for Harry Potter and the International Triwizard Tournament6/7 c14 Guest
I was loving this fic so far but this chapter really put me off. Harry is such a wimp! Despite Natalia admitting that she used the info in the file to get close to him, he’s still going out with her? I don’t think I can continue reading this, sorry. This level of betrayal would have ended any relationship. And it’s not like Harry was madly in love. They had only just known each other for a few weeks. Really poor choices on Harry’s part.
I was loving this fic so far but this chapter really put me off. Harry is such a wimp! Despite Natalia admitting that she used the info in the file to get close to him, he’s still going out with her? I don’t think I can continue reading this, sorry. This level of betrayal would have ended any relationship. And it’s not like Harry was madly in love. They had only just known each other for a few weeks. Really poor choices on Harry’s part.
5/20 c1 Pat9921
why is he such a wimpy bitch here, canon happened like before so why would he behave like that and also hermione came back to him before the first taski don't remember if the question you said even happened in the books but i don't believe you if you write harry like that).
why is he such a wimpy bitch here, canon happened like before so why would he behave like that and also hermione came back to him before the first taski don't remember if the question you said even happened in the books but i don't believe you if you write harry like that).
5/5 c34 rishp
got a feeling one of the girls is gna die, harry will lose his shit and go full dark mode then get redeemed later with the help of the other 2 girls..
got a feeling one of the girls is gna die, harry will lose his shit and go full dark mode then get redeemed later with the help of the other 2 girls..
3/30 c57 AndySerri
Well written. Very interesting. Though, some parts, especially the politics, overextended their welcome. I know the story wasn't to be focused on action, but there was so very little of it. The last 10 or so chapters were quite disappointing. I wish the story hadn't taken place through his 4th year only, because everything that happened did not feel like they could have in only a year. Harry barely being able to fight during his engagement party to him doing all he did at the final fight just felt completely out of nowhere and also underwhelming compared to what you showed Grindewald being capable of. No epilogue is also... a choice. Overall pretty good, though from most of the story I really hoped it would've been great.
Well written. Very interesting. Though, some parts, especially the politics, overextended their welcome. I know the story wasn't to be focused on action, but there was so very little of it. The last 10 or so chapters were quite disappointing. I wish the story hadn't taken place through his 4th year only, because everything that happened did not feel like they could have in only a year. Harry barely being able to fight during his engagement party to him doing all he did at the final fight just felt completely out of nowhere and also underwhelming compared to what you showed Grindewald being capable of. No epilogue is also... a choice. Overall pretty good, though from most of the story I really hoped it would've been great.
3/30 c54 AndySerri
Really? For a fic called the Internetional Triwizard Tournament, there was very little of it, and you just did the third task off screen? Kudos.
Really? For a fic called the Internetional Triwizard Tournament, there was very little of it, and you just did the third task off screen? Kudos.
3/30 c50 AndySerri
This chapter should've been switched with the previous one, can't imagine how aggravating it would've been to have to wait so long after reading chapter 48 and getting what your 49th was u.u
This chapter should've been switched with the previous one, can't imagine how aggravating it would've been to have to wait so long after reading chapter 48 and getting what your 49th was u.u
3/30 c49 AndySerri
Fuck do you mean, he did his 49th ritual? You had him do it off screen after all the BS from the last chapter that he tried? Bruh.
Fuck do you mean, he did his 49th ritual? You had him do it off screen after all the BS from the last chapter that he tried? Bruh.
3/21 c31 
6Lamp23
Hey yo Luna saying goodbye to Harry hurt and I'm not okay with it. I almost started crying in public You better make Luna and Harry bff's right now! I don't care that this fic is already completed just add it as a postscript or something please
P.s. loving this fic so far, amazing writing that I can't get enough of. (see how easy it is to write something nice in a postscript )
6Lamp23Hey yo Luna saying goodbye to Harry hurt and I'm not okay with it. I almost started crying in public You better make Luna and Harry bff's right now! I don't care that this fic is already completed just add it as a postscript or something please
P.s. loving this fic so far, amazing writing that I can't get enough of. (see how easy it is to write something nice in a postscript )
3/20 c18 Stalkerblossom
I hate how you’ve relegated the entire relationship of lily and james into yeah she chose to be a classy whore for money and protection. It makes her character weak and values questionable. If that was really the case i would hate her as a character
I hate how you’ve relegated the entire relationship of lily and james into yeah she chose to be a classy whore for money and protection. It makes her character weak and values questionable. If that was really the case i would hate her as a character
3/8 c22 idunno
I'm not sure if this is too real or what but i don't really like all the shoehorned political stuff. It's just reading about trashy people doing trashy things to each other and rolling around in the muck while pretending it's the height of class or political acumen. It makes it hard to root for the piece of human garbage that you are turning this political/pathetic/cowardly/dishonorable harry into. Like instead of aspiring to be good and help people or whatever like he used to think of his mom, he now knows that according to your author power, his mom was a gold digging prostitute that tricked and manipulated his dad into marrying her on the advice of this creepy dude who 'collects people' and grooms them to collect on future favors. Even going so far as to go behind his back to his parents and sign a contract and all that nasty stuff. It's just so horrifically gross of them as human beings to all act like this. Like, it's good that she is dead, it's good that his dishonorable and disgusting parents who tricked him into a loveless and fake marriage died, if there was any karma it would have been slow and painful for those evil pieces of trash. I feel bad that harry is effectively and practically a rape baby but it's also hard to root for him when he apparently doesn't see anything wrong with it and 'that's just how it is in the real world' or 'that's more realistic of political/rich people to act like that' or whatever.
It might be childish but I want my heros to fight against the evil in the world, not be like, 'oh, i guess since my mom was a whore and im a rape baby then that's just how the world works and i need to jump in this quagmire of evil and roll around with the other trash'.
It's a well written story, it's just that all the characters are depressing in their acceptance of dishonorable and shameful actions as a 'that's the only way to survive/get ahead' type outlook.
I'm not sure if this is too real or what but i don't really like all the shoehorned political stuff. It's just reading about trashy people doing trashy things to each other and rolling around in the muck while pretending it's the height of class or political acumen. It makes it hard to root for the piece of human garbage that you are turning this political/pathetic/cowardly/dishonorable harry into. Like instead of aspiring to be good and help people or whatever like he used to think of his mom, he now knows that according to your author power, his mom was a gold digging prostitute that tricked and manipulated his dad into marrying her on the advice of this creepy dude who 'collects people' and grooms them to collect on future favors. Even going so far as to go behind his back to his parents and sign a contract and all that nasty stuff. It's just so horrifically gross of them as human beings to all act like this. Like, it's good that she is dead, it's good that his dishonorable and disgusting parents who tricked him into a loveless and fake marriage died, if there was any karma it would have been slow and painful for those evil pieces of trash. I feel bad that harry is effectively and practically a rape baby but it's also hard to root for him when he apparently doesn't see anything wrong with it and 'that's just how it is in the real world' or 'that's more realistic of political/rich people to act like that' or whatever.
It might be childish but I want my heros to fight against the evil in the world, not be like, 'oh, i guess since my mom was a whore and im a rape baby then that's just how the world works and i need to jump in this quagmire of evil and roll around with the other trash'.
It's a well written story, it's just that all the characters are depressing in their acceptance of dishonorable and shameful actions as a 'that's the only way to survive/get ahead' type outlook.
2/24 c19 Mutant Ascension
I swear I hate almost every single fan fiction version of Sirius that I read about This man fought on the front lines against voldemort for years him and his death eaters seen the actions that they have done trying to save people from those actions spent Almost 13 years in the worst prison on the planet surrounded by soldier demons and every one of you that write this man's character keep trying to make him act like a f****** Teenage prankster, why? You went through all that trouble to turn James and lily's relationship into some contractual agreement she made in order to gain money and fame and knowledge made all that trouble to make Snape seem like a better person that he actually is yet you don't have the decency to make serious scene like not a freaking 14-year-old in hogwarts again I ask why?
I swear I hate almost every single fan fiction version of Sirius that I read about This man fought on the front lines against voldemort for years him and his death eaters seen the actions that they have done trying to save people from those actions spent Almost 13 years in the worst prison on the planet surrounded by soldier demons and every one of you that write this man's character keep trying to make him act like a f****** Teenage prankster, why? You went through all that trouble to turn James and lily's relationship into some contractual agreement she made in order to gain money and fame and knowledge made all that trouble to make Snape seem like a better person that he actually is yet you don't have the decency to make serious scene like not a freaking 14-year-old in hogwarts again I ask why?
2/24 c18 Mutant Ascension
What complete horse s*** voldemort is literally walking proof that to succeed all the wizard or which needs if talent and ruthlessness. And look at it all of that c*** that slughorn just talked about he has those very people that rely on that bullshit at his feet kissing his robes because of his power and talent. The magical world is different because personal power is a lot more important than it would be in the mother world where power only comes from money and other people if you have no money other people will not come to you and if you have no 12 help you you have no power. While in the magical world a sufficiently powerful which our wizard can single handily wipe out an entire city of muggles along with their powerful enough that is the real difference. Heck slug on himself is proof of that he gets by in the world by relying on those that have real power and talent. Voldemort with his talent was able to gain power and then once he gained power he used that power to take the knowledge he needed to gain even more power from those that had the knowledge but lacked the power to protect it.
What complete horse s*** voldemort is literally walking proof that to succeed all the wizard or which needs if talent and ruthlessness. And look at it all of that c*** that slughorn just talked about he has those very people that rely on that bullshit at his feet kissing his robes because of his power and talent. The magical world is different because personal power is a lot more important than it would be in the mother world where power only comes from money and other people if you have no money other people will not come to you and if you have no 12 help you you have no power. While in the magical world a sufficiently powerful which our wizard can single handily wipe out an entire city of muggles along with their powerful enough that is the real difference. Heck slug on himself is proof of that he gets by in the world by relying on those that have real power and talent. Voldemort with his talent was able to gain power and then once he gained power he used that power to take the knowledge he needed to gain even more power from those that had the knowledge but lacked the power to protect it.
2/19 c15 Mutant Ascension
Out of all of the options you could have come up with this is what you came up with for the blocks that the entire main line is almost barren because of inbreeding? First of all that is not how inbreeding works I don't know why people have this fantasy version of what interest does if incest that any of this then the human species are in the world of Harry Potter muggles would have long since been extinct because we are Extremely inbred, In fact we're one of the most inbred species on this entire planet and yet there's over 8 billion of us. Also you seem to have forgotten the existence of the Gaunts in Harry Potter as in voldemort's mother's family they are the most inbred species in all of magical Britain if not the entire magical world across the planet they only had kids with each other and yet still there had no problems having kids as you can clearly see. Never mind the fact that because they were so in bread even other pure bloods looked down on them. And yet you have the Blacks who are not nearly as inbred as the gone swear suffer consequence of inbreeding that not even the gaunts have ever suffered that's not making a whole lot of sense.
Out of all of the options you could have come up with this is what you came up with for the blocks that the entire main line is almost barren because of inbreeding? First of all that is not how inbreeding works I don't know why people have this fantasy version of what interest does if incest that any of this then the human species are in the world of Harry Potter muggles would have long since been extinct because we are Extremely inbred, In fact we're one of the most inbred species on this entire planet and yet there's over 8 billion of us. Also you seem to have forgotten the existence of the Gaunts in Harry Potter as in voldemort's mother's family they are the most inbred species in all of magical Britain if not the entire magical world across the planet they only had kids with each other and yet still there had no problems having kids as you can clearly see. Never mind the fact that because they were so in bread even other pure bloods looked down on them. And yet you have the Blacks who are not nearly as inbred as the gone swear suffer consequence of inbreeding that not even the gaunts have ever suffered that's not making a whole lot of sense.