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12/9/2021 c15 
12Orochi-Dragon14
I have no idea why the preview is says it's in Maya's POV lol. I forgot to put the horizontal lines in too, so looks like I'll have to fix that :D
I really love this chapter. It shows how Manfred isn't some psycho people claim he is. We've talked about this though & I don't want to get off topic. I love Franziska being determined to help her papa & Miles. Her relationship with Fräu Klaus is adorable! Sometimes you have to explain things differently to kids.
I'm glad Miles will come home soon. Things will definitely change for sure. I'm excited for more :)
12Orochi-Dragon14I have no idea why the preview is says it's in Maya's POV lol. I forgot to put the horizontal lines in too, so looks like I'll have to fix that :D
I really love this chapter. It shows how Manfred isn't some psycho people claim he is. We've talked about this though & I don't want to get off topic. I love Franziska being determined to help her papa & Miles. Her relationship with Fräu Klaus is adorable! Sometimes you have to explain things differently to kids.
I'm glad Miles will come home soon. Things will definitely change for sure. I'm excited for more :)
7/20/2021 c14 Orochi-Dragon14
This chapter is so preciously sad. I love Baby Sass trying to comfort her "little brother" with Defense Attorney Fleck, the Jaguar. It makes sense they'd want to hear each other given all their nightmares.
The scene with them watching TV was too cute! I wanna watch Animal Stories! :D
Aww I'm glad Manny got them things they really were looking forward to.
Manny'a POV was so heartbreaking & creepy. You pulled off reality & warped thoughts so well. It's very executing!
Oh no! Miles!
Great as job! :)
This chapter is so preciously sad. I love Baby Sass trying to comfort her "little brother" with Defense Attorney Fleck, the Jaguar. It makes sense they'd want to hear each other given all their nightmares.
The scene with them watching TV was too cute! I wanna watch Animal Stories! :D
Aww I'm glad Manny got them things they really were looking forward to.
Manny'a POV was so heartbreaking & creepy. You pulled off reality & warped thoughts so well. It's very executing!
Oh no! Miles!
Great as job! :)
7/3/2020 c13 Orochi-Dragon14
Okay, Idk why the formatting went dumb, but whatever lol.
I loved Larry's POV. It's really sad how he feels so infiror to Phoenix & Miles, but then later we see Miles feels that way too so Phoenix probably does as well. Feenie giving Larry the idea to persue art was cute.
Miles POV was so sad. I loved him writing to his friends & father but not sure whether to send the letters to his friends or not. The contents of the letters made a lot of since too.
And we end with Baby Sass! I love how she wants Miles to comfort her after a nightmare. It's so sad how her mom is "gone". I love the promises to each other & they keep those promises.
Okay, Idk why the formatting went dumb, but whatever lol.
I loved Larry's POV. It's really sad how he feels so infiror to Phoenix & Miles, but then later we see Miles feels that way too so Phoenix probably does as well. Feenie giving Larry the idea to persue art was cute.
Miles POV was so sad. I loved him writing to his friends & father but not sure whether to send the letters to his friends or not. The contents of the letters made a lot of since too.
And we end with Baby Sass! I love how she wants Miles to comfort her after a nightmare. It's so sad how her mom is "gone". I love the promises to each other & they keep those promises.
5/25/2020 c12 Orochi-Dragon14
This is one of my favourite chapters because it captures the cuteness & brattiness of Franziska & how serious she is about learning yet it shows the sadness Phoenix & Larry (even though he acts like well, Larry about it) about Miles & why he's gone. I think it's a nice contrast.
I really liked Miles' POV & the lesson. English is strange like that & I'm sure many have made it so it made since why the woman did, but she was a bitch about it. Yeah Manny isn't going to let Baby Sass just play around even if her "little brother" is teaching her lol
I enjoyed the horse part & Forst is interesting. I liked learning about different things too. I hope you'll do more with horses in later chapters :) I do like how she respects him & her wanting him to have a horse of her own from him & him to keep teaching her
I loved Phoenix's POV I thought it was fantastic because you could just see how upset he was about Miles & how he felt betrayed Larry didn't seem to care..
My gods I love this story so much! More! Lol
This is one of my favourite chapters because it captures the cuteness & brattiness of Franziska & how serious she is about learning yet it shows the sadness Phoenix & Larry (even though he acts like well, Larry about it) about Miles & why he's gone. I think it's a nice contrast.
I really liked Miles' POV & the lesson. English is strange like that & I'm sure many have made it so it made since why the woman did, but she was a bitch about it. Yeah Manny isn't going to let Baby Sass just play around even if her "little brother" is teaching her lol
I enjoyed the horse part & Forst is interesting. I liked learning about different things too. I hope you'll do more with horses in later chapters :) I do like how she respects him & her wanting him to have a horse of her own from him & him to keep teaching her
I loved Phoenix's POV I thought it was fantastic because you could just see how upset he was about Miles & how he felt betrayed Larry didn't seem to care..
My gods I love this story so much! More! Lol
4/2/2020 c11 Orochi-Dragon14
I love the switches from past & present. I feel like it flows so well. It was nice seeing Maya & Pearl. I love Maya trying to figure out how to help Miles. & That hint! Yes! Love it!
Phoenix's pov was great! I loved him thinking about Miles & their past. The room scene was funny & cute!
Scruffy's POV was amazing. Short & sweet! Yes! Gods I'm so excited about that part!
Baby Sass wanting Miles!
I love the switches from past & present. I feel like it flows so well. It was nice seeing Maya & Pearl. I love Maya trying to figure out how to help Miles. & That hint! Yes! Love it!
Phoenix's pov was great! I loved him thinking about Miles & their past. The room scene was funny & cute!
Scruffy's POV was amazing. Short & sweet! Yes! Gods I'm so excited about that part!
Baby Sass wanting Miles!
1/13/2020 c10 Orochi-Dragon14
I just love this part of your story! Baby Sass is the best! You can tell she's spoilt lol. My favourite part was her trying to put syrup on Miles' shirt! Priceless!
I loved Miles' POV it was great! The language barrier is being done well.
I love the way you do Manny. He's Manny, but he's not some evil fucktard everyone claims he is. (Obviously, I could go on about this, but I won't lol). I really love his struggles of what he wants to do about Miles.
I think it's great you're going through Franziska's & Miles' lasts with each other. I think it brings life to the story.
I just love this part of your story! Baby Sass is the best! You can tell she's spoilt lol. My favourite part was her trying to put syrup on Miles' shirt! Priceless!
I loved Miles' POV it was great! The language barrier is being done well.
I love the way you do Manny. He's Manny, but he's not some evil fucktard everyone claims he is. (Obviously, I could go on about this, but I won't lol). I really love his struggles of what he wants to do about Miles.
I think it's great you're going through Franziska's & Miles' lasts with each other. I think it brings life to the story.
12/23/2019 c9 Orochi-Dragon14
The start of the past! I just love how you're doing this! It's beyond precious! I love Franziska & Miles going back to their beginnings. I'm so excited about their adventure!
Baby Sass is the best! She's beyond adorable! I just love how she refused to go to bed & then expected a story . Her reaction to Miles was fantastic! Of course she'd declare him her "little brother" lol.
Miles' POV was great as well. It was nice seeing his thoughts on what had happened & his meeting with his new family. Edda is very sweet & I feel bad for her that she lost her mom.
Manny's POV was really great! It was interesting to see his thoughts and him thinking back on that incident & case. I really do believe he struggled with this for quite a while. It's sad how things went down.
I can't wait for more! Especially you actually writing the next chapter. It's been forever! :P
The start of the past! I just love how you're doing this! It's beyond precious! I love Franziska & Miles going back to their beginnings. I'm so excited about their adventure!
Baby Sass is the best! She's beyond adorable! I just love how she refused to go to bed & then expected a story . Her reaction to Miles was fantastic! Of course she'd declare him her "little brother" lol.
Miles' POV was great as well. It was nice seeing his thoughts on what had happened & his meeting with his new family. Edda is very sweet & I feel bad for her that she lost her mom.
Manny's POV was really great! It was interesting to see his thoughts and him thinking back on that incident & case. I really do believe he struggled with this for quite a while. It's sad how things went down.
I can't wait for more! Especially you actually writing the next chapter. It's been forever! :P
11/29/2019 c8 Orochi-Dragon14
Damn the attempted suicide chapter! Poor Miles! It was just too much! I'm glad Scruffy saved him in the nick of time. Poor Sass! You know she'd have a hard time with Miles' death, so I'm sure once she & Miles get back she'll treat Scruffy even better. I really love these three's relationship. You can tell they have a close bond.
Yes! The Baby Sass Chronicles!
Damn the attempted suicide chapter! Poor Miles! It was just too much! I'm glad Scruffy saved him in the nick of time. Poor Sass! You know she'd have a hard time with Miles' death, so I'm sure once she & Miles get back she'll treat Scruffy even better. I really love these three's relationship. You can tell they have a close bond.
Yes! The Baby Sass Chronicles!
11/5/2019 c7 4TheVonKarmaSiblings
Your writing of the siblings is still the most beautoful, i could just imagine Miles holding his siter on her knee letting her break and ther nicknames adn I cried, to beautiful
4TheVonKarmaSiblingsYour writing of the siblings is still the most beautoful, i could just imagine Miles holding his siter on her knee letting her break and ther nicknames adn I cried, to beautiful
11/4/2019 c7 12Orochi-Dragon14
I really loved the POVs you did in this chapter. I think it really brought the situation into light. Miles' POV with the bit of German & English between him & Sass was really good. It showed her struggles & the need to be comforted, but allowed for us, the audience (as English speakers) & the rest to get an idea of what Sass was saying. It's hilarious Miles got teased over his samurai shows & tried to deny it. I really hope you do a marathon with everyone over. Can you imagine Simon there watching? :D
Sass' POV was so sad. You could feel her struggle to reveal to Katharina about their Papa. I think you're doing a great job on the relationship between Sass & Katharina. You can tell Kathy is very distant from her Papa, but still cares. Rilia was very precious!
Maya's POV was great! I really loved how you added more to her leaving & how she's trying yo be strong because she knows she doesn't have much time. It's what I love about her.
Damn the preview :'( & Miles had such a resolve too!
12Orochi-Dragon14I really loved the POVs you did in this chapter. I think it really brought the situation into light. Miles' POV with the bit of German & English between him & Sass was really good. It showed her struggles & the need to be comforted, but allowed for us, the audience (as English speakers) & the rest to get an idea of what Sass was saying. It's hilarious Miles got teased over his samurai shows & tried to deny it. I really hope you do a marathon with everyone over. Can you imagine Simon there watching? :D
Sass' POV was so sad. You could feel her struggle to reveal to Katharina about their Papa. I think you're doing a great job on the relationship between Sass & Katharina. You can tell Kathy is very distant from her Papa, but still cares. Rilia was very precious!
Maya's POV was great! I really loved how you added more to her leaving & how she's trying yo be strong because she knows she doesn't have much time. It's what I love about her.
Damn the preview :'( & Miles had such a resolve too!
10/9/2019 c6 4TheVonKarmaSiblings
Poor poor Franzy, Poor Poor Miles. These two must be hurting so so much, my poor Sass and Edgey Poo!
4TheVonKarmaSiblingsPoor poor Franzy, Poor Poor Miles. These two must be hurting so so much, my poor Sass and Edgey Poo!
10/7/2019 c6 12Orochi-Dragon14
All has been revealed & it's already starting to destroy Miles & Franny. It's so heartbreaking to see poor Sass wanting answers, but Manny not willing to give them. I love how you use canon banter about the lunch money. The bonds everyone is slowly forming are great!
12Orochi-Dragon14All has been revealed & it's already starting to destroy Miles & Franny. It's so heartbreaking to see poor Sass wanting answers, but Manny not willing to give them. I love how you use canon banter about the lunch money. The bonds everyone is slowly forming are great!
9/26/2019 c5 4TheVonKarmaSiblings
The parts with Franzy and Miles were beautiful in this chapter, I love the way you write them so so much, their love is beautiful. Larry though! His crush on Franzy is super funny
4TheVonKarmaSiblingsThe parts with Franzy and Miles were beautiful in this chapter, I love the way you write them so so much, their love is beautiful. Larry though! His crush on Franzy is super funny