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35SilverflowerXRavenpaw
Hey hey hey! This chapter was cool, and it's really smart that you put that note there. I've had chapters get ignored before due to the 24-hour limit on updating. Now we'll all know how many chapters to check for!
Nite only got a two-line POV (which is totally fine), but at that point, you may as well not include him. Not to judge at all, but it might be easier just to give him a longer POV later and not give him a train ride, since he really didn't get anything here. All of the other tributes seemed fine, though some of them were awfully sassy.
35SilverflowerXRavenpawHey hey hey! This chapter was cool, and it's really smart that you put that note there. I've had chapters get ignored before due to the 24-hour limit on updating. Now we'll all know how many chapters to check for!
Nite only got a two-line POV (which is totally fine), but at that point, you may as well not include him. Not to judge at all, but it might be easier just to give him a longer POV later and not give him a train ride, since he really didn't get anything here. All of the other tributes seemed fine, though some of them were awfully sassy.
4/6/2019 c27 6karameiwaku
This is a fun premise and I'm looking forward to following along in morbid fascination. Since I'm too late to join the Districts as SYOT, I guess that makes me a Capital Citizen, and potential sponsor. Here's to the Games, and may the odds...
6karameiwakuThis is a fun premise and I'm looking forward to following along in morbid fascination. Since I'm too late to join the Districts as SYOT, I guess that makes me a Capital Citizen, and potential sponsor. Here's to the Games, and may the odds...
4/6/2019 c27 4Kristy LeeKL
What did happen when the train stopped? A small rebellion?
It's sad that Cascade and Jordan don't want to work together. I guess it would be too obvious if each District tag-teamed.
Spark better not underestimate Rusty. Sounds like he's got something up his sleeve.
I'm glad we got to hear about Bucket. I have a feeling the truth will come out sometime.
4Kristy LeeKLWhat did happen when the train stopped? A small rebellion?
It's sad that Cascade and Jordan don't want to work together. I guess it would be too obvious if each District tag-teamed.
Spark better not underestimate Rusty. Sounds like he's got something up his sleeve.
I'm glad we got to hear about Bucket. I have a feeling the truth will come out sometime.
4/6/2019 c27 35SilverflowerXRavenpaw
I have an older brother names Axel 10/10 would name my child that
Anyways, this was another nice chapter! You keep things pretty short, which I like. I can't really *do* long chapters. It's nice to get a little slice of each tribute and hop to the next one.
35SilverflowerXRavenpawI have an older brother names Axel 10/10 would name my child that
Anyways, this was another nice chapter! You keep things pretty short, which I like. I can't really *do* long chapters. It's nice to get a little slice of each tribute and hop to the next one.
4/5/2019 c26 SilverflowerXRavenpaw
Hm... This much romance does not bode well. I fear an early split in the Career Pack, and possibly some hard to follow up on plot-lines. Not so say you're a bad writer, but I'd definitely plot this out ahead of time.
Still, these train rides were fun! I low-key forgot about some of these guys, so it's good to see them again. My opinions are mostly unchanged, though I still don't like the LGBTQ thing. It's like... 3100 AD. We advanced. Chill.
Hm... This much romance does not bode well. I fear an early split in the Career Pack, and possibly some hard to follow up on plot-lines. Not so say you're a bad writer, but I'd definitely plot this out ahead of time.
Still, these train rides were fun! I low-key forgot about some of these guys, so it's good to see them again. My opinions are mostly unchanged, though I still don't like the LGBTQ thing. It's like... 3100 AD. We advanced. Chill.
4/5/2019 c26 4Kristy LeeKL
I like being able to see the other tributes perspective of fellow districts. You only listed four tributes that wouldn't be good with District 1, not six, though.
4Kristy LeeKLI like being able to see the other tributes perspective of fellow districts. You only listed four tributes that wouldn't be good with District 1, not six, though.
4/5/2019 c25 35SilverflowerXRavenpaw
OOF I feel you. Reapings get so hard. I can't be bothered to write my last one right now, even though that characters are neat.
Aurora seems neat enough. It stinks that you got bored, since her grandmother would be something neat to look into later. Maybe she'll get more screentime later on, I suppose. I'm super excited to see than train rides and everything, and I can't wait for the Games to begin!
35SilverflowerXRavenpawOOF I feel you. Reapings get so hard. I can't be bothered to write my last one right now, even though that characters are neat.
Aurora seems neat enough. It stinks that you got bored, since her grandmother would be something neat to look into later. Maybe she'll get more screentime later on, I suppose. I'm super excited to see than train rides and everything, and I can't wait for the Games to begin!
4/5/2019 c24 SilverflowerXRavenpaw
Hey hey hey! This was a cool chapter :) Remember, though - if you update more than once in a day, people won't get notifications, so they straight-up might not notice that you've updated. It might be good to make a note later on.
Beautiful seems cool enough. Simple. Chill. A basic Career, I'm guessing. Rose seems like a pretty normal Reaped Career so far, but hey, this is the Reapings. You never see much during them.
Personally I don't like LGBT stuff in THG because I feel like we'd have solved it by then. Like, it would exist yeah, but I feel like no one would care.
Hey hey hey! This was a cool chapter :) Remember, though - if you update more than once in a day, people won't get notifications, so they straight-up might not notice that you've updated. It might be good to make a note later on.
Beautiful seems cool enough. Simple. Chill. A basic Career, I'm guessing. Rose seems like a pretty normal Reaped Career so far, but hey, this is the Reapings. You never see much during them.
Personally I don't like LGBT stuff in THG because I feel like we'd have solved it by then. Like, it would exist yeah, but I feel like no one would care.
4/5/2019 c24 4Kristy LeeKL
I didn't realize Beautiful was a boy's name.
I wonder if the LGBT march has something to do with why this Game is forgotten?
4Kristy LeeKLI didn't realize Beautiful was a boy's name.
I wonder if the LGBT march has something to do with why this Game is forgotten?
4/5/2019 c23 Kristy LeeKL
This was a bittersweet chapter. I'm rooting for Miles because of his kindness and intelligence. I hope Millie gains a friend.
This was a bittersweet chapter. I'm rooting for Miles because of his kindness and intelligence. I hope Millie gains a friend.
4/4/2019 c23 35SilverflowerXRavenpaw
Whew! These two look like Bloodbath material, but most Twelves do - there's always a chance they'll be cool underdogs. I don't get a lot from them yet, other than the fact that they're ~sweet children~, but they're bound to have more than just that to them. I'm sure we'll see the rest when it's past the Reapings.
This was a nice chapter, as always. You got in a lot of stuff pretty concisely. Your grammar could be a little iffy at times, but it isn't much of a distraction, and it isn't too notable, so don't worry too much about it. I look forward to your next update _
35SilverflowerXRavenpawWhew! These two look like Bloodbath material, but most Twelves do - there's always a chance they'll be cool underdogs. I don't get a lot from them yet, other than the fact that they're ~sweet children~, but they're bound to have more than just that to them. I'm sure we'll see the rest when it's past the Reapings.
This was a nice chapter, as always. You got in a lot of stuff pretty concisely. Your grammar could be a little iffy at times, but it isn't much of a distraction, and it isn't too notable, so don't worry too much about it. I look forward to your next update _
3/30/2019 c20 Guest
I've never met a guy like Nite Minous before. I can't wait to see more of him!
I've never met a guy like Nite Minous before. I can't wait to see more of him!
3/31/2019 c22 SilverflowerXRavenpaw
I mean tbh I'm pretty straight but I still crush on girls (it's a terrible thing living in a conservative family).
Ambrosia is so cute I hope she dies. She don't deserve Jon. Or comes back and just flips off her whole family. "I'm rich, witch."
Nathan seems cool too! I've seen this sort of thing before, but it's still cool.
This chapter was pretty good! There are a couple of grammar mistakes but honestly? Most people don't care. It's a solid development of the characters, though Nathan seemed to get a bit less screentime. I'm sure you have your reasons, though _
I mean tbh I'm pretty straight but I still crush on girls (it's a terrible thing living in a conservative family).
Ambrosia is so cute I hope she dies. She don't deserve Jon. Or comes back and just flips off her whole family. "I'm rich, witch."
Nathan seems cool too! I've seen this sort of thing before, but it's still cool.
This chapter was pretty good! There are a couple of grammar mistakes but honestly? Most people don't care. It's a solid development of the characters, though Nathan seemed to get a bit less screentime. I'm sure you have your reasons, though _
3/31/2019 c21 SilverflowerXRavenpaw
These two seem cool enough! It's... a bit odd that Dad never mentioned his dog, but whatevs. To each their own.
Lukas having autism sure is interesting. I could totally see someone not acting their age due to that, and I'm glad he wasn't the one that got Reaped.
Btw, if you update more than once in a day, people don't get updated. Some people might not notice your update.
These two seem cool enough! It's... a bit odd that Dad never mentioned his dog, but whatevs. To each their own.
Lukas having autism sure is interesting. I could totally see someone not acting their age due to that, and I'm glad he wasn't the one that got Reaped.
Btw, if you update more than once in a day, people don't get updated. Some people might not notice your update.
3/31/2019 c22 4Kristy LeeKL
I'm happy for the positive turn of events with Nathan's parents!
I knew Ambrosia disliked Jon, but I didn't realize she would go so far as to try that. You almost make me want to see a chapter about "Meanwhile in the Districts".
4Kristy LeeKLI'm happy for the positive turn of events with Nathan's parents!
I knew Ambrosia disliked Jon, but I didn't realize she would go so far as to try that. You almost make me want to see a chapter about "Meanwhile in the Districts".