for God of Swords: How a Sword is Forged4/4/2024 c10 
7Paxloria
...Well, that happened.
I highly advise you to proof-read and edit.
~ Maybe think about reposting this chapter after fixing it.
I also highly advise you to READ THIS OUT LOUD TO YOURSELF and do the same with both previous and future chapters so that you can more easily see the MANY problems that need to be fixed.
I can tell that you had a LOT of thoughts and idea's, but ended up having trouble writing them down in the best way.
So all that aside, did Shirou use Rule Breaker on Medusa or did he kill her? If Medusa is fine and the curse broken, then there should be no reason to run away in such a hurry. she would be very thankful.
If he killed Medusa there is still no reason to hurry away since she won't be chasing them.
Alive or dead, there is no reason to bring up the topic of the 'eye-breaker' glasses for Medusa. He didn't give them to her (there was no chatting between the two and she wouldn't have just put them on nor did he put them on her) and even if he had they would have disappeared shortly since they were traced.
So is Medusa alive (and uncursed) or dead?
Also Shirou is in his head here a lot and I can't tell why. Also can't tell which is his thoughts, his memory, or him talking to that goddess.
This made that ENTIRE SECTION very confusing and hard to understand what was going on.
Later, with Annabeth, he acted like he was still in battle mode (or suffering from PTSD) and there was no reason for him to be like that.
Then the annoying girl starts pestering him while he's readying some magecraft. He doesn't tell her to shut up and the Author doesn't say what spell he is trying to cast.
Then after he's done, she dosen't restart questioning him about what he did, and he didn't explain what spell he engraved on the car.
Also, Shirou's feet couldn't reach the peddles, and yet he could still drive? How? You didn't explain if he traced something to the bottom of his shoes to solve the problem.
Anyway, most of this reads like a bad Stream-Of-Consciousness poem. Writing like for a book in a paragraph like way. That would be best.
7Paxloria...Well, that happened.
I highly advise you to proof-read and edit.
~ Maybe think about reposting this chapter after fixing it.
I also highly advise you to READ THIS OUT LOUD TO YOURSELF and do the same with both previous and future chapters so that you can more easily see the MANY problems that need to be fixed.
I can tell that you had a LOT of thoughts and idea's, but ended up having trouble writing them down in the best way.
So all that aside, did Shirou use Rule Breaker on Medusa or did he kill her? If Medusa is fine and the curse broken, then there should be no reason to run away in such a hurry. she would be very thankful.
If he killed Medusa there is still no reason to hurry away since she won't be chasing them.
Alive or dead, there is no reason to bring up the topic of the 'eye-breaker' glasses for Medusa. He didn't give them to her (there was no chatting between the two and she wouldn't have just put them on nor did he put them on her) and even if he had they would have disappeared shortly since they were traced.
So is Medusa alive (and uncursed) or dead?
Also Shirou is in his head here a lot and I can't tell why. Also can't tell which is his thoughts, his memory, or him talking to that goddess.
This made that ENTIRE SECTION very confusing and hard to understand what was going on.
Later, with Annabeth, he acted like he was still in battle mode (or suffering from PTSD) and there was no reason for him to be like that.
Then the annoying girl starts pestering him while he's readying some magecraft. He doesn't tell her to shut up and the Author doesn't say what spell he is trying to cast.
Then after he's done, she dosen't restart questioning him about what he did, and he didn't explain what spell he engraved on the car.
Also, Shirou's feet couldn't reach the peddles, and yet he could still drive? How? You didn't explain if he traced something to the bottom of his shoes to solve the problem.
Anyway, most of this reads like a bad Stream-Of-Consciousness poem. Writing like for a book in a paragraph like way. That would be best.
4/4/2024 c10 Nikkless
so in the end what happend to medusa, you skipped the fight and said he used Rule Breaker, but after that?
so in the end what happend to medusa, you skipped the fight and said he used Rule Breaker, but after that?
4/4/2024 c10 1TheBeatles211
Based on Shirou’s words, Medusa wasn’t killed by Rule Breaker. But she wasn’t turnered back into a human either. I’m guessing he removed the curse that compelled her to kill and devour even when she didn’t want to. This way she live peacefully in isolation. Although that didn’t stop Shirou from pushing his luck and running while they still had the chance.
As for those words that kept popping up, I’m assuming those are taunts stuck in his head after what the Furies did to him. Hopefully it’ll wear off soon, because they were very distracting for him. Even more than Annabeth’s pestering questions. At least they have a set of wheels to travel in. And with Shirou’s magic, remain undetectable (at least from mortals). I wonder if they’ll still run into Echidna and Area. Anywho, I wish you good luck with your writing and I hope to see the next update soon.
1TheBeatles211Based on Shirou’s words, Medusa wasn’t killed by Rule Breaker. But she wasn’t turnered back into a human either. I’m guessing he removed the curse that compelled her to kill and devour even when she didn’t want to. This way she live peacefully in isolation. Although that didn’t stop Shirou from pushing his luck and running while they still had the chance.
As for those words that kept popping up, I’m assuming those are taunts stuck in his head after what the Furies did to him. Hopefully it’ll wear off soon, because they were very distracting for him. Even more than Annabeth’s pestering questions. At least they have a set of wheels to travel in. And with Shirou’s magic, remain undetectable (at least from mortals). I wonder if they’ll still run into Echidna and Area. Anywho, I wish you good luck with your writing and I hope to see the next update soon.
4/4/2024 c10 Goxo
Author, can the next chapter clarify what happened between 9 and 10, because I am lost with what happened to Medusa. I do hope you have made plans for EMIYA to teach some more demigods magecraft, and in the future interact with other pantheon. Till next time Author, Godspeed.
Author, can the next chapter clarify what happened between 9 and 10, because I am lost with what happened to Medusa. I do hope you have made plans for EMIYA to teach some more demigods magecraft, and in the future interact with other pantheon. Till next time Author, Godspeed.
4/4/2024 c10 2WitnessofFate
I think I understood what happened to medusa considering rule breaker is what was used, but i do agree the constant use of brat for everyone is making it impossible to know who he’s referring to
2WitnessofFateI think I understood what happened to medusa considering rule breaker is what was used, but i do agree the constant use of brat for everyone is making it impossible to know who he’s referring to
4/4/2024 c10 4Maglad
Five isn’t just not good. It is right out.
I live how the blonde one’s world is being blow away.
‘But that’s not a gift your father could have given you!’
‘Believe it or not, not every good thing comes from the gods. You can actually study and learn things on your own with this thing called ‘effort ‘ you know? Thats how humans managed to build the modern world. ‘
I can’t wait for that to become a recurring theme.
‘What, you think cars/hamburguers/skyscrapers/planes/concrete/satlliyes/phones/etc were gifts from the gods?’
4MagladFive isn’t just not good. It is right out.
I live how the blonde one’s world is being blow away.
‘But that’s not a gift your father could have given you!’
‘Believe it or not, not every good thing comes from the gods. You can actually study and learn things on your own with this thing called ‘effort ‘ you know? Thats how humans managed to build the modern world. ‘
I can’t wait for that to become a recurring theme.
‘What, you think cars/hamburguers/skyscrapers/planes/concrete/satlliyes/phones/etc were gifts from the gods?’
4/4/2024 c10 1SentinalSlice
It’s really hard to tell what’s going on. I still don’t understand what happened to Medusa. And it’s hard to tell who he is referring to when you just call them the brat and the other brat.
1SentinalSliceIt’s really hard to tell what’s going on. I still don’t understand what happened to Medusa. And it’s hard to tell who he is referring to when you just call them the brat and the other brat.
4/4/2024 c10 Shen1412
Were those Arias that keep on showing up before the paragraphs?
Well sweet chapter as usual, pitying Emiya to do all the baby-seating ahahhahahaha, looking forward for next one
Were those Arias that keep on showing up before the paragraphs?
Well sweet chapter as usual, pitying Emiya to do all the baby-seating ahahhahahaha, looking forward for next one
4/3/2024 c9 evilstatistic19
Good chapter. I'm looking forward to the next one. Just to let you know, the email alerts are not working again
Good chapter. I'm looking forward to the next one. Just to let you know, the email alerts are not working again