for Trip Down a Hill7/26 c1 melikereading
The character building of this story is wonderful, with everyone being part of the story rather than being a part of Naruto’s story. The gripe that I have though is the names; its very small part but it breaks the immersion with Western Names in a Ninja themed story.
The character building of this story is wonderful, with everyone being part of the story rather than being a part of Naruto’s story. The gripe that I have though is the names; its very small part but it breaks the immersion with Western Names in a Ninja themed story.
4/14 c1 
3Shikamaru's babygirl
GREAT first chapter. I'm loving their friendship already! Considering how nice Naruto felt about being acknowledged after answering Iruka's question, maybe he'll try to study theory a bit more now hahah. Sasuke could be of great help.
3Shikamaru's babygirlGREAT first chapter. I'm loving their friendship already! Considering how nice Naruto felt about being acknowledged after answering Iruka's question, maybe he'll try to study theory a bit more now hahah. Sasuke could be of great help.
1/1 c17 Guest
666’th review, also, this shit is fucking fire, rereading it rn
666’th review, also, this shit is fucking fire, rereading it rn
2/17/2023 c100 Srw
Thank you for the original story. I very much enjoyed it.
Thank you for the original story. I very much enjoyed it.
1/30/2023 c100 mrjordanriver
Hi, I just consumed your fanfiction in a week and I must say that it is skilled writing. I agree with a lot of the critiques you said but that didn't stop me from finishing. I would also add that style at writing relationships is and genuine and how every relationship ideally should be. and that might be a weakness you have. Even the bad ones ended well. Oh calms down and dropped their problems in a natural ways. But I admit that such things are welcome occurrences in fantasy genre. How there was a cost to the friendship and that everyone was willing to pay it. I love that this Naruto wasn't as strong as the Canon one and yet his friendships made everything end up okay. Like maybe you should have had an epilogue of Itachi's funeral. But everything you wrote is in essence beautiful. Admit you definitely splattered some messes throughout. that's what makes your relationships so genuine. people can love each other in real life and things still might not work out. and I love that about your writing.
Thank you for writing.
Hi, I just consumed your fanfiction in a week and I must say that it is skilled writing. I agree with a lot of the critiques you said but that didn't stop me from finishing. I would also add that style at writing relationships is and genuine and how every relationship ideally should be. and that might be a weakness you have. Even the bad ones ended well. Oh calms down and dropped their problems in a natural ways. But I admit that such things are welcome occurrences in fantasy genre. How there was a cost to the friendship and that everyone was willing to pay it. I love that this Naruto wasn't as strong as the Canon one and yet his friendships made everything end up okay. Like maybe you should have had an epilogue of Itachi's funeral. But everything you wrote is in essence beautiful. Admit you definitely splattered some messes throughout. that's what makes your relationships so genuine. people can love each other in real life and things still might not work out. and I love that about your writing.
Thank you for writing.
1/30/2023 c100 mrjordanriver
Hi, I just consumed your fanfiction in a week and I must say that it is skilled writing. I agree with a lot of the critiques you said but that didn't stop me from finishing. I would also add that style at writing relationships is and genuine and how every relationship ideally should be. and that might be a weakness you have. Even the bad ones ended well. Oh calms down and dropped their problems in a natural ways. But I admit that such things are welcome occurrences in fantasy genre. How there was a cost to the friendship and that everyone was willing to pay it. I love that this Naruto wasn't as strong as the Canon one and yet his friendships made everything end up okay. I wish you would have ended on more of a sour note because you seem like somebody who enjoys Hallmark series.
Hi, I just consumed your fanfiction in a week and I must say that it is skilled writing. I agree with a lot of the critiques you said but that didn't stop me from finishing. I would also add that style at writing relationships is and genuine and how every relationship ideally should be. and that might be a weakness you have. Even the bad ones ended well. Oh calms down and dropped their problems in a natural ways. But I admit that such things are welcome occurrences in fantasy genre. How there was a cost to the friendship and that everyone was willing to pay it. I love that this Naruto wasn't as strong as the Canon one and yet his friendships made everything end up okay. I wish you would have ended on more of a sour note because you seem like somebody who enjoys Hallmark series.
1/18/2023 c4 KyoTheSlime
the man in front of him raised him head? ya made a small mistake.
it should be
the man in front of him raised his head instead. )!
the man in front of him raised him head? ya made a small mistake.
it should be
the man in front of him raised his head instead. )!
12/6/2022 c100 Dacoldest
Fantastic story. Stumbled upon it searching for a team 7 friends fic. This really embodied that. This is one of my all time great stories. I especially like that you didnt overpower Naruto and Sasuke with KCM and EMS. Let it hang out there as future growth. It's not perfect, but I really truly enjoyed this. nothing I love more than a well-written, long story that veers off of the main rails.
Fantastic story. Stumbled upon it searching for a team 7 friends fic. This really embodied that. This is one of my all time great stories. I especially like that you didnt overpower Naruto and Sasuke with KCM and EMS. Let it hang out there as future growth. It's not perfect, but I really truly enjoyed this. nothing I love more than a well-written, long story that veers off of the main rails.
8/17/2022 c34 Theworldsweakest
I really enjoyed the idea of this story. That being said somethings that made me drop was calling the Toad summons frogs constantly even with Jiraiya correcting them once and then even calling them frogs himself later on. Also the fact that one of the Sound ninja’s names were Dale and one of the Sand’s named Candice. Seeing such western names really broke the immersion and I couldn’t continue after that. I loved the ideas and story premise but couldn’t get past those things.
I really enjoyed the idea of this story. That being said somethings that made me drop was calling the Toad summons frogs constantly even with Jiraiya correcting them once and then even calling them frogs himself later on. Also the fact that one of the Sound ninja’s names were Dale and one of the Sand’s named Candice. Seeing such western names really broke the immersion and I couldn’t continue after that. I loved the ideas and story premise but couldn’t get past those things.