisfied with this chapter. Settled alot of my fears regarding Danzo!
12/2/2018 c1 RealSaberwolf
Also you COULD in theory just update all the numbers in another story. Too much numbers you don't have to tell us. Just a basic description and few percentages are fine. Don't go into finer details. Update the status sheet if you wanna give the intricate details. Also if not that try to give the details at the end. It interrupted reading in the middle of the chapter
Also you COULD in theory just update all the numbers in another story. Too much numbers you don't have to tell us. Just a basic description and few percentages are fine. Don't go into finer details. Update the status sheet if you wanna give the intricate details. Also if not that try to give the details at the end. It interrupted reading in the middle of the chapter
12/2/2018 c2 RealSaberwolf
Interesting premise. Love the story so far. That MC kidnapping and Minato on the standby is a big no though. Even if he wasn't against root, straight up letting a kid get kidnapped isn't acceptable. Induction by will is different and kidnapped labour is different. I personally feel Minato agrees when the kid is okay with joining.
Secondly please make his gamer ability a secret and no party systems. I loathe it when the UNIQUE ability of having real life turn into a game is shared. Like when the party is formed you aren't unique anymore. Know you share your ability. It does not sit with a fanfiction meant for entertainment. I hate when literally everyone is OP. Then it takes the fun out of being OP, specially when everyone is aware of the ability. I love stories where MC can hide his ability.
Thirdly please pace the MC slower this time around. Make him godlike still but a little slow. I don't want to see this abandoned like the last one cause you didn't like the pace of levelling. Chapter 2 I feel was fine.
Also please even though I know Danzo is a necessary evil. The shit he pulls isn't necessary. Literally kidnapping isn't necessary. I believe Hiruzen and Minato allowed Danzo to get kids from orphanage after consulting and ignored his kidnapping attempts from OUTSIDE the village. And can we not have MC join root. I really really really hate Danzo and root .
That's the end of my rant. Do remember it's MY OPINION. The fanfiction is yours so you could completely disregard everything I said and I would still read it till It's interesting.
Interesting premise. Love the story so far. That MC kidnapping and Minato on the standby is a big no though. Even if he wasn't against root, straight up letting a kid get kidnapped isn't acceptable. Induction by will is different and kidnapped labour is different. I personally feel Minato agrees when the kid is okay with joining.
Secondly please make his gamer ability a secret and no party systems. I loathe it when the UNIQUE ability of having real life turn into a game is shared. Like when the party is formed you aren't unique anymore. Know you share your ability. It does not sit with a fanfiction meant for entertainment. I hate when literally everyone is OP. Then it takes the fun out of being OP, specially when everyone is aware of the ability. I love stories where MC can hide his ability.
Thirdly please pace the MC slower this time around. Make him godlike still but a little slow. I don't want to see this abandoned like the last one cause you didn't like the pace of levelling. Chapter 2 I feel was fine.
Also please even though I know Danzo is a necessary evil. The shit he pulls isn't necessary. Literally kidnapping isn't necessary. I believe Hiruzen and Minato allowed Danzo to get kids from orphanage after consulting and ignored his kidnapping attempts from OUTSIDE the village. And can we not have MC join root. I really really really hate Danzo and root .
That's the end of my rant. Do remember it's MY OPINION. The fanfiction is yours so you could completely disregard everything I said and I would still read it till It's interesting.
11/25/2018 c1 Zedukel
Do only one chapter a week. I dont want you to rush and then have no chapters to give us one day ;)
also, Damn amazing ff my bro!
Do only one chapter a week. I dont want you to rush and then have no chapters to give us one day ;)
also, Damn amazing ff my bro!
11/27/2018 c2 Kingz T. Infinity
Only 2 chapters in and I'm in love! Great story so far see, you next week can't wait
Only 2 chapters in and I'm in love! Great story so far see, you next week can't wait
11/25/2018 c2 Maik Huttinger
Is the part where the MC gets kidnapped inspired by the fanfic “The Root of Darkness” by Amorphis760? If so, then could you also include in someway the part where the MC gets a kekkei genkai via cell infusion?
By the way, I love the interaction between the MC and team Minato. Good luck with future chapters
Is the part where the MC gets kidnapped inspired by the fanfic “The Root of Darkness” by Amorphis760? If so, then could you also include in someway the part where the MC gets a kekkei genkai via cell infusion?
By the way, I love the interaction between the MC and team Minato. Good luck with future chapters
11/26/2018 c2 evo123457
free training get. might as well turn gamer's mind up to max or 95% until he gets free then not do something stupid like instantly turning it down by more than 5% when he decides he want his emotions back. Turn it down 1% per week or something along those lines
free training get. might as well turn gamer's mind up to max or 95% until he gets free then not do something stupid like instantly turning it down by more than 5% when he decides he want his emotions back. Turn it down 1% per week or something along those lines