for Maelstrom Potential5/7 c3 Sahamosveb
For the most part, this is an interesting and logical fanfic. But the harem parts really look like they were written for a completely different fanfic.
Absolutely all the interactions with women in this fanfic are sudden, silly, and lead to sex. And it's not clear why. I mean, there's absolutely no hint that Naruto needs it or is interested in it, the only such attempt was with TenTen, and that was weak.
Women literally hang on him, demand sex, give themselves to him as slaves and then... that's it. IT HAS NO BEARING ON THE PLOT WHATSOEVER. It's pointless and not very well-written porn for porn's sake.
For the most part, this is an interesting and logical fanfic. But the harem parts really look like they were written for a completely different fanfic.
Absolutely all the interactions with women in this fanfic are sudden, silly, and lead to sex. And it's not clear why. I mean, there's absolutely no hint that Naruto needs it or is interested in it, the only such attempt was with TenTen, and that was weak.
Women literally hang on him, demand sex, give themselves to him as slaves and then... that's it. IT HAS NO BEARING ON THE PLOT WHATSOEVER. It's pointless and not very well-written porn for porn's sake.
5/7 c2 Sahamosveb
I'm sorry, but why would anyone be so shocked by the complexity of the rasengan when Naruto has only recently used techniques more complex, more powerful, and even ones he invented himself? And bowing down to the "legendary jutsu" as an explanation doesn't fit. The text states that they are surprised by the "A" class.
I'm sorry, but why would anyone be so shocked by the complexity of the rasengan when Naruto has only recently used techniques more complex, more powerful, and even ones he invented himself? And bowing down to the "legendary jutsu" as an explanation doesn't fit. The text states that they are surprised by the "A" class.
5/7 c1 Sahamosveb
3 hours intense fight with Green Best and Naruno is not patning, but 3 hours of dodging with Anko he is? "Women are scary" plot is never good.
3 hours intense fight with Green Best and Naruno is not patning, but 3 hours of dodging with Anko he is? "Women are scary" plot is never good.
4/9 c2 
1Darth Diablos
I really like the idea of that field of life jutsu. I have one in my head you can use if you're interested that I have yet to see in any fic I have read.
1Darth DiablosI really like the idea of that field of life jutsu. I have one in my head you can use if you're interested that I have yet to see in any fic I have read.
3/5 c2 Username6166
Do you not know that Kakashi is only 5'11" and he's clearly one of the tallest people in the series? Making kid Naruto 5'10" would look insane. The average height of Asians is not the same as Americans.
Do you not know that Kakashi is only 5'11" and he's clearly one of the tallest people in the series? Making kid Naruto 5'10" would look insane. The average height of Asians is not the same as Americans.
2/18 c7 80YeagerMeister31
Another great chapter glad to see Ino's not giving up and spending some time with Naruto hope they have a lemon soon, I guess Fu will probably join the harem and I hope Ryuzetsu does down the line also Samui from Kumo.
80YeagerMeister31Another great chapter glad to see Ino's not giving up and spending some time with Naruto hope they have a lemon soon, I guess Fu will probably join the harem and I hope Ryuzetsu does down the line also Samui from Kumo.
1/15 c7 KenwayS220
Damn cant wait for the next chapter lol
Btw for some reason people dont seem to like this game but is there a chance of a Zenless Zone Zero x Naruto crossover fanfic in the future?
Damn cant wait for the next chapter lol
Btw for some reason people dont seem to like this game but is there a chance of a Zenless Zone Zero x Naruto crossover fanfic in the future?
1/14 c1 Fiction Haven
Why the age adjustment? Is this an American thing? So obsessed with age. This is a fantasy world FFS. You have twelve year olds shooting schools and killing themselves daily in your country.
Why the age adjustment? Is this an American thing? So obsessed with age. This is a fantasy world FFS. You have twelve year olds shooting schools and killing themselves daily in your country.
1/13 c2 Guest
Honestly, I think with Kurenai, it was less about her giving herself to Naruto but the age. A 20 something year old women kissing and promoting to be a slave for a 13 year old boy feels really unrealistic. Would have had less issue with it if she gave herself to Jiraiya or if you aged Naruto up to like 17ish
Honestly, I think with Kurenai, it was less about her giving herself to Naruto but the age. A 20 something year old women kissing and promoting to be a slave for a 13 year old boy feels really unrealistic. Would have had less issue with it if she gave herself to Jiraiya or if you aged Naruto up to like 17ish