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for Inheritance cycle The rewrite

1/17/2020 c1 5SunnyHunnyBunny
I REALLY like this! I HOPE YOU KEEP WRITING!
4/7/2019 c1 4eragon95159
Continue and update please.
2/20/2019 c1 1ippon
I will not lie, this is pretty bad.

You really need a beta. There is no story flow. The writing feels wooden (I picked up a stone, I packed up camp, I shoot a buck.)

And I really dont get the idea behind the story. So he gets his elf upgrade at the start, dont see how that matters all that much.

My tipps:

1) Read your story multiple times before posting. Maybe read it out loud, so you can find sentences that dont make sense, or dont flow right.

2) Find someone who reads your story and gives you feed back/corrects your mistakes

Good luck with your story!
2/17/2019 c1 Myrek
Okay, so you need a beta. You REALLY need one.

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