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12/9/2022 c6 Stormzy
Ah that's why I stopped reading this. Amazing writing and plot but I just can't with the 5 million OC characters. I want to read a Halo crossover with actual characters, at this point it's like its own book with Halo technology. Though as I said I still respect the great writing.
11/16/2022 c89 HelpingHand
I always assumed there would be more chapters. I just had to wait patiently. So I would go off to read other things and come back to catch up on the chapters that had built up. When I saw the story was updated only a month ago I thought the story was still getting new chapters. So I read from where I left off and enjoyed the story like I always did.

Seeing the start of 89 was devastating for me, I needed to take a few days to post this. I have been reading this story since chapter 20 or something I think. It has been at least a year, my memory isn’t good sometimes but I can remember the story pretty well. The characters were something I enjoyed seeing again and it always made me happy when I checked in with the story and saw there were new chapters. I want to say I didn’t get teary eyed when I got to the end of the notes but I feel too empty to lie. I guess the story would have ended one way or another but it feels so sudden.

I haven’t seen anything of RWBY past Volume 5 as I didn’t want to be hurt again. Fan fictions are the only thing that keep me interested in RWBY. A few chapters ago you said the show was trying to kill itself, I don’t know what you mean by that as I don’t know what is going on right now. But what I do know is that it is stories like yours that make me feel like people care about the world and characters. You could write the show better and I liked getting a glimpse of that through your story.

What other stories could I read? The only other I know like this one is Dust and Echoes. It is good but that is the only other RWBY and Halo crossover that has a feeling of the different worlds working together. And it just isn’t like yours. Nothing is like The Men From Onyx.

Few people would read stories I wrote. I did have some thoughts on these notes though.

Not a fan of the gods showing up and just dealing with Salem, it seems a bit contrived. I think it would have been better if someone at least talked to them and convinced them to get rid of her and leave. Maybe Ben or Ruby. Really Ben could be interesting as he wouldn’t be able to fight but have to use words something he has struggled with at times.

Would have liked moments of humans and faunus working together during the battle of Vale. And for Richard to say something that makes it happen. Maybe comparing the SDC and White Fang like I mentioned once. How sometimes things need to be spelled out to people.

You could have made Curie and Penny human with the staff of creation. Or used it for something else like a way to make smart AIs that don’t age. You didn’t say if Penny ended up with anyone. Or if Blake got to reconnect with her parents.

Wait, if they threw the relic of knowledge into the sun, what happens if it didn’t get destroyed? Wouldn’t it go to the center of the sun? So if all four were thrown into the sun they would meet in the center meaning they were brought together thus summoning the gods.

I guess I’m talking for the sake of talking now. It doesn’t matter with the story over. A part of me hopes one day you will come back to finish the story, I just have to be patient like I was before. But more of me feels you made it clear you wouldn’t be continuing. I guess someone else could finish the story, I’ve seen that happen before. Maybe this SardonicEffigy person you mentioned in your notes, whoever they are. I’m not as active as I was on this site as I needed to cut back on reading to get things done. So I doubt I would know if someone finished the story.

You didn’t say why you stopped so I guess it is personal. But you did give me a lot of entertainment over the years and made me happy when I needed it. So I wish you luck on your journey through life. Whatever you are planning to do.
11/6/2022 c89 1Jeremy scout
It's a shame you couldn't finish this but I understand why. Regardless, I still enjoyed the vision you had for this story to go and damn it if I could adapt it I would but I'm busy with my own stuff. It was a helluva ride and I'm glad I was with you for a lot of it. At the very least, I can look forward to seeing Meadows get mentioned in your novel. Any idea on when that may be coming out so I can make a note of it?

Thanks for giving us this amazing story, and I truly do wish you the best in your future endeavors.
11/1/2022 c89 SpudyPotato
Damn, can't believe it's over. Glad to get some closure though.
10/27/2022 c89 carter162020
awww
10/22/2022 c89 Guest
Jesus Christ man, it's been one hell of a ride from start to finish. (Although how the hell is tyrian present when Ben killed him earlier?) You absolutely killed it, but make damn sure you take some time for yourself. Hell, if you're looking for another crossover idea or anything like that, you have some leeway with meadows, but I'd bet you did that on purpose. Just take some time for you dude, you've more then earned it. Although this may sound selfish of me to ask, please don't let this be the end.

On a more critical note though, (granted you never got the chance to actually explore this) it does seem somewhat... Random to say that characters who never really changed (Looking at Ben specifically) fall in love and all that and Ruby's "friendship" with him causing the silver eyes to trigger. Those 2 we're acquaintances at best and I thought Ben took Ruby for being annoying while Ruby didn't really have much reason to actually hang around. Certain things of that nature (and curie towards the tail end) seemed incredibly spontaneous, but admittedly I can't write love for the life of me so I can't really judge there anyway. From where I was standing, it looked like you were experimenting a bit and playing with character dynamics that didn't really look like they were there at all at the time. Although I'd wonder if you meant to build up on those later on,

Although despite my criticism, to say I'm anything less then content and satisfied would be a blatant lie. I enjoyed it start to finish and I only dropped my 2 cents on this roller coaster after this last page. Also, thank you for dropping your notes in here for how things would've went, it's pretty much never we see anything like that for any other story.
10/22/2022 c89 1HeroHunter2
it's sad to see that you won't be finishing the story. Hopefully everything is ok on your end bud. Been great tagging along this far with you.
10/22/2022 c89 scottusa1
What a way to finish a story. It's a shame you couldn't finish it, but I'm satisfied with what's left. It's nice knowing what was going to happen and how it would end. No mysteries for us!

It's kind of funny, when I got the notification that you released a new chapter, it got me thinking on how the story was eventually going to end. I didn't think it was actually going to be the last chapter you posted for this story.

Thank you for making it this far. I've had a great time reading your story. Best of luck to you and all of your future endeavors.

Have a great day. Laters.
10/21/2022 c89 Guest
Kinda sad to see the story be abandoned, but still am really glad you put in the effort to give us the shortened version of things just to give us closure.
10/19/2022 c89 6Zooms
While it is a shame to see it unfinished. At least we can imagine how it all plays out thanks to the outline. Thank you for everything.
10/19/2022 c89 6ZombieSlayers
Damn it's a shame you aren't going to finish this fully. What a rush I got just reading the basic outline.
10/19/2022 c89 Atomic R4y
Sad it couldn't properly end but I like where it would have gone. Though I think I'm more saddened that Richard never thought he atoned. He worked far too hard to not be accepted into a peaceful afterlife.
10/19/2022 c89 Guest
Damn, what a ride. You're right about those abandoned fics, but thanks for taking the time to give us some closure. Wish you luck on your original works!
10/19/2022 c89 1VodMesa
The End... ?
"There'll Be another time..."
10/19/2022 c89 SpaceCommander-09
Neeeeeaaaaaaaat
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