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This is well done; however... Few bits and pieces.
- I didn't think there was enough detail. Overall, it was good nevertheless and the basic wording does being a image in my head of the scene.
- 'I should have said thank you' he thought as he stood at his gravestone, it was a typical gravestone. a rectangle with a semicircle top. - All in one paragraph. Despite the paragraphs are good, at the necessary times they work best. Corrected the sentence too.
- No comma after '-his sister and his family.'
Nevertheless, you did well on this. Looking forward to see many more. :)
3WritingFanfictionCallMeThatThis is well done; however... Few bits and pieces.
- I didn't think there was enough detail. Overall, it was good nevertheless and the basic wording does being a image in my head of the scene.
- 'I should have said thank you' he thought as he stood at his gravestone, it was a typical gravestone. a rectangle with a semicircle top. - All in one paragraph. Despite the paragraphs are good, at the necessary times they work best. Corrected the sentence too.
- No comma after '-his sister and his family.'
Nevertheless, you did well on this. Looking forward to see many more. :)