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3/19/2019 c6 5Nonyaarb
this is fun
3/13/2019 c6 Tdog Smith
I really like this story I can't wait to see more chapters of it.
2/13/2019 c6 4Eritzzz
Oh my god this is amazing~! I can't wait for next chapter it too funny!
2/8/2019 c1 3sortakindamaybeperhaps
kirishima should be shanks tho TT~TT
mihawk is perfect for shouto
1/22/2019 c1 2Misadique
Uh i think that the one piece world is weirder
1/22/2019 c6 Suzululu4moe
Lol the development.
1/22/2019 c5 Suzululu4moe
Hmm I wonder if Mihawk will eventually ask momo to make him a sword
1/22/2019 c4 Suzululu4moe
Haha his apple.
1/22/2019 c3 Suzululu4moe
Lol the antics of the minis.

Well ihe could always use metal rulers that kids carry around . Perfectly legal n all .
1/19/2019 c6 Mr. Paw Paw
I will get to the problems here:

1. Chapters are short.

2. There needs to be explicit indication of who is talking.

3. Add a bit more to the chapters because it sounds much like having only 1/4 of the chapter which ties back to point 1.

This is a good story with originality to it. The three points are the major problems of the immediate nature. Those need to be addressed.

You don't need to add a lot of fluff, but the chapters do need to be much more developed. That is what is holding the story back. Go for 2500 words to begin with then try to work until it gets to 3000-4000 words. That is enough to make it a more developed story, and short enough so that it does not take up a lot of time.
1/19/2019 c1 Guest
MiHawk and shanks in the same universe is going to cause alot of problems for everyone. This is going to be fun
1/20/2019 c6 arinst2305
Next
1/20/2019 c6 Roberto Pelotudo
Good
1/18/2019 c6 Lil asthmatic
"Drinking till your legs dont work" -a captains quote! Probably
1/18/2019 c6 8KingKumacchi
How come Mihawk and Shanks didn't bother to hide their past names and say their present names? Do both Ochaco and Yuga know that those names are kind of like nicknames?
Also awaiting for the next chapter. Keep going!
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