for Harry Black Book 1: The Hero Returns9/5/2022 c7 Deccam
It really doesn’t make any sense for Sirius to remain a criminal in this story. The only reason he was thought of as a criminal in canon was because of wormtails death and the aurors dragging him away. With dumbledore knowing the truth as well as moony, it makes 0 sense for him to have been called a criminal by the public.
It really doesn’t make any sense for Sirius to remain a criminal in this story. The only reason he was thought of as a criminal in canon was because of wormtails death and the aurors dragging him away. With dumbledore knowing the truth as well as moony, it makes 0 sense for him to have been called a criminal by the public.
8/24/2022 c1 
2KnickKnack1
Quick note: Love the story by the way. But if Sirius hadn't seen Andy in years how could Nymphadora remember him. I think it should read, hadn't seen her in months. Or similar. Just a small suggestion. Again love love love where this story is going,
2KnickKnack1Quick note: Love the story by the way. But if Sirius hadn't seen Andy in years how could Nymphadora remember him. I think it should read, hadn't seen her in months. Or similar. Just a small suggestion. Again love love love where this story is going,
8/20/2022 c14 Guest
All right don’t understand the last two chapters. Why is Harry going out of his way to be kind to Ron. I don’t understand your reasoning other than the fact that Ron was his friend in Canaan and you’re trying to make some kind of connection. Second thing is does Sirius Black know the kind a manipulator Dumbledore is and if he does then why the fuck did he just lead Harry by the hand to this predator. I don’t remember serious giving any warnings to Dumbledore I would fucking vilify the shit out of Dumbledore basically implying to Harry that he is as evil as Voldemort but in a different way. I feel like in the story serious didn’t educate him enough to be suspicious and on guard against Dumbledore. It’s quite a pathetic thing for serious to do to allow him to wander into the clutches of such a sinister and manipulative shithead.
All right don’t understand the last two chapters. Why is Harry going out of his way to be kind to Ron. I don’t understand your reasoning other than the fact that Ron was his friend in Canaan and you’re trying to make some kind of connection. Second thing is does Sirius Black know the kind a manipulator Dumbledore is and if he does then why the fuck did he just lead Harry by the hand to this predator. I don’t remember serious giving any warnings to Dumbledore I would fucking vilify the shit out of Dumbledore basically implying to Harry that he is as evil as Voldemort but in a different way. I feel like in the story serious didn’t educate him enough to be suspicious and on guard against Dumbledore. It’s quite a pathetic thing for serious to do to allow him to wander into the clutches of such a sinister and manipulative shithead.
8/20/2022 c12 Guest
I swear if I was Sirius Black as soon as I hear Dumbledore saying any of that shit I would’ve taken Harry out over there. What exactly has Harry benefited from coming to Hogwarts. I personally haven’t seen Harry benefit I haven’t seen him getting better at anything sounds like having private tutors would be better than having classes with a teacher teaching to the lowest pupil. Second thing is I hope he doesn’t just take What Malfoy is saying he needs to react. He shouldn’t wait until they make another move I never understood people who do this to allow mouth way to say something or do something and then they respond and then they think everything is OK while the loudmouth way to attack you need to attack him until he is too scared for dead to attack you again. Also would be nice if Harry was strong enough he has all those victims I mean Jeff eater children just sitting around that he could have some fun with while I went and I need to grow when you can kill them in infancy the dark Lord had a point got unlucky.
I swear if I was Sirius Black as soon as I hear Dumbledore saying any of that shit I would’ve taken Harry out over there. What exactly has Harry benefited from coming to Hogwarts. I personally haven’t seen Harry benefit I haven’t seen him getting better at anything sounds like having private tutors would be better than having classes with a teacher teaching to the lowest pupil. Second thing is I hope he doesn’t just take What Malfoy is saying he needs to react. He shouldn’t wait until they make another move I never understood people who do this to allow mouth way to say something or do something and then they respond and then they think everything is OK while the loudmouth way to attack you need to attack him until he is too scared for dead to attack you again. Also would be nice if Harry was strong enough he has all those victims I mean Jeff eater children just sitting around that he could have some fun with while I went and I need to grow when you can kill them in infancy the dark Lord had a point got unlucky.
8/20/2022 c4 Guest
It wouldn’t make sense for Harry to be friends with any of those characters I hope he doesn’t in the story. Can and Harry made sense having friends like those because Canon Harry was socially awkward and emotionally abuse child. This hair is smarter more self-confident and has self-respect. He wasn’t purposely destroyed integrated as a human being. honestly if anyone believe that Ron Weasley or Hermione Granger or the weirdo Neville as written in the books is someone who you would want to be friends with you are emotionally stunted as well.
It wouldn’t make sense for Harry to be friends with any of those characters I hope he doesn’t in the story. Can and Harry made sense having friends like those because Canon Harry was socially awkward and emotionally abuse child. This hair is smarter more self-confident and has self-respect. He wasn’t purposely destroyed integrated as a human being. honestly if anyone believe that Ron Weasley or Hermione Granger or the weirdo Neville as written in the books is someone who you would want to be friends with you are emotionally stunted as well.
8/20/2022 c3 Guest
Wow after reading this chapter serious needs to run the fuck away from the tonks. Treacherous little fucking worms that they are. What the fuck is wrong with that stupid ass bitch for just allowing a person she knows Sirius Black doesn’t want to get involved with Harry’s life to their house. There is absolutely no fucking reason that Harry should go to Hogwarts it is such a fucking stupid decision. I hope Harry isn’t stupid and wants to stay there because of friendship and all that other bullshit. Hogwarts is going to limit him he’s not going to learn as well he’s going to be dumber. I like to hear the story was going until he’s going to Hogwarts. There is nothing intelligent about mingling with Dumbledore’s if you want harry to survive. My god he should kick those two outta his family and never associate with of those fucking treacherous bitches.
Wow after reading this chapter serious needs to run the fuck away from the tonks. Treacherous little fucking worms that they are. What the fuck is wrong with that stupid ass bitch for just allowing a person she knows Sirius Black doesn’t want to get involved with Harry’s life to their house. There is absolutely no fucking reason that Harry should go to Hogwarts it is such a fucking stupid decision. I hope Harry isn’t stupid and wants to stay there because of friendship and all that other bullshit. Hogwarts is going to limit him he’s not going to learn as well he’s going to be dumber. I like to hear the story was going until he’s going to Hogwarts. There is nothing intelligent about mingling with Dumbledore’s if you want harry to survive. My god he should kick those two outta his family and never associate with of those fucking treacherous bitches.
8/17/2022 c36 Guest
I loved this version of harry potter as I always thought harry should pair with either hermione, Daphne or from another fan fiction story, Rachel. I'm hoping that harry figures out that he is a Norcross and between his family and friends eliminates it. But all in all,great story.
I loved this version of harry potter as I always thought harry should pair with either hermione, Daphne or from another fan fiction story, Rachel. I'm hoping that harry figures out that he is a Norcross and between his family and friends eliminates it. But all in all,great story.
8/17/2022 c29 The Reviewer
Hey, your story is amazing, stop disparaging yourself.
For 29 chapters you have over critiqued your own work. You don't have to critique yourself, if there's a mistake we the readers will notice and that is OK. We're also randos on the Internet our opinion doesn't really matter.
Your writing style is fantastic, your plot line is amazing, and the story pace is adequately chosen. I'm not saying this to be nice, these are facts. I'm extremely critical about what I read and have no problems quiting a story halfway through, I'm also a grammar snob. The story is not perfect but it never could be, perfection is not real. However, it is a really enticing story and I'm glad that you wrote it. Keep up the good work.
Hey, your story is amazing, stop disparaging yourself.
For 29 chapters you have over critiqued your own work. You don't have to critique yourself, if there's a mistake we the readers will notice and that is OK. We're also randos on the Internet our opinion doesn't really matter.
Your writing style is fantastic, your plot line is amazing, and the story pace is adequately chosen. I'm not saying this to be nice, these are facts. I'm extremely critical about what I read and have no problems quiting a story halfway through, I'm also a grammar snob. The story is not perfect but it never could be, perfection is not real. However, it is a really enticing story and I'm glad that you wrote it. Keep up the good work.
8/15/2022 c2 Guest
Dumbledore wasn’t considered the most powerful wizard ever. At best, he was considered second to Merlin. Likely, he was also ranked behind the Hogwarts founders or other wizards of note.
Dumbledore wasn’t considered the most powerful wizard ever. At best, he was considered second to Merlin. Likely, he was also ranked behind the Hogwarts founders or other wizards of note.
8/15/2022 c2 Guest
Your version of Harry would be in middle school. Middle school. At that age, most boys aren’t making out in locked rooms with girls. Dumbledore also wouldn’t have had the sword of gryphendore, since it isn’t an object to be bandied about. Would be a good way to start a war. And the books heavily imply Dumbledore didn’t know the identity of Voldemort until after the diary incident. He couldn’t have had the Gaunt memory at that point.
Your version of Harry would be in middle school. Middle school. At that age, most boys aren’t making out in locked rooms with girls. Dumbledore also wouldn’t have had the sword of gryphendore, since it isn’t an object to be bandied about. Would be a good way to start a war. And the books heavily imply Dumbledore didn’t know the identity of Voldemort until after the diary incident. He couldn’t have had the Gaunt memory at that point.
8/15/2022 c1 Guest
Nymphadora would not be that close to starting Hogwarts. She was only 7 years older than Harry, graduating the year before he started. He was 1 year old when Voldemort killed the Potters, meaning she was 8 at the time.
Nymphadora would not be that close to starting Hogwarts. She was only 7 years older than Harry, graduating the year before he started. He was 1 year old when Voldemort killed the Potters, meaning she was 8 at the time.