for Chronicles of the Siren War5/20/2023 c84 CruiserIBarelyKnowHer
You made a mistake of having Z23 address Bismarck with 'Heer' and not with 'Frau' when she received U556's letter.
You made a mistake of having Z23 address Bismarck with 'Heer' and not with 'Frau' when she received U556's letter.
4/5/2023 c83 
3KaijuKnight
Wow! Simply incredible! I had been putting this one off for a while now. Wanted to have the head space to enjoy a good tale, and oh boy! You had me hooked from the first chapter.
Thorson is a great lead. The way you threw him into the deep end and just forced him to cope was perfect. He's imperfect but earnest all the way through. It's funny, cause in these circumstances, I think you've captured a logical scenario that realistically emulates the game. Basically, you did a great job bringing a "Waifu Collector" to life in a believable way. And sure he may have a lot of them in his bed, but he is not actively pursuing all of them.
I love way too many of your characterizations to give proper credit to all of them. Laffey was hilarious from the get go, but she was the first to start showing the side of things too. Her drinking and how her reasons for drinking evolve throughout the story are always tear-jerker moments.
Pennsylvania's strong personality is awesome. She's got all the guts and still retains her feelings and femininity, which is a stark counterpoint to Tennessee, who uses her strength to keep everyone at arms length and stifles all her emotions at the same time. The character development for Tennessee towards the end was also both a gut punch and amazing storytelling all in one. I honestly wasn't sure if she was going to survive that mistake!
The way you presented the Sakura empire's motivations and the individual drive of each person fighting for that empire is also a high point. You kept Akagi's drive to resurrect Amagi, but also tied in some of the strength obsessed condescension present when she was in at the head of the empire. Honestly, you did capture an aspect of the game's story that I've never really been able to make sense of. The cruelty and drive present in 'empire ruling' Akagi always struck me as a sharp difference to 'Fleet' Akagi's predatory pursuit and devotion to the commander. Almost like the two were completely different people. The way you presented it makes sense and gives the commander and Kaga something to rally together with.
Personality wise, I prefer Kaga over Akagi and that is still true in your pages. Kaga is still stern, calculating and in control, but is still the one who allows herself to be pushed to the side to support her sister and uphold her promises to Amagi. Your portrayal of her is awesome and even more awesome once the empire is defeated and she must rise above her shame. I cackled when Nagato suggested the marriage between Kaga and the Commander, and while that particular arch seems to be laid to rest, their interactions since give me the feeling that she will be joining the ranks of his lovers before too long. Will Akagi come for the ride or will she be left out in the cold? Honestly, I'll enjoy the drama either way.
Downes has been favorite for me. The way she acts with such confidence, but still has all the human insecurities is great. The friendship between her and Tennessee is awesome too. And don't get me started on how sweet her relationship with Ooshiro is! Diabetic coma every time!
The mixed shrine was a great idea, as was the motivation you created that lead to its creation. Though I have to admit, some of the hardest parts of the story are some of the best written. Every time a character dies, especially when you capture the despair of war and powerlessness when death seems inevitable. You make this war seem real and it makes the deaths seem all the more real. Keep it up. And I'll do my best to not hold Edinburgh's death against you. lol
Overall, a solid story with great characters that I will follow till the end. You have earned a fan!
KaijuKnight, Out!
3KaijuKnightWow! Simply incredible! I had been putting this one off for a while now. Wanted to have the head space to enjoy a good tale, and oh boy! You had me hooked from the first chapter.
Thorson is a great lead. The way you threw him into the deep end and just forced him to cope was perfect. He's imperfect but earnest all the way through. It's funny, cause in these circumstances, I think you've captured a logical scenario that realistically emulates the game. Basically, you did a great job bringing a "Waifu Collector" to life in a believable way. And sure he may have a lot of them in his bed, but he is not actively pursuing all of them.
I love way too many of your characterizations to give proper credit to all of them. Laffey was hilarious from the get go, but she was the first to start showing the side of things too. Her drinking and how her reasons for drinking evolve throughout the story are always tear-jerker moments.
Pennsylvania's strong personality is awesome. She's got all the guts and still retains her feelings and femininity, which is a stark counterpoint to Tennessee, who uses her strength to keep everyone at arms length and stifles all her emotions at the same time. The character development for Tennessee towards the end was also both a gut punch and amazing storytelling all in one. I honestly wasn't sure if she was going to survive that mistake!
The way you presented the Sakura empire's motivations and the individual drive of each person fighting for that empire is also a high point. You kept Akagi's drive to resurrect Amagi, but also tied in some of the strength obsessed condescension present when she was in at the head of the empire. Honestly, you did capture an aspect of the game's story that I've never really been able to make sense of. The cruelty and drive present in 'empire ruling' Akagi always struck me as a sharp difference to 'Fleet' Akagi's predatory pursuit and devotion to the commander. Almost like the two were completely different people. The way you presented it makes sense and gives the commander and Kaga something to rally together with.
Personality wise, I prefer Kaga over Akagi and that is still true in your pages. Kaga is still stern, calculating and in control, but is still the one who allows herself to be pushed to the side to support her sister and uphold her promises to Amagi. Your portrayal of her is awesome and even more awesome once the empire is defeated and she must rise above her shame. I cackled when Nagato suggested the marriage between Kaga and the Commander, and while that particular arch seems to be laid to rest, their interactions since give me the feeling that she will be joining the ranks of his lovers before too long. Will Akagi come for the ride or will she be left out in the cold? Honestly, I'll enjoy the drama either way.
Downes has been favorite for me. The way she acts with such confidence, but still has all the human insecurities is great. The friendship between her and Tennessee is awesome too. And don't get me started on how sweet her relationship with Ooshiro is! Diabetic coma every time!
The mixed shrine was a great idea, as was the motivation you created that lead to its creation. Though I have to admit, some of the hardest parts of the story are some of the best written. Every time a character dies, especially when you capture the despair of war and powerlessness when death seems inevitable. You make this war seem real and it makes the deaths seem all the more real. Keep it up. And I'll do my best to not hold Edinburgh's death against you. lol
Overall, a solid story with great characters that I will follow till the end. You have earned a fan!
KaijuKnight, Out!
2/17/2023 c83 greendagger9900
So happy to see another chapter! So happy to see Spite and Vampire again. Maybe Sheffield or Bel, or maybe Illustrious will join the commander permanently? And also hopefully we see Graf soon and she can get some TLC from the commander. Can’t wait to see what happens next in the coming chapters.
So happy to see another chapter! So happy to see Spite and Vampire again. Maybe Sheffield or Bel, or maybe Illustrious will join the commander permanently? And also hopefully we see Graf soon and she can get some TLC from the commander. Can’t wait to see what happens next in the coming chapters.
2/16/2023 c83 1Cemalidor
Nearly missed this one in my personal confusion/drama as i seemingly missed the one before. :D
So the "crew" finally made it to Brittania and things are escalating quickly i'd not being as "carefree/easy" as mostly descripted is a given the frame of story and the mounting loses of her sisters. Nice touch there with Sheffield and the link to the Iris "Resistance" is easy enough to believe/see there. :D
And on regard on that little vampiric speech i nearly expected to meet Duke of York, completely forget lil Vampyre. :XDD Not sure if the first is stil active/alive, but at least i can't remember her being named as killed from the top of my head.
On unrelated notes i still foster some (minor) hope that perhaps some of the cubes mentioned resting might react to our Shikikan, be said hope slightly to not-existent.
On Queen Elizabeth... Not sure why she names Churchill as "father", but perhaps that will be fleshed out soon. And i giggle imagining the confusing of the Royal Air Defense with seemingly out of the nothing Sakuran and Eagle Union flight joining the fray, after all the arriving of this convoy was seemingly kept under the lid pretty well.
1CemalidorNearly missed this one in my personal confusion/drama as i seemingly missed the one before. :D
So the "crew" finally made it to Brittania and things are escalating quickly i'd not being as "carefree/easy" as mostly descripted is a given the frame of story and the mounting loses of her sisters. Nice touch there with Sheffield and the link to the Iris "Resistance" is easy enough to believe/see there. :D
And on regard on that little vampiric speech i nearly expected to meet Duke of York, completely forget lil Vampyre. :XDD Not sure if the first is stil active/alive, but at least i can't remember her being named as killed from the top of my head.
On unrelated notes i still foster some (minor) hope that perhaps some of the cubes mentioned resting might react to our Shikikan, be said hope slightly to not-existent.
On Queen Elizabeth... Not sure why she names Churchill as "father", but perhaps that will be fleshed out soon. And i giggle imagining the confusing of the Royal Air Defense with seemingly out of the nothing Sakuran and Eagle Union flight joining the fray, after all the arriving of this convoy was seemingly kept under the lid pretty well.
2/15/2023 c83 1TexasDrifter
Another fantastic chapter! Can't wait to see the next one, but don't push yourself. Take it easy :)
1TexasDrifterAnother fantastic chapter! Can't wait to see the next one, but don't push yourself. Take it easy :)
2/15/2023 c83 EnJewel3
When I got the email… my day was made.
Absolutely amazing work, definitely worth the wait.
When I got the email… my day was made.
Absolutely amazing work, definitely worth the wait.
2/14/2023 c83 12TheGamerMarine76
Now that is an update! Shit, I have to step it up, this was intense!
The main highlight for me here is QE, she’s seen some shit alright.
12TheGamerMarine76Now that is an update! Shit, I have to step it up, this was intense!
The main highlight for me here is QE, she’s seen some shit alright.
2/14/2023 c83 1Gencrossbones
Welp what are the chances that few the cubes that was placed inside that church are a bunch of cubes that's Itching for another fight
1GencrossbonesWelp what are the chances that few the cubes that was placed inside that church are a bunch of cubes that's Itching for another fight
12/12/2022 c82 1TexasDrifter
Loving story man! Keep it up, it's been such a fantastic read! Guessing we're gonna encounter Hood really soon haha
1TexasDrifterLoving story man! Keep it up, it's been such a fantastic read! Guessing we're gonna encounter Hood really soon haha
12/5/2022 c82 Guest
Yes! A New Chapter! And can’t wait for them to run into Lady Hood. Hopefully Lady Hood and Bismarck (Biscuit) get some love from the commander. . Update soon please!
Yes! A New Chapter! And can’t wait for them to run into Lady Hood. Hopefully Lady Hood and Bismarck (Biscuit) get some love from the commander. . Update soon please!
12/5/2022 c82 mcdean123
Holy crap; a new chapter! You have been missed, Sabaton, but I'm glad to see another chapter (and a very good one at that!). I hope this means we'll be seeing a bit more of you in the future...
Holy crap; a new chapter! You have been missed, Sabaton, but I'm glad to see another chapter (and a very good one at that!). I hope this means we'll be seeing a bit more of you in the future...
12/5/2022 c82 1Cemalidor
Oh dear, Hood is around? o.O
The mentioned losing could be considered crippling, depending what Kansen are left around and Wolfpacks were a major danger in WW2. Curious how the general supplies are doing, as the merchant navy suffered greatly as well.
Thanks for the fresh chapter, here's hope life treats you well. ;)
1CemalidorOh dear, Hood is around? o.O
The mentioned losing could be considered crippling, depending what Kansen are left around and Wolfpacks were a major danger in WW2. Curious how the general supplies are doing, as the merchant navy suffered greatly as well.
Thanks for the fresh chapter, here's hope life treats you well. ;)