for The Oncoming Storm7/13 c1 Jose19
I am reviewing this story on the app since the site is down again.
This is my favorite Percy crossover on the site but Percy will struggling a great dealing especially with killing.
Demigods are used to dealing with foes by killing but Percy is dealing with civilized behavior who will not tolerate this.
Justice league is backed by the United Nations and they are not allowed to as they please.
Amanda is not on this version of Justice league but she will deal with Percy in a ruthless manner.
He is very lucky that Diana is taking the heat for his actions that can easily get him arrested.
The simple days of killing a foe without a problem is gone he has to answer to a stricter justice now.
I am reviewing this story on the app since the site is down again.
This is my favorite Percy crossover on the site but Percy will struggling a great dealing especially with killing.
Demigods are used to dealing with foes by killing but Percy is dealing with civilized behavior who will not tolerate this.
Justice league is backed by the United Nations and they are not allowed to as they please.
Amanda is not on this version of Justice league but she will deal with Percy in a ruthless manner.
He is very lucky that Diana is taking the heat for his actions that can easily get him arrested.
The simple days of killing a foe without a problem is gone he has to answer to a stricter justice now.
7/7 c29 Guest
Hey Greed have you've ever read salt and water, it's a Percy fic that I'm curious about your thoughts on that version? But I loved the chapter keep up the good shit dude
Hey Greed have you've ever read salt and water, it's a Percy fic that I'm curious about your thoughts on that version? But I loved the chapter keep up the good shit dude
6/27 c24 Antianti12
Last few chapters have been slow and boring with pov's of people I don't care about id much rather read Percy's pov. Plus the whole breaking up with her boyfriend which was done for percy obviously is pretty forced.
Last few chapters have been slow and boring with pov's of people I don't care about id much rather read Percy's pov. Plus the whole breaking up with her boyfriend which was done for percy obviously is pretty forced.
6/23 c1 Guest
Percy Jackson and the Olympians x Young Justice :
. El argumento creo que deberia dividirse y combinarse entre 2 partes : La trama y el argumento de la serie de libros de las Cronicas del Campamento Mestizo , es decir desde el Ladron del Rayo hasta el ultimo libro , es decir la saga de las Pruebas de Apolo y su ultimo libro , La Torre de Neron
. Y la otra parte los comics y las Temporadas de la serie animada de Young Justice
. Tambien combinar ambas series formando parte de y sucediendo en 1 mismo universo
. Conectar sus personajes , heroes , villanos , eventos y demas en 1 mismo mundo
. Esa cre que es la mejor forma de escribir este Crossover Fanfiction
Percy Jackson and the Olympians x Young Justice :
. El argumento creo que deberia dividirse y combinarse entre 2 partes : La trama y el argumento de la serie de libros de las Cronicas del Campamento Mestizo , es decir desde el Ladron del Rayo hasta el ultimo libro , es decir la saga de las Pruebas de Apolo y su ultimo libro , La Torre de Neron
. Y la otra parte los comics y las Temporadas de la serie animada de Young Justice
. Tambien combinar ambas series formando parte de y sucediendo en 1 mismo universo
. Conectar sus personajes , heroes , villanos , eventos y demas en 1 mismo mundo
. Esa cre que es la mejor forma de escribir este Crossover Fanfiction
6/23 c1 Guest
Espero que no sea ua de esas historias donde solamete incorporan 1 personaje
Espero que vays a incorporar todo el universo y mundo de personajes de PJ con Young Justice en 1 mismo univrso
Espero que no sea ua de esas historias donde solamete incorporan 1 personaje
Espero que vays a incorporar todo el universo y mundo de personajes de PJ con Young Justice en 1 mismo univrso
6/20 c29 Guest
Eh, it's good. Like the character death. Percy is a bit of a bitch though. Power scaling seems really off. Deathstroke is enhanced, but batman can duke it out with him without being instantly crippled. If Percy can spar with Superboy and Diana, he should be able to literally rip Slade's arms off.
I would have enjoyed the last fight so much more if she didn't get her arm up. He earned that win. Should have ended with taking her head - you built the struggle well, but choked it out before the payoff. That's the kind of plot armor that makes people scream about nerfing the MC though this was giving plot armor to an antagonist instead. It's good shit though. Keep on it.
Eh, it's good. Like the character death. Percy is a bit of a bitch though. Power scaling seems really off. Deathstroke is enhanced, but batman can duke it out with him without being instantly crippled. If Percy can spar with Superboy and Diana, he should be able to literally rip Slade's arms off.
I would have enjoyed the last fight so much more if she didn't get her arm up. He earned that win. Should have ended with taking her head - you built the struggle well, but choked it out before the payoff. That's the kind of plot armor that makes people scream about nerfing the MC though this was giving plot armor to an antagonist instead. It's good shit though. Keep on it.
6/16 c1 
3zSpirall
"Ever heard of string theory? This is a pocket dimension."
Artemis rolled her eyes.
Percy however paused, his mind racing as he suddenly began to think of the possibilities of magic and how, once he found a talented mage to help him, he could use it to his advantage. He may have no real talent for other forms of magic, those that weren't related to his Demigod abilities. He had tried to learn in Tartarus, but to no avail. But that didn't mean he that he couldn't find and work with some neutral or League mages.
Wait. Rereading. This got to me. Is Percy thinking of trying to find a magic user and find his world? Or maybe even Annabeth?
3zSpirall"Ever heard of string theory? This is a pocket dimension."
Artemis rolled her eyes.
Percy however paused, his mind racing as he suddenly began to think of the possibilities of magic and how, once he found a talented mage to help him, he could use it to his advantage. He may have no real talent for other forms of magic, those that weren't related to his Demigod abilities. He had tried to learn in Tartarus, but to no avail. But that didn't mean he that he couldn't find and work with some neutral or League mages.
Wait. Rereading. This got to me. Is Percy thinking of trying to find a magic user and find his world? Or maybe even Annabeth?
4/28 c29 CodeBlueIZ
The problem I think some people have with this story is simple, You're writing a 'Hero's Journey' for a character that has already completed said journey and you're starting from zero. Percy is more accomplished than pretty much everyone in the JL with the exception of maybe Superman but this story is structed like a Jump anime so Percy needs to build himself up so he can become the King of Heros or whatever.
You have a lot of talent as a writer and this story would be great had it been with an OC instead of an established character.
Also you get carried away with flaws, like a good MC is flawed however your version of Percy is nothing but flaws. It's kind of weird how much you stress his flaws but seem entirely blind to the flaws of character's like Diana, Canary etc.
The problem I think some people have with this story is simple, You're writing a 'Hero's Journey' for a character that has already completed said journey and you're starting from zero. Percy is more accomplished than pretty much everyone in the JL with the exception of maybe Superman but this story is structed like a Jump anime so Percy needs to build himself up so he can become the King of Heros or whatever.
You have a lot of talent as a writer and this story would be great had it been with an OC instead of an established character.
Also you get carried away with flaws, like a good MC is flawed however your version of Percy is nothing but flaws. It's kind of weird how much you stress his flaws but seem entirely blind to the flaws of character's like Diana, Canary etc.
4/8 c1 Nihilus's Apprentice
Percy hasn't been using his earthquake powers despite their effectiveness against armor. In fact, he hasn't been using them much at all. Spikes made of rock would probably have hampered the Apokalips lieutenant, and an earthquake kick/punch would have at least slightly damaged the armor. At least, imo.
The scene with the team was extremely awkward. Hate to say it, but it's true. Other than that and the slight inconsistency of Percy's powers, this is an amazing fic.
Percy hasn't been using his earthquake powers despite their effectiveness against armor. In fact, he hasn't been using them much at all. Spikes made of rock would probably have hampered the Apokalips lieutenant, and an earthquake kick/punch would have at least slightly damaged the armor. At least, imo.
The scene with the team was extremely awkward. Hate to say it, but it's true. Other than that and the slight inconsistency of Percy's powers, this is an amazing fic.
3/20 c1 Hestaka
Percy is thesingle strongest Demigod in history according to Rick Riordan, which means that you have to put him on the same level as Diana somehow. Yes you might have to make him stronger but keep in mind that this dude solo's Titans and Diana struggles with Area, put them on the same tier, it makes no sense for him to be this weak.
Percy is thesingle strongest Demigod in history according to Rick Riordan, which means that you have to put him on the same level as Diana somehow. Yes you might have to make him stronger but keep in mind that this dude solo's Titans and Diana struggles with Area, put them on the same tier, it makes no sense for him to be this weak.