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12/21/2020 c7 dawsonm
could you fix this chapter and chapter 9 and make the paragraphs a lot shorter?
11/6/2020 c1 Guest
Ginnny kinda creeps me out.
6/16/2020 c11 1blushingpixie
Please update soon I can't wait to see what happens in the next chapter
6/10/2020 c11 Guest
Can you update?
6/5/2020 c11 10HamiltonHufflepuffGirlUK
this was such a good story but it makes me want to know more!
3/27/2020 c11 steve.moore.9081323
Please more
3/27/2020 c1 steve.moore.9081323
Please more please
3/27/2020 c1 steve.moore.9081323
Great beginning
9/8/2019 c2 2Truthweaver
Author? are you seriously calling Arthur Author? Is that autocorrect on your phone or somethst? Also Harry's openness and Ginny's understanding of his situation are completely unrealistic and unbelievable. In general everything feels shallow and emotions are only described in terms of the characters' physical reactions, and even then not in an in-depth way. It would help if you would actually spent some time writing what the characters are thinking and feeling instead of just describing everything as if you were just observing.
6/15/2019 c10 Millie072
This new format is bloody marvelous! Had stopped reading story as getting unbelievable and too difficult to concentrate on due to the large block of words without paragraph definitions. If you do reformat from the beginning, you'll likely pick up a lot more readers, especially the Ginny/Harry fans. You may wish to correct your summary with punctuation. Proper Names always capitalized.
6/15/2019 c10 Sparhawk537
Hehe very nice!
5/26/2019 c9 Fast Frank
This is basically a good story, but it's just unreadable as formatted.
5/26/2019 c3 Fast Frank
Vernon refused to touch gold and silver coins? That's some serious paranoia.
5/26/2019 c2 Fast Frank
Technical criticism: Break up run on paragraphs for easier reading.
5/14/2019 c8 Guest
Take your time
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