for Okay, so the thing is, this may be a long title but hear me out, its-8/5/2019 c11 
7phoenixknight19
This is turning out to be an interesting story so far. Look forward to reading more of it. Do you have any pairings in mind for the story?
7phoenixknight19This is turning out to be an interesting story so far. Look forward to reading more of it. Do you have any pairings in mind for the story?
8/5/2019 c2 Guest
this was so bad i could not read it all
this was so bad i could not read it all
8/1/2019 c9 Zukafew119
I do love how you start the chapter with some very much needed silliness. I love when Murry does say the phrase: “the more you know.” I do like how Deku is not going to underestimate Grand Torino because to Deku Grand Torino gives off the impression similar like in Kung Fu movies the old man that is a total badass.
I totally agree with most of the class in wondering why Deku and Beatrice are roommates considering how much they are at odds most of the time. I do like how Camie lays on how much of a badass Izuku is with quirk analysis. I do love the battle match up between Chisa and Seiji, especially the part where Chisa uses an Uzi that has rubber bullets and how Chisa defeats Seiji by making Seiji inhale cannabis. I do love how you say that Seiji is the love child of a goth and a conformist.
I do like the character you made Kenshi which is similar to Nezu in that their both sentient animals but different in that Kenshi never was experimented on by humans. When you say Kenshi’s special abilities are super strength and intelligence but it really include extended life span since normal wolfs maximum lifespan is about 16 years and Kenshi is 36 years old. I do love that Kenshi’s weakness is belly rubs and his favorite food is rabbits. I do like how you end the chapter with after the battle between Deku and Kenshi they have a heart to heart moment. Keep up the great work MOTHERFU, till next time!
I do love how you start the chapter with some very much needed silliness. I love when Murry does say the phrase: “the more you know.” I do like how Deku is not going to underestimate Grand Torino because to Deku Grand Torino gives off the impression similar like in Kung Fu movies the old man that is a total badass.
I totally agree with most of the class in wondering why Deku and Beatrice are roommates considering how much they are at odds most of the time. I do like how Camie lays on how much of a badass Izuku is with quirk analysis. I do love the battle match up between Chisa and Seiji, especially the part where Chisa uses an Uzi that has rubber bullets and how Chisa defeats Seiji by making Seiji inhale cannabis. I do love how you say that Seiji is the love child of a goth and a conformist.
I do like the character you made Kenshi which is similar to Nezu in that their both sentient animals but different in that Kenshi never was experimented on by humans. When you say Kenshi’s special abilities are super strength and intelligence but it really include extended life span since normal wolfs maximum lifespan is about 16 years and Kenshi is 36 years old. I do love that Kenshi’s weakness is belly rubs and his favorite food is rabbits. I do like how you end the chapter with after the battle between Deku and Kenshi they have a heart to heart moment. Keep up the great work MOTHERFU, till next time!
7/30/2019 c8 Zukafew119
I do love the scene where Deku’s dad says he could build a secret lab underneath the garage but says he probably could not do it with funds from his job. Then Inko say’s he can tap into her funds but no unnecessary things or grenade launchers. I love how Deku’s dad tells him to just turn of his pain receptors around where his going to inject the nanites so he will not feel any pain.
I do like how you decided for Deku to stay in contact with Ochako, Tsu and Shoji. Like I have said in previous chapters I do love how you’re Deku and Camies banter play well off each other. I love the fact that Deku is into romcoms and instantly regrets accidentally letting out that he watches romcoms. I do find it hilarious that Deku thought that Camie was a lesbian and no he knows that Camie is not a lesbian will cause him eventually to reevaluate how she acts around may be Implying she has romantic fealings for him. Like the fact when ever she is sleeping over at his parents, she insists on sleeping in the same bed as him. So Deku has particular attraction to redheads; so if he stayed at UA, he would definitely would have been attracted to Kendo.
I do like how Beatrice keeps on trolling Deku and how he gets even by calling her shortie, for which is one of her pet peeves. I do like how you got Inasa Yoarashi’s character down to a t. I can see why Seiji calls both Camie and Beatrice “harlots.” So Kenshi is a animal that is similar to Nezu in that their both smart as humans (or smarter) and Kenshi I am guessing was just like Nezu experimented on by scientists. Interesting twist in having All Might asking Grand Torino to be a teacher at Shikestu and being Deku’s home room teacher. I do like how you still have Grand Torino do a practical joke on Deku similar to what he does in canon when Deku meets him for the first time. Keep up the great work MOTHERFU, till next time!
I do love the scene where Deku’s dad says he could build a secret lab underneath the garage but says he probably could not do it with funds from his job. Then Inko say’s he can tap into her funds but no unnecessary things or grenade launchers. I love how Deku’s dad tells him to just turn of his pain receptors around where his going to inject the nanites so he will not feel any pain.
I do like how you decided for Deku to stay in contact with Ochako, Tsu and Shoji. Like I have said in previous chapters I do love how you’re Deku and Camies banter play well off each other. I love the fact that Deku is into romcoms and instantly regrets accidentally letting out that he watches romcoms. I do find it hilarious that Deku thought that Camie was a lesbian and no he knows that Camie is not a lesbian will cause him eventually to reevaluate how she acts around may be Implying she has romantic fealings for him. Like the fact when ever she is sleeping over at his parents, she insists on sleeping in the same bed as him. So Deku has particular attraction to redheads; so if he stayed at UA, he would definitely would have been attracted to Kendo.
I do like how Beatrice keeps on trolling Deku and how he gets even by calling her shortie, for which is one of her pet peeves. I do like how you got Inasa Yoarashi’s character down to a t. I can see why Seiji calls both Camie and Beatrice “harlots.” So Kenshi is a animal that is similar to Nezu in that their both smart as humans (or smarter) and Kenshi I am guessing was just like Nezu experimented on by scientists. Interesting twist in having All Might asking Grand Torino to be a teacher at Shikestu and being Deku’s home room teacher. I do like how you still have Grand Torino do a practical joke on Deku similar to what he does in canon when Deku meets him for the first time. Keep up the great work MOTHERFU, till next time!
7/14/2019 c1 14netapel
I don't know if you still take OC's but here I go:
Name: Cameron Richard
Age: 29
Nationality: half-Japanese, half-New Zealander of european descent. (Japanese mother, New Zealander father)
Quirk: Illusionist touch
Quirk description: If Cameron's body ouches you, be it skin contact, touching dead skin cells on a door handle or bodily fluids like blood or spit. He can control your five senses. Making you see whats not real, smell stuff that isn't there, hear stuff that nobody said, make you feel pain although nobody is touching you.
Weakness: He can only control up to 8 different people at once. if he wants to control someone else he would needs to choose someone he already has affected and release him from his quirk. He can still return to control them anytime, he just needs to free space out of the 8 people.
His Quirk only affect living creatures that have at least 2 of the five senses, and such he cannot control Bacteria or Machine.
Looks: Cameron looks like a young handsome man you would find in a fashion magazine, Light brown hair,
usually wears a Burgundy Tuxedo and clothes to match it. Dark blue eyes. standing at 190 centimeters tall.
He is a reformed villain that helps the police catch other villains by giving them information on a weekly basis. By helping the police, the goverment gave him a pardon on his past crimes. (you can decide what they are). Outside of his work with the cops he owns a small bakery he previosly built during his time as a villain. He doesn't get much visitors since its in the less populated region of town.
Just started reading this fic today, hope you're still taking OC's
14netapelI don't know if you still take OC's but here I go:
Name: Cameron Richard
Age: 29
Nationality: half-Japanese, half-New Zealander of european descent. (Japanese mother, New Zealander father)
Quirk: Illusionist touch
Quirk description: If Cameron's body ouches you, be it skin contact, touching dead skin cells on a door handle or bodily fluids like blood or spit. He can control your five senses. Making you see whats not real, smell stuff that isn't there, hear stuff that nobody said, make you feel pain although nobody is touching you.
Weakness: He can only control up to 8 different people at once. if he wants to control someone else he would needs to choose someone he already has affected and release him from his quirk. He can still return to control them anytime, he just needs to free space out of the 8 people.
His Quirk only affect living creatures that have at least 2 of the five senses, and such he cannot control Bacteria or Machine.
Looks: Cameron looks like a young handsome man you would find in a fashion magazine, Light brown hair,
usually wears a Burgundy Tuxedo and clothes to match it. Dark blue eyes. standing at 190 centimeters tall.
He is a reformed villain that helps the police catch other villains by giving them information on a weekly basis. By helping the police, the goverment gave him a pardon on his past crimes. (you can decide what they are). Outside of his work with the cops he owns a small bakery he previosly built during his time as a villain. He doesn't get much visitors since its in the less populated region of town.
Just started reading this fic today, hope you're still taking OC's
7/13/2019 c10 wololo1
i think you made rehabilitating bakagou with ibara is a good idea. next time we see him we might see priest explosion murder. as for the sport festival part why not let say u.a invited shiketsu academy and other school as well as trying to form a closer bond between other school. this event is big and shown to the whole country so why not let the hero course from other country join in as well.
i think you made rehabilitating bakagou with ibara is a good idea. next time we see him we might see priest explosion murder. as for the sport festival part why not let say u.a invited shiketsu academy and other school as well as trying to form a closer bond between other school. this event is big and shown to the whole country so why not let the hero course from other country join in as well.
7/2/2019 c1 1TheGreatBubbaJ
A-All Might NO!
ALL MIGHT YES! All might plunges his fist
heh
What's the deal with the pain receptors thing? He molecule molesting his brain or something? That seems like a poor idea.
1TheGreatBubbaJA-All Might NO!
ALL MIGHT YES! All might plunges his fist
heh
What's the deal with the pain receptors thing? He molecule molesting his brain or something? That seems like a poor idea.
6/11/2019 c7 Zukafew119
I do like how Camie’s reaction to Deku after he tells her what happened at the USJ, she hugs him. I do like how Deku’s older sister thinks that Camie is giving Deku a blow job but instead she’s doing his hair. I do like how Camie knows Deku is not ok and does not want to talk about it, she knows him well enough to not push him a lot but will wait for him to be ready to talk about it.
I do like how Katsuki keeps digging himself a bigger whole with detention in this chapter a lone he starts from 4 weeks and ends up with 11 weeks. I do like how you show Deku’s and Ochako friendship grow by having him give his contact info on “Bothersome.” I do love Deku’s screen name on Bothersome, it does totally fit him to a T. I do like the why are you a hero talk initiated by Deku, it was very interesting and funny. I do like how Deku’s dad in this story does come from a family of heroes but chose not to because it was not his passion and did not want to do it just because a sense of duty.
I really do the section where Deku is saying his goodbyes to his fellow students of Class 1A. I do like how Deku keeps bringing up the fact that Denki “likes” dictatorships. I do like how Deku, Tokoyami and Dark Shadow get a long, their interaction and how they get each other. I do like how Shinso in this story can easily get into Class 1A, he really does deserve to be in the UA hero course. I do like how Deku’s parents and older sister hold a intervention in forcing him not to hide how he really feels after killing someone.
I do like how you end the chapter with Skiketsu deciding that do to the USJ incident to start having their students live in dorm on their campus which are free to students. I did not find this chapter as filler at all, in fact in my option this chapter is anything but filler. This chapter wraps up Deku’s time at UA in a good way that is constructive in it further deepens the friendships Deku has made with Ochako, Tokoyami and Shoji. I do really like how you do give Shoji way more spot light in this story than nearly any other MHA fanfictions and canon. He’s an interesting character that rarely gets any attention whether in canon or MHA fanfictions. Keep up the great work MOTHERFU, till next time!
I do like how Camie’s reaction to Deku after he tells her what happened at the USJ, she hugs him. I do like how Deku’s older sister thinks that Camie is giving Deku a blow job but instead she’s doing his hair. I do like how Camie knows Deku is not ok and does not want to talk about it, she knows him well enough to not push him a lot but will wait for him to be ready to talk about it.
I do like how Katsuki keeps digging himself a bigger whole with detention in this chapter a lone he starts from 4 weeks and ends up with 11 weeks. I do like how you show Deku’s and Ochako friendship grow by having him give his contact info on “Bothersome.” I do love Deku’s screen name on Bothersome, it does totally fit him to a T. I do like the why are you a hero talk initiated by Deku, it was very interesting and funny. I do like how Deku’s dad in this story does come from a family of heroes but chose not to because it was not his passion and did not want to do it just because a sense of duty.
I really do the section where Deku is saying his goodbyes to his fellow students of Class 1A. I do like how Deku keeps bringing up the fact that Denki “likes” dictatorships. I do like how Deku, Tokoyami and Dark Shadow get a long, their interaction and how they get each other. I do like how Shinso in this story can easily get into Class 1A, he really does deserve to be in the UA hero course. I do like how Deku’s parents and older sister hold a intervention in forcing him not to hide how he really feels after killing someone.
I do like how you end the chapter with Skiketsu deciding that do to the USJ incident to start having their students live in dorm on their campus which are free to students. I did not find this chapter as filler at all, in fact in my option this chapter is anything but filler. This chapter wraps up Deku’s time at UA in a good way that is constructive in it further deepens the friendships Deku has made with Ochako, Tokoyami and Shoji. I do really like how you do give Shoji way more spot light in this story than nearly any other MHA fanfictions and canon. He’s an interesting character that rarely gets any attention whether in canon or MHA fanfictions. Keep up the great work MOTHERFU, till next time!
5/13/2019 c6 Zukafew119
I am glad that either you listed to my review or just were planning to do it anyway, that being Deku is trying to make amends to his fellow classmates (except Katsuki for obvious reasons) for being such a jackass to them. I do like the joke that Deku says about Ms. Joke and Mr. Aizawa and then how Aizawa says he used excessive violence in the training exercise by pulling out several of Kat’s teeth. Which causes Deku respond with saying there’s a police report about a villain captured by Eraser Head, which had both of his arms and legs broken. That scene with Denki was hilarious and how Deku says not to vote for Denki if you don’t want to live in a dictatorship. Interesting twist in having Shoji as vp class rep of Class 1A. I do like how Deku and Shoji get along and how you give Shoji more attention than normally gets in most MHA fanfictions.
Nice funny scene where Camie and Deku talk about Deku’s not so good story telling skills. The way Camie and Deku argue is like an old married couple. There is so much sexual tension between those 2, having them arguing for hours, eventually if they don’t admit their romantic feelings for each other someone is going to lock them in a room until they make out.
I love how Aizawa is so easily about to push Kat’s buttons so Kat insults him giving him a perfect excuse to punish Kat. I do like how Mr. Aizawa calls Kat a rabid lion. I do like how Deku has learn that with his first power he can hold some one’s jaw so they cannot talk, which is perfect to use on your super violent Kat. I do like how after doing this to Kat, he comes up with the idea can he use the same principle behind forcing Kat’s mouth from opening on water to make it become ice. I do like how you modified what Denki says about why Kat will not do well in the hero businesses since he is always seams to be pissed off but also how in this story Kat has attacked innocent young people.
I do like how Deku does give Mineta a ass chewing that he really needs to push him either to quit trying to be hero or does his best to be a hero.
Interesting twist of having the ghost of the first AFO user acting like ghost advisor similar to like AI Gravis is for Tony Stark. I do like the banter between Deku and Shigaraki in that its in game metaphors: rock vs paper vs scissors and pokemon. I do like how Nomu is scissors, All Might is paper and Deku is rock. Interesting way of having Deku stop/kill Nomu is by destroying its dissolving the brain via causing the molecular bonds that make up its brain to break up. Interesting way of stopping Shigaraki by giving him a heart attack forcing Kurogiri to leave the USJ with Shigaraki to save his life. I do agree with Deku that All Might’s timing of his return is very bad since it after nearly all of the villains have been defeated and the 3 main villains are gone or dead.
I do like the scene where Deku is reporting what happened to All Might and Detective Naomasa. I do like how you have All Might say it’s ok to kill a villain when there is no other option and it’s either his life or yours or some other innocent person. I do like how you end the chapter with All Might saying to Deku leave Ane For One to him but Deku disagrees saying since his the current wielder of OFA it’s his duty to be by All Might’s side.
I do like how you portray Deku as he mentally reconciles with the fact he killed someone. True, it was in self defense for him and his fellow classmates but Deku’s never thought he would have to kill someone, thinking there would always be another choice but ends up there was no other reasonable choice. I do totally agree in your author’s note that what Deku is going through is similar when a police officer or a solider kills someone first time. It will be interesting to see how Deku deals with taking a persons life (even though they were barely human/sentient any more), it’s a good thing that this Deku unlike canon has a large family and Camie to help him out with it. Also having an older sister who is a pro hero, who may have killed villains in the line of duty can help Deku struggling with is different form of PTSD. With Deku and Camie’s friendship this will either cause a divide between them or it will bond them together even more and may push them into openly admitting that they do have romantic feelings for each other.
Also it would be interesting if Deku does after leaving UA for Shikestu stay in contact with some of his fellow students in Class 1A. Though by sounds the 2 schools are some distance between them, so the could stay in contact through phone calls, texts and online social centers like facebook. This to me would make sense because they also when through the same traumatic experience that was the USJ incident with Deku. This is some thing that none of his fellow students at Shikestu and not event Camie can fully understand or not till they experience something similar to the USJ incident. The one I think he would most likely stay in contact would be Ochako, Tsuyu and Shoji; they seam to be the ones he interacts the most in a positive friendly way. Keep up the Great work MOTHERFU, till next time!
I am glad that either you listed to my review or just were planning to do it anyway, that being Deku is trying to make amends to his fellow classmates (except Katsuki for obvious reasons) for being such a jackass to them. I do like the joke that Deku says about Ms. Joke and Mr. Aizawa and then how Aizawa says he used excessive violence in the training exercise by pulling out several of Kat’s teeth. Which causes Deku respond with saying there’s a police report about a villain captured by Eraser Head, which had both of his arms and legs broken. That scene with Denki was hilarious and how Deku says not to vote for Denki if you don’t want to live in a dictatorship. Interesting twist in having Shoji as vp class rep of Class 1A. I do like how Deku and Shoji get along and how you give Shoji more attention than normally gets in most MHA fanfictions.
Nice funny scene where Camie and Deku talk about Deku’s not so good story telling skills. The way Camie and Deku argue is like an old married couple. There is so much sexual tension between those 2, having them arguing for hours, eventually if they don’t admit their romantic feelings for each other someone is going to lock them in a room until they make out.
I love how Aizawa is so easily about to push Kat’s buttons so Kat insults him giving him a perfect excuse to punish Kat. I do like how Mr. Aizawa calls Kat a rabid lion. I do like how Deku has learn that with his first power he can hold some one’s jaw so they cannot talk, which is perfect to use on your super violent Kat. I do like how after doing this to Kat, he comes up with the idea can he use the same principle behind forcing Kat’s mouth from opening on water to make it become ice. I do like how you modified what Denki says about why Kat will not do well in the hero businesses since he is always seams to be pissed off but also how in this story Kat has attacked innocent young people.
I do like how Deku does give Mineta a ass chewing that he really needs to push him either to quit trying to be hero or does his best to be a hero.
Interesting twist of having the ghost of the first AFO user acting like ghost advisor similar to like AI Gravis is for Tony Stark. I do like the banter between Deku and Shigaraki in that its in game metaphors: rock vs paper vs scissors and pokemon. I do like how Nomu is scissors, All Might is paper and Deku is rock. Interesting way of having Deku stop/kill Nomu is by destroying its dissolving the brain via causing the molecular bonds that make up its brain to break up. Interesting way of stopping Shigaraki by giving him a heart attack forcing Kurogiri to leave the USJ with Shigaraki to save his life. I do agree with Deku that All Might’s timing of his return is very bad since it after nearly all of the villains have been defeated and the 3 main villains are gone or dead.
I do like the scene where Deku is reporting what happened to All Might and Detective Naomasa. I do like how you have All Might say it’s ok to kill a villain when there is no other option and it’s either his life or yours or some other innocent person. I do like how you end the chapter with All Might saying to Deku leave Ane For One to him but Deku disagrees saying since his the current wielder of OFA it’s his duty to be by All Might’s side.
I do like how you portray Deku as he mentally reconciles with the fact he killed someone. True, it was in self defense for him and his fellow classmates but Deku’s never thought he would have to kill someone, thinking there would always be another choice but ends up there was no other reasonable choice. I do totally agree in your author’s note that what Deku is going through is similar when a police officer or a solider kills someone first time. It will be interesting to see how Deku deals with taking a persons life (even though they were barely human/sentient any more), it’s a good thing that this Deku unlike canon has a large family and Camie to help him out with it. Also having an older sister who is a pro hero, who may have killed villains in the line of duty can help Deku struggling with is different form of PTSD. With Deku and Camie’s friendship this will either cause a divide between them or it will bond them together even more and may push them into openly admitting that they do have romantic feelings for each other.
Also it would be interesting if Deku does after leaving UA for Shikestu stay in contact with some of his fellow students in Class 1A. Though by sounds the 2 schools are some distance between them, so the could stay in contact through phone calls, texts and online social centers like facebook. This to me would make sense because they also when through the same traumatic experience that was the USJ incident with Deku. This is some thing that none of his fellow students at Shikestu and not event Camie can fully understand or not till they experience something similar to the USJ incident. The one I think he would most likely stay in contact would be Ochako, Tsuyu and Shoji; they seam to be the ones he interacts the most in a positive friendly way. Keep up the Great work MOTHERFU, till next time!