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5/6/2020 c3 LyraHollow
MORE!
1/21/2020 c3 LuxCranel00
pls more update
12/23/2019 c3 11Kimera20
This story is awesome!
12/22/2019 c2 5Ricardo753
Is a Gary Stu...
12/22/2019 c3 Light Dark Mark 1999
Hi,
Not to be rude but the Meowth in pokedex entry is Female.
You have named it as Male.
12/22/2019 c3 jurassicdinodrew
nice to have ya back, looking forward to see more of this, and i wonder if Pikachu and Mew will pair up in this... and i wonder if Ash will catch a female Eevee that can change into all of her Eeveeolutions and back again like how that mega evolution thing works, and i hope Ash does better on the gyms and leagues than he did in cannon too, good luck and keep up the good work.
12/22/2019 c3 1Bloody Rogue dragon deity king
Sweet beans in a basket
7/11/2019 c2 Bloody Rogue dragon deity king
Nice work
7/10/2019 c2 jurassicdinodrew
nice work on this chapter, can't wait for more, and i hope Ash wins all the Pokemon leagues, from Kanto, to Johto, Hoenn, Sinnoh, Unova, Kalos and Alola, i also like that how you got Mew have a spot on Ash's shoulder like Pikachu does as she is the right size for it, can't wait for the next chapter to find out what's next for our hero, good luck and keep up the good work.
7/10/2019 c2 anarion87
nice chapter
6/22/2019 c1 Stylepoints Zero
Are you this desperate for reviews that you let St review?
6/22/2019 c1 12Blue Glass Spear
I tried to warn you. You just don't want to respond.

[ don’t watch the anime, so I’m not going to be able to review this story on content. Please tag your story as anime fic so people searching for anime fic can find it.]

I tried to warn you via pms but no. This user is lying. They have watched the anime and no one uses the world tag to search here.

[title needs to be fully capitalized.]

It is properly capitalized.

[might want to pick a more original title. There are quite literally thousands of titles in this category that are variations on, if not identical to, this one.]

This is a lie.

[Summaries should tell us more than just the genre. What is this event that's so important? What separates this story from the quite literally thousands of others with the same premise?]

Once again that is a plot summary. Secondly St wants you to literally tell us your whole story. And again there are not thousands of stories like this one.

[Ketchum" is also a name, and should be capitalized.]

Not really.

[guarantee you do not need a speech key]

You do.

[better if you separate your author notes with a horizontal line; otherwise, they look like part of the story. ]

Your author notes are bold. No one is this dumb.

[You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. ]

Pokemon names are not species names. Game Freak gone on record that they are proper nouns.

[You’re formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as [“Hello,” she said] or [“Hello!” she said], never [“Hello.” She said] or [“Hello,” She said] or [“Hello” she said] or [“Hello!” She said]. ]

This is false. Dialogue is a seperate sentence as such it is written as ("Hello," She said) or as ("Hello!" She yelled)

[You can add horizontal lines with the hr tag, or through the in-site editor.]

Don't do it. It ruins the reading.
6/22/2019 c1 23St Elmo's Fire
I don’t watch the anime, so I’m not going to be able to review this story on content. Please tag your story as anime fic so people searching for anime fic can find it. Find your story under “Manage Stories” and select it from the dropdown menu that says “World: Any” in the “Category” section.

Your title needs to be fully capitalized.

You might want to pick a more original title. There are quite literally thousands of titles in this category that are variations on, if not identical to, this one.

[A single event can change someone's whole life. See how this single event changes the life of one Ash ketchum.]

Summaries should tell us more than just the genre. What is this event that's so important? What separates this story from the quite literally thousands of others with the same premise?

"Ketchum" is also a name, and should be capitalized.

I guarantee you do not need a speech key. If basic actions aren’t obvious from context, something has gone more wrong than a key can fix.

It’s better if you separate your author notes with a horizontal line; otherwise, they look like part of the story. You can do this through the in-site editor.

Titling chapters in the story itself looks kinda weird; the dropdown menu should suffice.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like trainer or professor or gym.

You’re formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as [“Hello,” she said] or [“Hello!” she said], never [“Hello.” She said] or [“Hello,” She said] or [“Hello” she said] or [“Hello!” She said]. This is because dialogue and speech tags are considered to be part of the same sentence, so they have to flow together. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb. In that case, the second part IS considered a separate sentence, so it’s written as [“Hello.” She grinned], never [“Hello,” she grinned]. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like “laughed” or “giggled” is in the second category. (“Speak” is also not a speech verb.) Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s [“Hi,” she said. “This is it.”] not [“Hi,” she said, “this is it.”] or [“Hi,” she said “this is it.”] And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s [“Hi. This,” she said, “is it.”] The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks (or single quotes) with thoughts. This is because quotation marks for thoughts make it look like your characters are talking out loud, which is confusing to the reader.

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You can add horizontal lines with the hr tag, or through the in-site editor.
6/18/2019 c1 Mark Andrew
Few words missing here and there, makes for slight freeze.
Otherwise interesting start. Will you have the starting age be 10? Or raise it to 13 or so like some stories do?
6/20/2019 c1 anarion87
nice so far
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