for The Last Prayer4/5/2019 c7 
1invoker26
Wow.. This is a very dark fic filled with manipulative b*tch and naive victim and maybe masochist as well? I dont think i can bear reading this.. I sincerely hope this Naruto die to end the suffering you will bring to in the future. Aside from that its good story you doing very good job to the point the story effect the reader.. But it just doesn't my kind of story. But you definitely doing great
1invoker26Wow.. This is a very dark fic filled with manipulative b*tch and naive victim and maybe masochist as well? I dont think i can bear reading this.. I sincerely hope this Naruto die to end the suffering you will bring to in the future. Aside from that its good story you doing very good job to the point the story effect the reader.. But it just doesn't my kind of story. But you definitely doing great
4/5/2019 c8 asighoaighnqllg
With a steady flow of updates and decent grammar, you're already better than thousands of stories. So, I believe that you're on the right track to fanfiction stardom. Keep up the good work and have fun.
With a steady flow of updates and decent grammar, you're already better than thousands of stories. So, I believe that you're on the right track to fanfiction stardom. Keep up the good work and have fun.
4/5/2019 c8 80YeagerMeister31
Well, that was another interesting chapter another lemon with Kurenai always good total babe and Naruto-Nii is probably inwardly crying that his past self's having sex with Ino and Kurenai and unknowingly got a blow job from Sakura even if it was Ino controlling Sakura's body lol.
I wonder what happens next its kind of sad that Sakura absolutely loath's Naruto ks it because of getting forced to give him a blowjob or just that she hates him in a way I don't know why she hates him so much but whatever even if she doesn't want to be close to him she's still getting stronger and could kick her canon selfs ass soon lol, she is smart so her controlling the clones was pretty cool
80YeagerMeister31Well, that was another interesting chapter another lemon with Kurenai always good total babe and Naruto-Nii is probably inwardly crying that his past self's having sex with Ino and Kurenai and unknowingly got a blow job from Sakura even if it was Ino controlling Sakura's body lol.
I wonder what happens next its kind of sad that Sakura absolutely loath's Naruto ks it because of getting forced to give him a blowjob or just that she hates him in a way I don't know why she hates him so much but whatever even if she doesn't want to be close to him she's still getting stronger and could kick her canon selfs ass soon lol, she is smart so her controlling the clones was pretty cool
4/5/2019 c8 InfinityMask
Noo! I actually hope for fem Haku. Haku surviving and join Konoha(I know this is kinda overused but meh), she and Naruto become close can force confrontation with ino in away. Maybe with Kurenai and Sakura too. Haha
Tho despite saying that I can see why you wouldn't want that to happen too.. haku can disturbed a balance that happened now.
Noo! I actually hope for fem Haku. Haku surviving and join Konoha(I know this is kinda overused but meh), she and Naruto become close can force confrontation with ino in away. Maybe with Kurenai and Sakura too. Haha
Tho despite saying that I can see why you wouldn't want that to happen too.. haku can disturbed a balance that happened now.
4/5/2019 c8 ultrachols
sakura seems very childish . naruto should ask her why, she behaves so towards him. when he is kind to her and tries to help and protect her.
he should show her a little, anger . sasuke always rejects her and then she asks about her date to try to cheer her up and show her that he cares about her .
sakura seems very childish . naruto should ask her why, she behaves so towards him. when he is kind to her and tries to help and protect her.
he should show her a little, anger . sasuke always rejects her and then she asks about her date to try to cheer her up and show her that he cares about her .
4/4/2019 c8 1FallenSasuke
Great work so far! Writing quality is superb while the emotion in the story seems to evolve quite well. I like the “love square” that is currently set up, it seems more natural than if you added more to the harem. I would love to see more of those introspective Naruto moments, it’s heartbreaking but kinda what canon should’ve been. I know Shonen was more of a kids show than a mature anime, but I always wanted to see that other mature side, so keep at it with the emotional Naruto, it suits the story!
Good luck and great work!
1FallenSasukeGreat work so far! Writing quality is superb while the emotion in the story seems to evolve quite well. I like the “love square” that is currently set up, it seems more natural than if you added more to the harem. I would love to see more of those introspective Naruto moments, it’s heartbreaking but kinda what canon should’ve been. I know Shonen was more of a kids show than a mature anime, but I always wanted to see that other mature side, so keep at it with the emotional Naruto, it suits the story!
Good luck and great work!
4/4/2019 c8 AJGuardian
Hmmmm. I wonder if this ended up as a successful fertilisation. If Kurenai doesn't act fast enough to do the plan b.
Hmmmm. I wonder if this ended up as a successful fertilisation. If Kurenai doesn't act fast enough to do the plan b.
4/4/2019 c8 28KuronoDono12
Interesting chapter and have to say Kurenai's reaction was interesting/good. I think and interesting idea would be if she talks/confides with Anko about what happened and either asks or Anko offers to continue teaching Naruto about the female body in her stead so that he continues helping Hinata.
I am hoping that this is ultimately a Harem Pairing for Naruto later down the road as it would make for really interesting character development for not only the girls but also Naruto. It also makes sense as Naruto's stamina is already at a point where he is wearing out the girls he has slept with. Then when you take into account the fact that his stamina will most likely increase the older he gets there is no way a single girl can handle him.
That being said and after looking back to you Author Note in Chapter 4 I think that the inclusions of Anko and Samui making it 9 total girls would be symbolic given he is the Kyuubi Jinchuriki.
The reason why Anko should join is because they have had similar lives in terms of their treatment due to things out of their control...It also wouldn't be hard to picture them being together/growing close if Anko were to help teach him about the female body like I mentioned above.
As for Samui I can see her being drawn to him due to his Cool Personality when he gets older, and the fact that he likely would see her for more than just a pretty face and giant breasts. It's not hard to imagine Naruto being fascinated/impressed with her Kenjutsu/Swordsmanship Skills and befriending her as they talk about it/maybe she teaches him a bit. Then overtime Samui would come to have feelings for Naruto has he values/acknowledges her skill and sees her for more than her body essentially "Thawing" her "Cool" demeanor.
Now as for how the two would interact with the Harem...Anko would likely be all for it as she would likely enjoy having the other girls involved to make things more interesting/spice the up. Samui might be a little hesitant at first until/unless she gets used to/befriends the other girls.
28KuronoDono12Interesting chapter and have to say Kurenai's reaction was interesting/good. I think and interesting idea would be if she talks/confides with Anko about what happened and either asks or Anko offers to continue teaching Naruto about the female body in her stead so that he continues helping Hinata.
I am hoping that this is ultimately a Harem Pairing for Naruto later down the road as it would make for really interesting character development for not only the girls but also Naruto. It also makes sense as Naruto's stamina is already at a point where he is wearing out the girls he has slept with. Then when you take into account the fact that his stamina will most likely increase the older he gets there is no way a single girl can handle him.
That being said and after looking back to you Author Note in Chapter 4 I think that the inclusions of Anko and Samui making it 9 total girls would be symbolic given he is the Kyuubi Jinchuriki.
The reason why Anko should join is because they have had similar lives in terms of their treatment due to things out of their control...It also wouldn't be hard to picture them being together/growing close if Anko were to help teach him about the female body like I mentioned above.
As for Samui I can see her being drawn to him due to his Cool Personality when he gets older, and the fact that he likely would see her for more than just a pretty face and giant breasts. It's not hard to imagine Naruto being fascinated/impressed with her Kenjutsu/Swordsmanship Skills and befriending her as they talk about it/maybe she teaches him a bit. Then overtime Samui would come to have feelings for Naruto has he values/acknowledges her skill and sees her for more than her body essentially "Thawing" her "Cool" demeanor.
Now as for how the two would interact with the Harem...Anko would likely be all for it as she would likely enjoy having the other girls involved to make things more interesting/spice the up. Samui might be a little hesitant at first until/unless she gets used to/befriends the other girls.
4/4/2019 c8 Mr. Malfunction
I need to know cause it's f***ing with my brain, but was Ino a one of a kind lemon? Because personally, I'd like to see more of that.
I need to know cause it's f***ing with my brain, but was Ino a one of a kind lemon? Because personally, I'd like to see more of that.
4/4/2019 c8 Bisaster
Kinda sad that adult naruto is as retarded as his younger self. I honestly wonder if people can actually stay that naive and stupid their whole lives.
Kinda sad that adult naruto is as retarded as his younger self. I honestly wonder if people can actually stay that naive and stupid their whole lives.