for The Dragon Slayer of Konoha8/25 c10 FantaRacing
Long awaited update is finally here! Thanks, and well done, all the chapters make much more sense, but I still noticed some bits from previous version loke cut off sentences so you might want to read your work thoroughly.
Story wise, its great, there's nothing more to say, very good job.
As for team pairing, I personally thought of Natsu and Izumi being a extra cart to Team 7 for most of the story important situations and fights, but be able to be relocated to help other teams so that they have screen time as well as have written through relationships with the rest of Konoha Dozen(Devils dozen more or less, its just a nickname, not a literal count of members).
In story the reason for Team 7 having Natsu and Izumi can be that Team 7 will be a designated offensive/defensive go-to combat team, so more members make more sense, but also because Natsu and Izumi are the odd ones out since there wasn't anymore students. But since Team 7 has this unfair advantage on exams they can be tossed around from team to team for each round.
Natsu and Izumi can also be their own separate sabotage/espionage unit called Team 13 (although it bring bad luck, its more like "damn pushed this guy, now we have this whole story line" bad luck) and since they are so good they just make it work.
So carry on with your work, its amazing and unique, its so good that I started to write my own fanfic (you were on a break and i had a bad case of "I WANT IT NOW") based on yours called "Dragon of shinobi world" its in russian on ficbook. com so i would be happy to hear your thoughts.
Long awaited update is finally here! Thanks, and well done, all the chapters make much more sense, but I still noticed some bits from previous version loke cut off sentences so you might want to read your work thoroughly.
Story wise, its great, there's nothing more to say, very good job.
As for team pairing, I personally thought of Natsu and Izumi being a extra cart to Team 7 for most of the story important situations and fights, but be able to be relocated to help other teams so that they have screen time as well as have written through relationships with the rest of Konoha Dozen(Devils dozen more or less, its just a nickname, not a literal count of members).
In story the reason for Team 7 having Natsu and Izumi can be that Team 7 will be a designated offensive/defensive go-to combat team, so more members make more sense, but also because Natsu and Izumi are the odd ones out since there wasn't anymore students. But since Team 7 has this unfair advantage on exams they can be tossed around from team to team for each round.
Natsu and Izumi can also be their own separate sabotage/espionage unit called Team 13 (although it bring bad luck, its more like "damn pushed this guy, now we have this whole story line" bad luck) and since they are so good they just make it work.
So carry on with your work, its amazing and unique, its so good that I started to write my own fanfic (you were on a break and i had a bad case of "I WANT IT NOW") based on yours called "Dragon of shinobi world" its in russian on ficbook. com so i would be happy to hear your thoughts.
8/8 c10 FairyEraDs
Hey Nagura, first of all and speaking honestly I thought you were already dead, since you stopped updating Natsu's in Danmanchi, I stopped hearing from you in general, and although I went to the cofi thing, I didn't understand absolutely anything, I'm from Argentina , South America, and I'm not good with English, so right now I'm answering you with the help of the translator, in reality I read a lot of your story to practice the language, but in the cofi, I made an account and everything, but when you I was looking for you, you didn't appear and I couldn't find your story so I put it aside and waited for you to update here on fanfiction. but leaving all that aside. Regarding the options, I would honestly go with Natsu's options being that of a one man cell, and that Izumi be assigned as a Jonnin, as an excuse for Natsu to be able to operate more freely without having to answer to any Jonnin, in addition to the Being a free cell I could interact completely freely with the rest of the team without affecting the main cannon too much, it would only fill in some chapters, such as with situations in which Natsu interacts more with the people of the village, like that chapter in which he had dinner with the Nara family, it was entertaining and somewhat relaxing to read, I don't think it is necessary to invent any extra arc or villain for the story and for some excuse, it is obvious that this Natsu is at a very different level from the rest of the boys, in Personally, I would only give the excuse that he has the necessary powers to be anbu, that should be enough for the rest because Izumi is in charge of his "training".
PS: well I hope I have made myself understood, by the way I find it curious that one day before you released this update I felt like rereading your story and I did and it felt different to when I read it the first time, the curious thing is that it didn't It was the first time that after reading an abandoned story, the author showed signs of life the next day. Well, I send you greetings from Argentina and I hope to see how you proceed with the or in this case with the story of Naruto, greetings and I will be reading you.
Hey Nagura, first of all and speaking honestly I thought you were already dead, since you stopped updating Natsu's in Danmanchi, I stopped hearing from you in general, and although I went to the cofi thing, I didn't understand absolutely anything, I'm from Argentina , South America, and I'm not good with English, so right now I'm answering you with the help of the translator, in reality I read a lot of your story to practice the language, but in the cofi, I made an account and everything, but when you I was looking for you, you didn't appear and I couldn't find your story so I put it aside and waited for you to update here on fanfiction. but leaving all that aside. Regarding the options, I would honestly go with Natsu's options being that of a one man cell, and that Izumi be assigned as a Jonnin, as an excuse for Natsu to be able to operate more freely without having to answer to any Jonnin, in addition to the Being a free cell I could interact completely freely with the rest of the team without affecting the main cannon too much, it would only fill in some chapters, such as with situations in which Natsu interacts more with the people of the village, like that chapter in which he had dinner with the Nara family, it was entertaining and somewhat relaxing to read, I don't think it is necessary to invent any extra arc or villain for the story and for some excuse, it is obvious that this Natsu is at a very different level from the rest of the boys, in Personally, I would only give the excuse that he has the necessary powers to be anbu, that should be enough for the rest because Izumi is in charge of his "training".
PS: well I hope I have made myself understood, by the way I find it curious that one day before you released this update I felt like rereading your story and I did and it felt different to when I read it the first time, the curious thing is that it didn't It was the first time that after reading an abandoned story, the author showed signs of life the next day. Well, I send you greetings from Argentina and I hope to see how you proceed with the or in this case with the story of Naruto, greetings and I will be reading you.
4/13/2021 c1 Fate
Update
Update
1/19/2021 c1 Huawei
Update! It's been far too long!
Update! It's been far too long!
1/17/2021 c10 
10Thicc-Chungs
Really enjoyed the story. One thing that is getting at me is his demonic nature causing him pain. It's all good of it causing pain and hearing voices. But it wanting to kill I am confused. This Is way after Alvarez and zeref is dead with the book of end modified into protecting his family more and the killer intent is replaced do i dint get why it is still saying kill.
Anyway good story and hopefully it gets off hiatus soon
10Thicc-ChungsReally enjoyed the story. One thing that is getting at me is his demonic nature causing him pain. It's all good of it causing pain and hearing voices. But it wanting to kill I am confused. This Is way after Alvarez and zeref is dead with the book of end modified into protecting his family more and the killer intent is replaced do i dint get why it is still saying kill.
Anyway good story and hopefully it gets off hiatus soon
12/28/2020 c10 2Dragonlich42
I can't get to it for some reason it says the address for kiri can't be found
2Dragonlich42I can't get to it for some reason it says the address for kiri can't be found
12/18/2020 c10 Optiqs
This is a really good story! I hope you come back to it someday, but take your time! I’ll be waiting.
This is a really good story! I hope you come back to it someday, but take your time! I’ll be waiting.
10/3/2020 c3 nashdragneelbautista77
and also shouldn't genjutsu work on a person that doesn't have chakra?
and also shouldn't genjutsu work on a person that doesn't have chakra?