for Post-Apocalyptic Potter from a Parallel Universe1/24 c68 OscuraCat
Absolutely loved this story! It was phenomenal! (That was way too hard to spell that word, had to resort to voice-to-text) It is so well written and engaging! Can’t wait to read more of your works, have read your story with another MOD Harry in Twilight and it was great! Can’t remember if I had already commented on that story so extra love anyway!
Absolutely loved this story! It was phenomenal! (That was way too hard to spell that word, had to resort to voice-to-text) It is so well written and engaging! Can’t wait to read more of your works, have read your story with another MOD Harry in Twilight and it was great! Can’t remember if I had already commented on that story so extra love anyway!
41/15 c6 Dalriaden
Lol Harry's prophesy was only real because it was forced to be by others. If anything Harry's world highlights how self fulfilling prophecies are. Voldemort learns of it and nearly kills himself trying to prevent it then Dumbledore grooms Harry into it. Meanwhile a decade passes with Dumbledore and others giving zero fucks about punishing death eaters or ensuring voldy can't come back.
Lol Harry's prophesy was only real because it was forced to be by others. If anything Harry's world highlights how self fulfilling prophecies are. Voldemort learns of it and nearly kills himself trying to prevent it then Dumbledore grooms Harry into it. Meanwhile a decade passes with Dumbledore and others giving zero fucks about punishing death eaters or ensuring voldy can't come back.
1/11 c48 drago
hahaha amazing huh? don't you love it when nats a FUCKING CUNT THAT SHOULD BE SLEEPING ON THE DAMN COUCH and nobody cares? me neither
fuck you Nat "i love you" MY FUCKIN ASS! YOU WOULDNT BE HITTING HIM FOR PETTY SHIT!
hahaha amazing huh? don't you love it when nats a FUCKING CUNT THAT SHOULD BE SLEEPING ON THE DAMN COUCH and nobody cares? me neither
fuck you Nat "i love you" MY FUCKIN ASS! YOU WOULDNT BE HITTING HIM FOR PETTY SHIT!
1/10 c45 GroveWolf
You say 'usually sat for tea' but I don't think that Harry and Yao have had a face to face meeting since the first one. At least, I don't think you've mentioned it.
"Sancta Sanctorum" I thought it was Sanctum Sanctorum? Santorum?
You say 'usually sat for tea' but I don't think that Harry and Yao have had a face to face meeting since the first one. At least, I don't think you've mentioned it.
"Sancta Sanctorum" I thought it was Sanctum Sanctorum? Santorum?
1/10 c44 GroveWolf
get tracking charm
"father's company was at least had" fix that
Let me get this straight, for every hour inside, a year passes outside. Fury says we can only hold him for 24 hours of his time, which means 24 years of outside time. so when he gets out after what he thinks is 24 hours, 24 years will have passed?
piecing-piercing.
"dear caught in the headlights" deer
weary-wary
get tracking charm
"father's company was at least had" fix that
Let me get this straight, for every hour inside, a year passes outside. Fury says we can only hold him for 24 hours of his time, which means 24 years of outside time. so when he gets out after what he thinks is 24 hours, 24 years will have passed?
piecing-piercing.
"dear caught in the headlights" deer
weary-wary
1/9 c42 GroveWolf
they do did want
that people seem to think
"was there as well" were
"for a fly" flight
"thought enchanting" though
they do did want
that people seem to think
"was there as well" were
"for a fly" flight
"thought enchanting" though
1/9 c39 GroveWolf
"only gives you only more worth" needs rewording.
"contend themselves" content themselves.
"setup" set up
I have to wonder, when Harry sets up the Room for the kids, didn't he say before it would seem infinite as long as they weren't too far apart? but aren't they going to be spread out now?
"only gives you only more worth" needs rewording.
"contend themselves" content themselves.
"setup" set up
I have to wonder, when Harry sets up the Room for the kids, didn't he say before it would seem infinite as long as they weren't too far apart? but aren't they going to be spread out now?
1/8 c38 GroveWolf
eluded-alluded
Charles Xavier is saying he'd like to see the pensieve for himself? didn't he see it? is he covering up the fact that he's seen it?
eluded-alluded
Charles Xavier is saying he'd like to see the pensieve for himself? didn't he see it? is he covering up the fact that he's seen it?
1/8 c31 GroveWolf
Hey! I was right! Harry going around saying that you should be able to turn a power off was nonsense. does that mean that he'll take back what he said about Rogue?
her life wound, I think you meant would.
"if he was the only one who could retrieve it" that sentence needs to be reworked. I have to read it a few times to figure out that the He Odin is referring to is not himself.
hunger for life, sentence needs to be reworked.
Hey! I was right! Harry going around saying that you should be able to turn a power off was nonsense. does that mean that he'll take back what he said about Rogue?
her life wound, I think you meant would.
"if he was the only one who could retrieve it" that sentence needs to be reworked. I have to read it a few times to figure out that the He Odin is referring to is not himself.
hunger for life, sentence needs to be reworked.