for Harry Potter Football12/5/2019 c6 Kris
It's always nice to see a Harry Potter who isn't interested in the magical world, though this is the first time I've seen football as the reason. :)
It's always nice to see a Harry Potter who isn't interested in the magical world, though this is the first time I've seen football as the reason. :)
10/8/2019 c6 autumngold
Thank you for your excellent story! I love how you helped Harry escape from Hogwarts and Dumbledore's plans. Even better is that Voldemort never returned and there was never a second wizarding war despite Dumbledore's manipulations. Outstanding story!
Thank you for your excellent story! I love how you helped Harry escape from Hogwarts and Dumbledore's plans. Even better is that Voldemort never returned and there was never a second wizarding war despite Dumbledore's manipulations. Outstanding story!
9/9/2019 c6 Guest
I think you should have had dumbledore keel over as all you had written implied D would be putting harry's name in the cup. I wish you had included marriage and children for harry; or at least a string of glamorous girlfriends. Thinking of the story as a whole, i enjoyed this very different story and liked that harry stayed away from hogwarts & the wizarding world but I wish you'd rounded out all the characters with a bit more dialogue, especially early in the story. Because of this Harry's football obsession was a bit one dimensional and there was little interaction with the creevey brothers, plus he didn't always call mrs creevey 'mum' which confused me. Nice original story!
I think you should have had dumbledore keel over as all you had written implied D would be putting harry's name in the cup. I wish you had included marriage and children for harry; or at least a string of glamorous girlfriends. Thinking of the story as a whole, i enjoyed this very different story and liked that harry stayed away from hogwarts & the wizarding world but I wish you'd rounded out all the characters with a bit more dialogue, especially early in the story. Because of this Harry's football obsession was a bit one dimensional and there was little interaction with the creevey brothers, plus he didn't always call mrs creevey 'mum' which confused me. Nice original story!
6/27/2019 c6 
1Araytigre
That was a lot of fun, here we had a Harry that had a plan for his Life, which in general didn't include Magic, or the Wizarding World as a whole. It was a little sad at what happened to Moody, but if he had been a little more "Vigilant", he might have lived longer. Naturally, at the end of the First Task, and Albus asked Magic to render Judgement, they all assumed that Harry had lost his Magic, and the death of Moody was a fluke of fate. Wormtail getting caught like he did was perfect, and the Head Unspeakable soon discovered that Tom needed an AK for each of the remaining Horcruxes that were active, in order to finish him off for good, of interestingly enough, it Did Not require Harry's assistance in any way, shape, or form (so much for Albus' Prophecy). Thank You. TTFN
1AraytigreThat was a lot of fun, here we had a Harry that had a plan for his Life, which in general didn't include Magic, or the Wizarding World as a whole. It was a little sad at what happened to Moody, but if he had been a little more "Vigilant", he might have lived longer. Naturally, at the end of the First Task, and Albus asked Magic to render Judgement, they all assumed that Harry had lost his Magic, and the death of Moody was a fluke of fate. Wormtail getting caught like he did was perfect, and the Head Unspeakable soon discovered that Tom needed an AK for each of the remaining Horcruxes that were active, in order to finish him off for good, of interestingly enough, it Did Not require Harry's assistance in any way, shape, or form (so much for Albus' Prophecy). Thank You. TTFN
6/25/2019 c6 2trekkifulron
I like how this ended.
Great story. One error stood out. In chapter 1... "Harry also flourished outside of school and football. Initially the Creeveys had decided being a host family would be a good source of additional income. Milk deliverymen didn't earn a whole lot and with two young boys in the house the finances were already feeling the pinch. However Harry quickly became more like an older cousin living with them than a boarder. Nicholas Angel took up a role as an uncle to the two Creevey boys quickly incorporating them in to his outings with Harry. Dennis being only a year younger was easy to accommodate but occasionally special arrangements were required to deal with Dennis who was three years Harry junior" It sounds like both boys are named Dennis. Other than that it is quite well written and fun to read.
2trekkifulronI like how this ended.
Great story. One error stood out. In chapter 1... "Harry also flourished outside of school and football. Initially the Creeveys had decided being a host family would be a good source of additional income. Milk deliverymen didn't earn a whole lot and with two young boys in the house the finances were already feeling the pinch. However Harry quickly became more like an older cousin living with them than a boarder. Nicholas Angel took up a role as an uncle to the two Creevey boys quickly incorporating them in to his outings with Harry. Dennis being only a year younger was easy to accommodate but occasionally special arrangements were required to deal with Dennis who was three years Harry junior" It sounds like both boys are named Dennis. Other than that it is quite well written and fun to read.
6/22/2019 c6 Guest
Very good story! I hope there would be more like it :)
Very good story! I hope there would be more like it :)
6/24/2019 c6 gbttown1
A good story with a very original plot line, a not unexpected climax that falls into line of other similar stories. The epilogue at the end was again typical and sort of over done.
A good story with a very original plot line, a not unexpected climax that falls into line of other similar stories. The epilogue at the end was again typical and sort of over done.
6/20/2019 c6 Guest
Cool story, could have been an epic Harry vs dumbles struggle but you took an easier route with a cop out ending.
Still a good read though
Cool story, could have been an epic Harry vs dumbles struggle but you took an easier route with a cop out ending.
Still a good read though
6/20/2019 c1 Guest
Not upto your usual standards. Sorry. Jim Raschard was a much better tale
Not upto your usual standards. Sorry. Jim Raschard was a much better tale
6/22/2019 c6 16twilliams1797
excellent story, it kept me reading when I should be elsewhere.
a couple minor quibbles:
Centaur's is wrong. no apostrophe unless it is possessive. Same with Granger's in this chapter.
Also at one point Amelia Bones was listed as Amanda.
other than that, great story, I enjoyed it very much
Thanks for writing and sharing.
16twilliams1797excellent story, it kept me reading when I should be elsewhere.
a couple minor quibbles:
Centaur's is wrong. no apostrophe unless it is possessive. Same with Granger's in this chapter.
Also at one point Amelia Bones was listed as Amanda.
other than that, great story, I enjoyed it very much
Thanks for writing and sharing.