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6/26 c1 4Ancient Sith Tulak Hord
Continue this story
5/28 c1 Guest
First story or not. Fix your grammar cunt. It’s the path to walking into the sewers you. Wanna be in that filth? Go ahead. You’ll end up being a nobody here for that.
4/13 c2 Redfox
Loved it can’t wait for the next chapter.
10/25/2019 c1 inacioqgs10
amazing
10/8/2019 c2 inacioqgs10
amazin
9/17/2019 c2 hansgyver62
Update soon
5/23/2019 c2 Guest
la suite svp
4/21/2019 c1 Guest
Halo saya adalah pembaca dari indonesia
Jika anda tidak mengerti komentar saya tolong gunakan google translate karna saya payah dalam terjemah

Saya sudah membaca cerita anda dan menurut saya cerita anda lumayan menarik, tolong lanjutkan cerita anda karna saya adalah pembaca setia untuk semua fanfic di situs ini

Terima kasih
4/21/2019 c2 Cainabel202
Very nice, quite a few grammatical erros, but overall the whole World Ennemy Momonga is something I always wanted in a fanfic (Althrough it's a shame Momonga isn't the "World Eater" wich is supposed to be the strongest of all 32 World Ennemy as well as the main campain final boss).

Please keep writing it, it's really awesome )
4/21/2019 c2 Charurotte
I think your story is interesting, what's wrong with your story being different from the original story, that's where the attraction is, all you need is to be confident and continue your story

I'm cloudy you writer-san
4/16/2019 c2 Guest
Continua
4/17/2019 c2 Ataxius
You really aren't a terrible writer, the conversations are a little odd at times and the grammar could use some work but honestly this is better than 90% of stories on this site.
Glad you decided not to include an OP enemy, that's really not what Overlord is about anyways.
4/17/2019 c2 Deliberatee
Alright, points:
- This is still a bit of a hard read because of the grammar, well if you can't have anyone to proofread it, can't be helped ;
- Yes, having an OC or even other SBs isn't really a popular plot point for readers (true for me, even I'm not fond of OCs in Nazarick) but it doesn't stop authors from doing it still smh. It just kills the appeal of Overlord imo.
- and on that same thought, Ainz being OP isn't a problem, even opposite, we glory in HIS glory but there's still a line you shouldn't cross and go overboard. It's like you know when you play Sims and there's that specific cheat code that basically makes you a God and after using that the game is just broken - it kills all the excitement and the drive to play it. So I hope while Ainz is still as OP as ever, you don't go over that line or else it just kills the whole point of the story
- I'm saying this now, I'm #TeamAlbedo AAAAALLLLLL the way lol, so yes I'm biased. While they're all equal, with her being not even the strongest guardian per se on 1v1, she still has rank and that scene of her kneeling before...Maylene, was it(?) kinda killed the image on the spot. I know it's most likely for comedic purposes but that doesn't change the fact. Having godlike beings in one place, seniority (as in rank, and not because 1 is created first than the other) should at least be maintained in order to avoid problems. Rank is there for a reason. While we're on this, I don't really like harems but I also hope for some babies running around Nazarick, so if I had my way, I'd lock up Ainz and Albedo (only Albedo! what.. fine, I love Nabe too lol) in a room until our resident succubus will finally be able to ride that bicorn of hers, and of course get pregnant XD ugh...I still can't really imagine a harem unless Ainz overtly gives preference to Albedo
- probably 1 reason why we all hate OCs is that the Overlord universe is already sooo massive that adding more characters will just hinder the development of the characters, and I agree. Unless you plan on writing at least 5 books on this, it won't be enough to flush out each of these characters on top of the already canon ones - and since imo, a major aspect that makes a story 'great' is world building and it's characters, well... ;
4/17/2019 c2 1Spacemonkey777
Please more interactions with the world and less with guardians. Since we already know how it will go.
4/16/2019 c2 EliteNoobNZ
This is really good
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