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2/1/2019 c1 13Blades of Chance
[Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said.]

Dialogue is written as "Hello," She said or as "Hello," She said. Not what Farla says it is.
2/1/2019 c1 150Farla
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.

Capitalize "I".

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.
2/1/2019 c1 GenX567
Spencer just being a total asshole. It's best to block him.
2/1/2019 c1 1Spencer841
Unfortunately, I can't focus on the story when it's all a single giant paragraph. You need to start a new paragraph with a new subject, as well as new speakers.
1/31/2019 c1 Stylepoints Zero
[but serious measures need to be taken at this point to put an end to the nonsense. Once this bully is gone, we can go back to having a peaceful community. I’m only going to post this once. I won’t be replying to any of the inevitable bullsheit that will surely follow this review)

This is actually rather sad that Farla gang created a bit just to take down a user. Here allow me to set things straight.

[They review to give constructive criticism. The only drama comes from this user and all of the other sockpuppets of Hybrid of Fate.]

They don't. In fact they actually bully new users. Finally there is no sockpuppets. This is because and I kid you not, the admins disproved in a long time ago.

[Actually, they don’t “demand” anything. And the only reason why so many people hate them is because of a) much of the users here are too young to handle criticism maturely, and b) the constant slander by this user and their sockpuppets.]

This is actually false. They have fought with the new writers of many fanfiction stories in their pms. People hate them because they a) refuse to stop doing in to many users who tell them no, and B) they post pms publicly.

Hybrid is only calling them out for it and is being targeted by them to the point they lie.

[Because they DO honestly think it would help. Constructive criticism is good.]

It doesn't help and they are not giving out concritic. They are only attacking users.

[ don’t agree with everything the mentioned users do, but I’ve never seen anything from these users that I would consider “bullying”. Harsh, yes, but concrit is sometimes harsh. Either learn to maturely deal with it or don’t post stories.]

Actually they admit to posting users one publicly, don't stop targetting them when they post stories, and have attempted a slander campaign on a user who call them out. It's utter bs.

[group of sockpuppets. And there isn’t any proof that the admins did what this user is claiming.]

Actually its not sockpuppets. The user that gave you warnings had a story for Pete's sakes and their claims hold no wait. Finally the admins did tell Farla to pull it down in fact you can tell this user is lying as they are using guest reviews.

[Both guys are the same person. And it still being January is good for those in favor of constructive criticism.]

No they are not. Fire4heaven has actively fought with Everyone else and actually told Hybrid to kill themselves.

Also Isn't it suspicious that a guest reviewer would come by like this? It's a troll.
1/31/2019 c1 Fire4Heaven
Yeah you should lisyen to the other guy. Like right now its still janaury
1/31/2019 c1 1SunMoon6798
Hey, welcome. So look a warning given you are writing a Pokemon story. Farla, St Elmo's Fire, Talarc, and a few others are known bullies on this site who review only to destroy stories and promate drama.

They wil push ytheir believes dopwn your throat, demand you redo your story to fit theirwants and no, they are the super minority and hated by the fandom. They also tend to post pms publically so responding to them is ill advised.

They start off with a dislcaimerabout honestly thinking it would help. It doesn't they want you to be screwed over as they complain about trival nonsense that got their panties in a twist.

They think Pokemon is slavery. That you should capitalize the way they want. Oh, and they give out false dialogue formatting. Don't get me started on Arceus.

Oh and if they say that they are being bullied. Know that they are lying as they been doiong it too this fandom for years now and are just pissed that a group are working to stop it. The admins told them to knock it off.

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