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for Leap of Faith: the 57th Hunger Games SYOT

4/27/2020 c1 Guest
Im so sick of waiting for an update that won't come. Just delete it already
6/23/2019 c5 1NostalgicPride
Hmmm these two intrigue me, and I love the world building yet again: The amalgamation of different Districts- so well written, and I like them both. I prefer Sebastian, his perspective was very enthralling and with his life as a petty thief he may have a few tricks up his sleeve for in the Arena. I also like his determination, but the witty remarks that round out his observations- It really resonates with me, and I'll be rooting for him.
Maeve is responsible, and like Seb she is doing this for a reason- she's determined and I imagine she'll keep a level head. Both of these Volunteers have more of a humane element to their character that I really appreciate and I can't wait to see them interacting with others.
6/21/2019 c4 1District5Ravenclaw
This chapter was great. I really like the sevens
6/20/2019 c5 Six Winged Seraph
Sweet mother of- please tell me how you write this well. It's not fair. Not fair at all. You captured Sebastian perfectly. His additude, his life, the way he views the world.
You also wrote Maeve really well. (I hope I spelldd her name right). She seems like the kind of girl I might want to be friends with. Maybe. Not sure yet. Either way, I'm really looking forward to how she does in the Games.
6/20/2019 c5 3DefoNotAFangirl
Oooooooo I love these unconventional Career babies! I adore Careers, and I actively have to stop myself making endless Careers lol, and these children are no different!
6/20/2019 c4 DefoNotAFangirl
Oh my god your writing is so good! How did I not submit until now? I love these two!
6/20/2019 c5 1catscoolusername
Two very, very interesting tributes! Not the kinds of Careers you might typically expect. Definitely rooting for them.

I'm loving Seb already, in part because I definitely have a thing for thieves. Look, everyone has a type when it comes to characters they like, and that's just one of mine. Looking for a place to call home is definitely a worthy goal. I'm excited to see him in action - very sneaky, it'll definitely come in handy. Maeve has a wonderful voice, and I can only wonder how her poor sister will react when she finds out about her plan. Not too happy, I imagine. It's hard to pick a favorite between the two, but I think I'd have to go with Maeve. As much as I love a thief, something about her is just super interesting, and I can't wait to learn more.

The way you describe the setting is incredible, helped by the fact that District 4 has always been one of my favorites to imagine. At this point I'm looking forward to seeing the rest of the districts in this story just as much I'm looking forward to the story itself! Another great chapter, and I can't wait to see what's coming next. (Also, noticed a possible typo - Pasha says "I am" twice when she first shows up, and I don't think she's supposed to. Just thought I'd let you know in case that's a mistake!)
6/12/2019 c4 1NostalgicPride
Oh your approach to the Reapings is unique. I gloss over them too to prevent monotony. I'm going to give a sweeping impression of the chapter: Great, both characters are wonderfully written and have a distinctive edge to their perspectives that endears them to the reader. YAY! I doubt I'll be getting any tributes mixed up if you continue in this way. Now for a more thorough examination of the Tributes:
Bambi
13 years old, the younger tributes always get to me. I am such a woman :'( but I think Bambi has something about her that makes her a dark horse. Her astuteness and the level of observation in her POV means that very little is going to get by her. If she notices anything in the Arena, like an inconsistency or something, she will be able to exploit that. Yes, Haymitch did it- but Bambi might do it differently. There is also something incredibly mature about her that is refreshing. Moreover, unlike many younger tributes she has an in built ally :)
Silas
Oh the older brother, a truly tragic hero as he will probably lose his life trying to ensure his sister's victory. He is a teenage boy, bantering with friends with this invisible threat looming over him. Ah man, I'm literally hating that I know they're going to be reaped. There is a silent strength to him offset by his interactions with his friends and his disdain for the Games.

Siblings in the Games? That's just another kick in the teeth- I do prefer Bambi, but I feel as though Silas could have tricks up his sleeves. Wonderful tributes, congrats to the submitter and to you for bringing them to life.
Wonderful chapter again
-Clueless xoxo
6/12/2019 c3 NostalgicPride
Oh Augusta, that was COLD! And freakishly sinister- this 'Beast', man even the D4 tributes won't have an advantage: How will anyone survive? Poor Theodora, and for some reason I anticipate there will not be many emergency free days in preparation for these games.
Wonderfully written chapter, I need you to just write my story- I'll just give you plot points ;)
6/12/2019 c2 NostalgicPride
I like the world building that you are doing. I love Augusta and I think her fascination with knowledge and the imagery she uses just really appeals to me subconsciously: Oh another wonderful chapter.
Pollux, the juxtaposition of Pollux's awkward gait and his domineering presence is chillind. Despite his prosthetic. I doubt he is someone to trifle with- and another mystery: The Capitol Avox? I want to know ahaha.
As for the Arena, nothing overly complicated but a lot of potential and you haven't given too much detail. You have a talent for wetting the reader's appetite just enough to keep us thirsting for more.
Great chapter, but I feel that will be a common theme throughout the story :)
6/12/2019 c1 NostalgicPride
Oh my! So glad to have is exquisite...your phrasing and the pacing is great. I could literally feel the tension and your choice of vocabulary is astounding- PLEASE TEACH ME! Even though the nameless attendant was a minor character- she put the fear of God into me with the clipped imperatives.
Great chapter, and the way it ends just radiates tension and really encapsulates Augusta's subtle fear and amazement.
6/10/2019 c1 3RosebudBlooming
I know I’ve already reviewed but this is honestly so beautifully written and I really want to see what happens next. The latest chapter was so exciting and I loved the characters. Can’t wait to see what happens next!
6/9/2019 c4 1catscoolusername
Ahh, I'm so happy to see my characters already! You wrote them perfectly, it's amazing to see them come to life like this. I think you're handling the Reapings in a good way, introducing characters in ways that are unique to them instead of every character going through the same motions. Still, I'm looking forward to that recap - it might drag for some people to go through all twelve districts, but I do always enjoying seeing how the different characters react to being Reaped.

But yeah! Admittedly, I have a bias on this chapter since these are my characters, but I really did enjoy this! You write really well, particularly with characters' internal thoughts. It's always something I struggle to get right without losing track of the character's voice completely, so I really enjoy seeing how you do it. I'm looking forward to more chapters so I can get to know the rest of these kids! Very excited for the future of this story.
6/4/2019 c1 1Radio Free Death
It's written well, but at this point there has to be a much better way to start these SYOTs with something else other than the president and the gamemaker talking about the games. Skip to when something different is happening instead of rehashing the same thing every other story’s done.
6/4/2019 c1 3RosebudBlooming
Omg this was so exciting and well written and amazing and WOW! Can’t wait to read more!

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