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9/8 c21 1Crypt0
when is the next chap?
7/13 c8 5Planar-Walking-Entertainment
Wait… that line… “But i do know that i have a particular set of skills. Skills that i cultivated over my long career. Skills that make me a nightmare for people like you!” XD Red death fan i see! I love that phrase!
7/13 c7 Planar-Walking-Entertainment
Well, that was an interesting meeting. *hears sakura’s question* oh, I don’t know… maybe because she lived with them for ten years while you only knew a clone?
6/17 c3 Rastaman Yow
that's it I'm out, fuck with naruko talk no jutsu sasuke. it doesn't make sense. sasuke literally saw his family and clan died by the hands of his brother then put into a genjutsu to be tortured. and you expect sasuke to be just fine with it just by naruko slapping him and talking bs like she knows all the shit and pain of the world? fuck outa here
3/15 c21 YouPromisedMeSomeday
The writing is overall quite good. But in sense of characters I can't say much. Naruto whilst a wonderful character, she seems to be the kind of character where the plot falls at her feet. Another issue I had was how easily Naruko broke Sasukes defences. She said she lost family, despite the fact that she can find them one day whilst Sasuke saw the death of ALL his family and was tortured under a genjutsu. It just seemed unrealistic. Plus there's the whole curse of hatred thing going on. I like Sakura and Hinata but their development was quite sudden. Also the way Naruko knew EVERYONE was so so unrealistic, think this through how many of them would actually have the time to meet her, half of them were in T&I, others were chuunin. The only people I can see meeting her are people who hung out with Kakashi. I'm sorry if these seems too harsh which is not my intention. I just want you to realise you could write much much better. Sorry and thank you for the read
3/8 c1 Justinho14
Keep updating please ! It’s a great read and FanFiction I love it
12/11/2020 c21 mmha
Amazing chapter I can’t wait to read more
10/27/2020 c5 11gadman85
The only part about this chapter I felt was "bad" is how you put too much focus on the fangirl argument. You could have had it happen in the background and it could have actually worked. Instead, it was front and center and overly detailed.

I do like this fic so far, though it felt like the changes in characters were far too quick. I can understand wanting to get them over and done with, but it could have been paced a little better. Sakura being different from her canon self could have also been a little better explained instead of her just not becoming a stalker fangirl.

I really liked the whole part about Naruko being raised with the other Jinchuriki. You did handle that really well, even when you switched in the canon ones with the previous ones to fit the timeline. The way you handled it showed how close they all were and emphasized this is the world of Naruto. It is not all happy-go-lucky, but you didn't bog your story down in the depressing side either.
9/20/2020 c5 1Rhyn3
the Ino Sakura argument was too close to home. I was both of them at one point. ACOTAR is one of my favorite series, number three is my favorite, especially part 1. the interplay between Lucian, Feyre, and Priest-Bitch is great
9/13/2020 c21 WandaCFG
For a future chapter you could do a mission of team 7 that comes out in a movie (that of the land of the level for example) and that Roshi or Han appear who have been little in person, Naruko has only seen them in the arc of the chunnin exams.
I am Spanish and I am writing this with the google translator, I hope it is understood.
9/12/2020 c1 Son of sea 9 tail
I really don’t like that he split the Kyuubi and the fact that it didn’t regenerate the part over time it should have had two kyuubi that are full power
9/12/2020 c21 laurajustin
Great story! Can't wait for the next update!
9/12/2020 c21 Guest
nice chapter as always
not seen the darkness, Sure Naruko did not saw her biological family being killed by her brother like saskue did, but Naruko is a jinchuriki and that comes with a lot of seen darkness, her all family being split because of the akatsuki, she is ostracized because she is a jinchuriki, she has the killer of her biological parents inside, who mind you has seen the darkness of humanity for centuries, and is seen as an object and a source of power, instead than a being.
what does Hinata knows,? does she know about Kurama? about naruko's family? biogical or not ?
intersting that you are putting Sasuke back to the dark path, but still is different from canon, in canon the fight with Naruto happened also to gain the mangekyo, here because he want to protect her, plus he can't join the akatsuki since is the organization that is targeting her and her family
8/3/2020 c20 2zachosg7
originally found this fic on Wattpad under the sarcastickitsune account
eventually realized this is that account's fanfiction account

and it seems you update here before Wattpad, so going to add it here but still support it over on Wattpad
7/24/2020 c20 James1996
Great so far. I look forward to reading more in the future.
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