for starting over5/14/2019 c1 proll
Such a deep story.
Such a deep story.
5/12/2019 c1 
1Protegni
What was that?
This was a bit fast. No, this is way too fast...fast forward like 100x. This is epic! I'm amazed you managed to consolidate 18-20 years of story in like 865(or something around that) words. A bit confusing in the beginning but once the reader's mind adjusts with the pace of story, things fit in.
1ProtegniWhat was that?
This was a bit fast. No, this is way too fast...fast forward like 100x. This is epic! I'm amazed you managed to consolidate 18-20 years of story in like 865(or something around that) words. A bit confusing in the beginning but once the reader's mind adjusts with the pace of story, things fit in.