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4/11/2021 c1 angelesquilin19
update
2/5/2019 c2 TheArchmage1
nahmate the problem is ash is smarter then misty and brock here. where as the knowledge of imprinting would be common. so either you've made 2gym leaders morrons orrrrrr giant fucking assholes
looking like the first
2/3/2019 c2 1Ash Jason
Now its starting to get interesting... This story is going to be really good! Can't wait 4 the next chapter!
2/3/2019 c2 Guest
"Holy grilled Arceus served on a stick, that's a lot of moves"

Just this. This was way too funny. Kudos to you for creating that.
2/3/2019 c2 Amourshipper35
Yea serana has arrived aleast and I liked seeing ash train his Pokémon and seeing him train bulabuser and tell to him about eloving
1/11/2019 c1 25Arantxa2020
Oh yeah I remember that.
It really hadn’t been fair since Ash had been the one taking care of the egg and keeping Togepi safe before he was hatched. Then Misty just happens to be there and Togepi thinks she’s mom. Lol.
Good work
1/9/2019 c1 Stylepoints Zero
Literally none of what Farla said was relevant or constructive.
1/8/2019 c1 17Josh Spicer
For being called a "troll", Farla was (except for that bit about the Pokemon titles) absolutely correct on all other points and just because they're correcting people on the rules of writing, doesn't make them a troll.
1/4/2019 c1 1SunMoon6798
Honestly why is it always the newbie writers who react like snails when it comes to the Poketroll of Farla and their gang?
1/4/2019 c1 12Blue Glass Spear
Check your pms I tried to warn you about Farla the troll.

[Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.]

Those not true in the slightest. A paragraph is made up of actions and words not subjects.

[Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said.]

Dialogue is written as "Hello," She said and as "Hello." She said. Not what Farla is yelling.

[You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard.]

Pokemon names are actual names. They are not species names (Game Freak has said so) they are proper nouns and should be capitalized.
1/4/2019 c1 155Farla
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like trainer or professor or gym.
1/4/2019 c1 Fire4Heaven
Hey some advice, if you decide to make a Pokemon you will be targetted by a group of bullies who will falsely review your story. They go by the name "St Elmo's Fire", "Farla", "Reeds of Enki, "DLPxBeAsTxSnIpE", "Talarc", "thisispingas", "Act" and "AshxSelene Writer" and their alt "KawaiiLillipup". It's best to block them before they become a problem for you. Do not talk to them either for as they will send your PM down over at their blog.

Why they do it is rather simple. They think they know better then everyone else. Better to block them. Also spread the word and warn others ok.
1/4/2019 c1 1AnimeEevee13mjc
love it! Such a great idea for a story.

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