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8/20 c3 7Cranky Monkey 699
Ok so interesting story so far. Writing could use some work. Shorter paragraphs for starters and seperating speakers. Jumped a bit quick in timeline for the little story you’ve written so far. Not enough filler unless you are creating an op or god like character in which case leaving the story at this stage would be a mistake as people will lose interest
2/5 c3 GXY-2013
The writing here is terrible. It is so unreadable. You should listen to Aspiring-Creator's advice. And I very much agree with trexoil on these.
2/3 c1 Endore4
A sith caring about somebody else than himself?
11/10/2019 c3 Aerintissa
Kakashi
1/28/2019 c3 Darth Tython
C please
12/28/2018 c3 Guest
Chp 3 isnt with this story you might have made a mistake uploading it
12/23/2018 c1 Guest
Please update
12/23/2018 c1 3Miki Uzumaki102
Great first chapter! Can't wait for more!
12/23/2018 c1 SPark681
Not a bad start wonder how Naruto will grow as a Sith anyways keep up the great work!

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