for The Men From Onyx10/22 c30 Guest
I'm sorry but a huntman or huntress especially those who know ho to use there aura could easily beat a sparten in combat
I'm sorry but a huntman or huntress especially those who know ho to use there aura could easily beat a sparten in combat
8/11 c1 Bluepen
Get that ai generated comment about « woke » stuff out of my face
Making the big company ready to ditch their best asset based on petty profit try to buddy buddy the smaller company is bad writing and ooc so idk what ppl are on about
Get that ai generated comment about « woke » stuff out of my face
Making the big company ready to ditch their best asset based on petty profit try to buddy buddy the smaller company is bad writing and ooc so idk what ppl are on about
7/25/2023 c30 RDDash
Okay, if those people are truly from the military they would probably understand that the marine officers receive completely useless military swords and sabers. I mean why else would Atlesian specialist have one of those.
Okay, if those people are truly from the military they would probably understand that the marine officers receive completely useless military swords and sabers. I mean why else would Atlesian specialist have one of those.
7/24/2023 c25 RDDash
CDC running modern day faunus slavery feels kind of weird in this old fanfic, especially with all the mercenary type huntsmen that are paid to defend those camps. Feels like bashing for the sake of bashing. It's like Halo need an antagonist to apeal to faunus who live in Menagerie
CDC running modern day faunus slavery feels kind of weird in this old fanfic, especially with all the mercenary type huntsmen that are paid to defend those camps. Feels like bashing for the sake of bashing. It's like Halo need an antagonist to apeal to faunus who live in Menagerie
7/23/2023 c88 
1Argentum Messorem
While I'm sad that we won't get to see this story to it's completion, it was indeed one hell of a ride. I will definitely be rereading it. I salute you good sir. You made quite the masterpiece of a fic.
1Argentum MessoremWhile I'm sad that we won't get to see this story to it's completion, it was indeed one hell of a ride. I will definitely be rereading it. I salute you good sir. You made quite the masterpiece of a fic.
7/23/2023 c89 Argentum Messorem
While I'm sad that we won't get to see this story to it's completion, it was indeed on
While I'm sad that we won't get to see this story to it's completion, it was indeed on
6/20/2023 c47 Cooldude101011
Meadows wounded again. I wonder how many purple hearts full of clusters he has. Seriously, 5 to 10 minutes on the field and he gets injured.
Meadows wounded again. I wonder how many purple hearts full of clusters he has. Seriously, 5 to 10 minutes on the field and he gets injured.
6/19/2023 c30 Cooldude101011
So the obvious answer to the replacement Slipspace drive destroying itself in order to get back to real space is to make two replacements. 1 for the trip to realspace and once the melted remains are cleaned out you mount the second and use that to go home. Simples
So the obvious answer to the replacement Slipspace drive destroying itself in order to get back to real space is to make two replacements. 1 for the trip to realspace and once the melted remains are cleaned out you mount the second and use that to go home. Simples
6/19/2023 c27 Cooldude101011
“Hydration Equipment Operation”? I assume Bradford is referring to the coffee machine?
“Hydration Equipment Operation”? I assume Bradford is referring to the coffee machine?
6/19/2023 c22 Cooldude101011
To chapter 21:
Richard explaining what happened to Ozpin/the-press what happened to their ftl drive:
“Well, our faster than light drive had a malfunction that sent us far away from home, and the drive kinda… melted…”
To chapter 21:
Richard explaining what happened to Ozpin/the-press what happened to their ftl drive:
“Well, our faster than light drive had a malfunction that sent us far away from home, and the drive kinda… melted…”
1/29/2023 c89 Hasf11
After all the adventure abd misadventures, the story finally ends. It doesnt matter that it is just a framework for it, i appreciate the closure and i am very satisfied with the fanfic; very satisfied with all of the chapters.
After all the adventure abd misadventures, the story finally ends. It doesnt matter that it is just a framework for it, i appreciate the closure and i am very satisfied with the fanfic; very satisfied with all of the chapters.
1/2/2023 c89 ODSTFRymann
This story would have been great to see finished I appreciate you for giving us closure on it I hope to see more from you and I do hope life treats you well
This story would have been great to see finished I appreciate you for giving us closure on it I hope to see more from you and I do hope life treats you well
12/9/2022 c6 Stormzy
Ah that's why I stopped reading this. Amazing writing and plot but I just can't with the 5 million OC characters. I want to read a Halo crossover with actual characters, at this point it's like its own book with Halo technology. Though as I said I still respect the great writing.
Ah that's why I stopped reading this. Amazing writing and plot but I just can't with the 5 million OC characters. I want to read a Halo crossover with actual characters, at this point it's like its own book with Halo technology. Though as I said I still respect the great writing.
11/16/2022 c89 HelpingHand
I always assumed there would be more chapters. I just had to wait patiently. So I would go off to read other things and come back to catch up on the chapters that had built up. When I saw the story was updated only a month ago I thought the story was still getting new chapters. So I read from where I left off and enjoyed the story like I always did.
Seeing the start of 89 was devastating for me, I needed to take a few days to post this. I have been reading this story since chapter 20 or something I think. It has been at least a year, my memory isn’t good sometimes but I can remember the story pretty well. The characters were something I enjoyed seeing again and it always made me happy when I checked in with the story and saw there were new chapters. I want to say I didn’t get teary eyed when I got to the end of the notes but I feel too empty to lie. I guess the story would have ended one way or another but it feels so sudden.
I haven’t seen anything of RWBY past Volume 5 as I didn’t want to be hurt again. Fan fictions are the only thing that keep me interested in RWBY. A few chapters ago you said the show was trying to kill itself, I don’t know what you mean by that as I don’t know what is going on right now. But what I do know is that it is stories like yours that make me feel like people care about the world and characters. You could write the show better and I liked getting a glimpse of that through your story.
What other stories could I read? The only other I know like this one is Dust and Echoes. It is good but that is the only other RWBY and Halo crossover that has a feeling of the different worlds working together. And it just isn’t like yours. Nothing is like The Men From Onyx.
Few people would read stories I wrote. I did have some thoughts on these notes though.
Not a fan of the gods showing up and just dealing with Salem, it seems a bit contrived. I think it would have been better if someone at least talked to them and convinced them to get rid of her and leave. Maybe Ben or Ruby. Really Ben could be interesting as he wouldn’t be able to fight but have to use words something he has struggled with at times.
Would have liked moments of humans and faunus working together during the battle of Vale. And for Richard to say something that makes it happen. Maybe comparing the SDC and White Fang like I mentioned once. How sometimes things need to be spelled out to people.
You could have made Curie and Penny human with the staff of creation. Or used it for something else like a way to make smart AIs that don’t age. You didn’t say if Penny ended up with anyone. Or if Blake got to reconnect with her parents.
Wait, if they threw the relic of knowledge into the sun, what happens if it didn’t get destroyed? Wouldn’t it go to the center of the sun? So if all four were thrown into the sun they would meet in the center meaning they were brought together thus summoning the gods.
I guess I’m talking for the sake of talking now. It doesn’t matter with the story over. A part of me hopes one day you will come back to finish the story, I just have to be patient like I was before. But more of me feels you made it clear you wouldn’t be continuing. I guess someone else could finish the story, I’ve seen that happen before. Maybe this SardonicEffigy person you mentioned in your notes, whoever they are. I’m not as active as I was on this site as I needed to cut back on reading to get things done. So I doubt I would know if someone finished the story.
You didn’t say why you stopped so I guess it is personal. But you did give me a lot of entertainment over the years and made me happy when I needed it. So I wish you luck on your journey through life. Whatever you are planning to do.
I always assumed there would be more chapters. I just had to wait patiently. So I would go off to read other things and come back to catch up on the chapters that had built up. When I saw the story was updated only a month ago I thought the story was still getting new chapters. So I read from where I left off and enjoyed the story like I always did.
Seeing the start of 89 was devastating for me, I needed to take a few days to post this. I have been reading this story since chapter 20 or something I think. It has been at least a year, my memory isn’t good sometimes but I can remember the story pretty well. The characters were something I enjoyed seeing again and it always made me happy when I checked in with the story and saw there were new chapters. I want to say I didn’t get teary eyed when I got to the end of the notes but I feel too empty to lie. I guess the story would have ended one way or another but it feels so sudden.
I haven’t seen anything of RWBY past Volume 5 as I didn’t want to be hurt again. Fan fictions are the only thing that keep me interested in RWBY. A few chapters ago you said the show was trying to kill itself, I don’t know what you mean by that as I don’t know what is going on right now. But what I do know is that it is stories like yours that make me feel like people care about the world and characters. You could write the show better and I liked getting a glimpse of that through your story.
What other stories could I read? The only other I know like this one is Dust and Echoes. It is good but that is the only other RWBY and Halo crossover that has a feeling of the different worlds working together. And it just isn’t like yours. Nothing is like The Men From Onyx.
Few people would read stories I wrote. I did have some thoughts on these notes though.
Not a fan of the gods showing up and just dealing with Salem, it seems a bit contrived. I think it would have been better if someone at least talked to them and convinced them to get rid of her and leave. Maybe Ben or Ruby. Really Ben could be interesting as he wouldn’t be able to fight but have to use words something he has struggled with at times.
Would have liked moments of humans and faunus working together during the battle of Vale. And for Richard to say something that makes it happen. Maybe comparing the SDC and White Fang like I mentioned once. How sometimes things need to be spelled out to people.
You could have made Curie and Penny human with the staff of creation. Or used it for something else like a way to make smart AIs that don’t age. You didn’t say if Penny ended up with anyone. Or if Blake got to reconnect with her parents.
Wait, if they threw the relic of knowledge into the sun, what happens if it didn’t get destroyed? Wouldn’t it go to the center of the sun? So if all four were thrown into the sun they would meet in the center meaning they were brought together thus summoning the gods.
I guess I’m talking for the sake of talking now. It doesn’t matter with the story over. A part of me hopes one day you will come back to finish the story, I just have to be patient like I was before. But more of me feels you made it clear you wouldn’t be continuing. I guess someone else could finish the story, I’ve seen that happen before. Maybe this SardonicEffigy person you mentioned in your notes, whoever they are. I’m not as active as I was on this site as I needed to cut back on reading to get things done. So I doubt I would know if someone finished the story.
You didn’t say why you stopped so I guess it is personal. But you did give me a lot of entertainment over the years and made me happy when I needed it. So I wish you luck on your journey through life. Whatever you are planning to do.