6/6/2019 c1 Guest
You have a great premise, but you need to work on your grammar and edit your work a bit more to make your stories perfect. Otherwise, I liked it.

6/6/2019 c1 Guest
Good story, I don’t mean to be an asshole, but you need to work on your English.

6/6/2019 c1 2purple-square-Q-9-3
You need a beta reader.