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11LadyNerdyNerf
What the heck don't stop there this is amazing! Creative, unique and wonderful! I like the army style story especially because this one has a futuristic twist. Update soon! Yay nalu!
11LadyNerdyNerfWhat the heck don't stop there this is amazing! Creative, unique and wonderful! I like the army style story especially because this one has a futuristic twist. Update soon! Yay nalu!
6/29/2020 c1 evernightlove
Wow what a start can’t wait to see what happens next! Pls let there be more pls!
Wow what a start can’t wait to see what happens next! Pls let there be more pls!
11/5/2019 c1 6Wonderwomanbatmanfan
Author, you need to update this book like ASAP! This is an awesome start for a, I'm sure, an awesome book. Please update soon :D
6WonderwomanbatmanfanAuthor, you need to update this book like ASAP! This is an awesome start for a, I'm sure, an awesome book. Please update soon :D
4/24/2019 c1 jemana
So good! The end of the chapter had me laughing on the floor :D I think you did a fantastic job at describing how the two of them clash after the fight! I'll be patiently waiting 'Beta'.
So good! The end of the chapter had me laughing on the floor :D I think you did a fantastic job at describing how the two of them clash after the fight! I'll be patiently waiting 'Beta'.
2/18/2019 c1 ManderNaner
The dynamic between Natsu and Lucy's interaction once things blew over at the end of this first chapter was very amusing and a fun change of pace that portrayed the argumentative side their friendship has on occasion in the Fairy Tail story. I love it.
You did well at hinting to the almost sci-fi vibe this certain timeline seems to have without smashing it into your audience's face - like force-feeding a whole burger down your friend's throat - that some authors have a tendency to do when crafting their worlds for their audience. You left plenty of opportunity to further cement what kind of technology/setting this particular world has in future chapters. Right now the setting seems to be leaning to that of advanced modern technology like what you'd find in "Agents of Shield." Which may or may not be what you're aiming for.
I do love the way you focused on Natsu's current disposition and relationship with his team versus strictly between him and Lucy in the beginning of this in comparison to the other sister stories. It definitely furthers the uniqueness that each story holds. I'm looking forward to the next chapters for these!
The dynamic between Natsu and Lucy's interaction once things blew over at the end of this first chapter was very amusing and a fun change of pace that portrayed the argumentative side their friendship has on occasion in the Fairy Tail story. I love it.
You did well at hinting to the almost sci-fi vibe this certain timeline seems to have without smashing it into your audience's face - like force-feeding a whole burger down your friend's throat - that some authors have a tendency to do when crafting their worlds for their audience. You left plenty of opportunity to further cement what kind of technology/setting this particular world has in future chapters. Right now the setting seems to be leaning to that of advanced modern technology like what you'd find in "Agents of Shield." Which may or may not be what you're aiming for.
I do love the way you focused on Natsu's current disposition and relationship with his team versus strictly between him and Lucy in the beginning of this in comparison to the other sister stories. It definitely furthers the uniqueness that each story holds. I'm looking forward to the next chapters for these!
2/12/2019 c1 Lovetoreadff
Hi Satyrykal,
This was a fun story to read. I really liked the futurescape and the athmosphere you set up in this situation. I thought the dialogue was characteristic of those involved. I liked how in just a few short sentences you were able to transport the reader where you wanted them to be. Haven’t checked out Edens zero, so I have no frame of reference to say whether this is similar, but this story was fun either way. Thank you for your work.
Hi Satyrykal,
This was a fun story to read. I really liked the futurescape and the athmosphere you set up in this situation. I thought the dialogue was characteristic of those involved. I liked how in just a few short sentences you were able to transport the reader where you wanted them to be. Haven’t checked out Edens zero, so I have no frame of reference to say whether this is similar, but this story was fun either way. Thank you for your work.
2/3/2019 c1 Sanspree
I love all of your stories! They draw you in instantly and leave me craving more. I can’t wait for more updates!
I love all of your stories! They draw you in instantly and leave me craving more. I can’t wait for more updates!
1/14/2019 c2 Hamesquade
How can you be so good at writing Nalu? I am so hyped for this story, I already love the dynamic! Keep it up ️
How can you be so good at writing Nalu? I am so hyped for this story, I already love the dynamic! Keep it up ️
1/6/2019 c1 leipooh
Gah I can’t wait to see this story unfold! I love all your stories and I can already tell that this is gonna be great!
Gah I can’t wait to see this story unfold! I love all your stories and I can already tell that this is gonna be great!