
10/9/2023 c6 bobthebuilding
Lol previous reviewer: it might not be common for children to argue about snakes being venomous not poisonous, but it certainly *is* the kind of thing Hermione would go out of her way to correct someone about lmao.
Lol previous reviewer: it might not be common for children to argue about snakes being venomous not poisonous, but it certainly *is* the kind of thing Hermione would go out of her way to correct someone about lmao.
10/1/2023 c6 Guest
Yes, of course, it's completely normal for two 11-year-olds to argue whether a snake is poisonous or venomous.
The inability to properly write children is very common in fanfiction, but you are partibularly bad at it.
Yes, of course, it's completely normal for two 11-year-olds to argue whether a snake is poisonous or venomous.
The inability to properly write children is very common in fanfiction, but you are partibularly bad at it.
9/30/2023 c33 Tulugaq
I’m getting kinda tired of the Tina character taking up so much storytime. Also there have been no big plot moves at all. It feels as if Voldemort and Dumbledore has disappeared from the story and Harry is turning into a side character.
I’m getting kinda tired of the Tina character taking up so much storytime. Also there have been no big plot moves at all. It feels as if Voldemort and Dumbledore has disappeared from the story and Harry is turning into a side character.
9/30/2023 c28 Tulugaq
Tina is kinda creeping me out. Shes kinda getting set up as an enemy and betrayer.
Tina is kinda creeping me out. Shes kinda getting set up as an enemy and betrayer.
9/6/2023 c19 suziq968
If you want this whole not really a bad guy schtick to work you're gonna have to edit your earlier chapters. Currently, it feels like two different characters. A spiteful MOB changed to a forgetful possibly overwhelmed old man. I don't particularly like either of them, but it's really confusing as is.
If you want this whole not really a bad guy schtick to work you're gonna have to edit your earlier chapters. Currently, it feels like two different characters. A spiteful MOB changed to a forgetful possibly overwhelmed old man. I don't particularly like either of them, but it's really confusing as is.
9/6/2023 c19 suziq968
If you want this whole not really a bad guy schtick to work you're gonna have to edit your earlier chapters. Currently, it feels like two different characters. A spiteful MOB changed to a forgetful possibly overwhelmed old man. I don't particularly like either of them, but it's really confusing as is.
If you want this whole not really a bad guy schtick to work you're gonna have to edit your earlier chapters. Currently, it feels like two different characters. A spiteful MOB changed to a forgetful possibly overwhelmed old man. I don't particularly like either of them, but it's really confusing as is.
9/5/2023 c11 suziq968
You kinda missed the good mark because you made him an irredeemable thief. There's no excuse for that or his petty turning off of the light when dropping Harry off. He's a MOB in this story and I don't think you can change that at this point. Sorry.
You kinda missed the good mark because you made him an irredeemable thief. There's no excuse for that or his petty turning off of the light when dropping Harry off. He's a MOB in this story and I don't think you can change that at this point. Sorry.
9/5/2023 c11 suziq968
You kinda missed the good mark because you made him an irredeemable thief. There's no excuse for that or his petty turning off of the light when dropping Harry off. He's a MOB in this story and I don't think you can change that at this point. Sorry.
You kinda missed the good mark because you made him an irredeemable thief. There's no excuse for that or his petty turning off of the light when dropping Harry off. He's a MOB in this story and I don't think you can change that at this point. Sorry.
9/3/2023 c1 Guest
By the ancient gods YES PLEASE keep writing this story I’m on the 5th paragraph and I’m already enraptured by your focal point and characters the development alone when most want to talk about how the Dursley’s were awful to Harry no fan fiction that I could find told them in a more realistic and humane way rather than archaic drama. You put more detail and development into the story
Thank You
Phynaxum Perrilinean
By the ancient gods YES PLEASE keep writing this story I’m on the 5th paragraph and I’m already enraptured by your focal point and characters the development alone when most want to talk about how the Dursley’s were awful to Harry no fan fiction that I could find told them in a more realistic and humane way rather than archaic drama. You put more detail and development into the story
Thank You
Phynaxum Perrilinean
8/13/2023 c22
3SamIthuriel
1) Your explanation on why Fawkes bonded with APWBD is the best I’ve come across. 2) Your herbalist mentioned his muggleborn mother died back in the “first” war; at this point in the timeline there has only been the one war with Moldie.

1) Your explanation on why Fawkes bonded with APWBD is the best I’ve come across. 2) Your herbalist mentioned his muggleborn mother died back in the “first” war; at this point in the timeline there has only been the one war with Moldie.
8/8/2023 c43 Guest
good story
good story