for The Game Changer6/17/2023 c4 GreenGun03
just like now, you planned this one to be harem. yet you still not updated. 'cause you thinking the correlation to the future story.
just like now, you planned this one to be harem. yet you still not updated. 'cause you thinking the correlation to the future story.
6/17/2023 c4 GreenGun03
well, harem is good and all. but it will slowly change the theme of the story in the future.
just imagine only one black sekirei that replace genos place, while the other element is still present. just sweet-sweet rom com.
well, harem is good and all. but it will slowly change the theme of the story in the future.
just imagine only one black sekirei that replace genos place, while the other element is still present. just sweet-sweet rom com.
4/4/2022 c4 Visual Matrix
This story was starting to get really good. It'a a shame you've seemingly abandoned it. :/
This story was starting to get really good. It'a a shame you've seemingly abandoned it. :/
10/12/2020 c4 
1ssj3gohan007
Great story! Well done! i love it! I can picture Saitama now looking like the Hitman series protagonist. I am dying to know what happens next! :D
1ssj3gohan007Great story! Well done! i love it! I can picture Saitama now looking like the Hitman series protagonist. I am dying to know what happens next! :D
7/1/2020 c4 Petrus streamrock
Finally, someone is seriously making an OPM and Sekirei crossover fict. Though it feels kinda off to me due to the lack of Saitama and Geno dynamic, that is just a personal opinion. I have some suggestion though. Stop writing these kinds of lines, and I quote; "Well my dear readers" having narrative words suddenly addressing the readers breaks the immersion of the story.
And instead of giving an explanation in a separate way from the scenes in the story, like; "Winging for Dummies". Make it that the characters in the story are the one who is addressing it in a scene where they are having a conversation about the winging topic. For example, Saitama asked Karasuba what a Sekirei or a Winging is. And then Karasuba explained it. (Or make him ask Karasuba and then just skip the explanation scene. Since I bet the people who read this fict is already knowledgeable about OPM and Sekirei.) Let the readers understand the information being exposed to them by reading the interaction of the characters with each other or their surroundings.
For pairings, I don't really mind who you paired Saitama with. Be it a single pairing, or a Harem. Just make it understandable and believable.
Well, that's it from me, keep up the good work, I hope this helps, sorry if my English sucks (Not my first language) Stay healthy, God bless, Adios!
Finally, someone is seriously making an OPM and Sekirei crossover fict. Though it feels kinda off to me due to the lack of Saitama and Geno dynamic, that is just a personal opinion. I have some suggestion though. Stop writing these kinds of lines, and I quote; "Well my dear readers" having narrative words suddenly addressing the readers breaks the immersion of the story.
And instead of giving an explanation in a separate way from the scenes in the story, like; "Winging for Dummies". Make it that the characters in the story are the one who is addressing it in a scene where they are having a conversation about the winging topic. For example, Saitama asked Karasuba what a Sekirei or a Winging is. And then Karasuba explained it. (Or make him ask Karasuba and then just skip the explanation scene. Since I bet the people who read this fict is already knowledgeable about OPM and Sekirei.) Let the readers understand the information being exposed to them by reading the interaction of the characters with each other or their surroundings.
For pairings, I don't really mind who you paired Saitama with. Be it a single pairing, or a Harem. Just make it understandable and believable.
Well, that's it from me, keep up the good work, I hope this helps, sorry if my English sucks (Not my first language) Stay healthy, God bless, Adios!
2/7/2020 c4 Guest
Update when?
Update when?