
11/24/2022 c3 Thrilled Guest
Your description of the alien post apocalyptic world was fascinating.
And you have officially made Dudley Dursley cool.
That's amazing!
The whole chapter was a fantastic thriller.
A hero is rising, and his name is Dudley!
I personally enjoyed this far more than Harry's descent into darkness.
Well done!
Your description of the alien post apocalyptic world was fascinating.
And you have officially made Dudley Dursley cool.
That's amazing!
The whole chapter was a fantastic thriller.
A hero is rising, and his name is Dudley!
I personally enjoyed this far more than Harry's descent into darkness.
Well done!
11/24/2022 c4 Cool Guest
So the author wanted a world where magic can't easily fix injuries even tho in canon wizards can fix broken bones with a quick spell and missing bones with some spell work a potion and a relatively tiny amount of time.
That's all well and good.
But two things:
1) If taking Vernon to the hospital was always an option then Harry deciding to amputate the leg himself becomes completely outrageous!
That's on it's own, without taking in the part of abusing healing magic to do harm.
And
2) If the motorcycle was infact "a powerhouse in terms of speed" even without it's ability to fly then that's like saying that Harry could have avoided the whole conflict with the police and hit wizards just by taking a little bit more time to get where he needed to go. If the bloody flying runes were not going to last anyway, only provided a marginal increase in speed and brought a guaranteed chance of drawings unwanted attention then Harry's choice to use them at all other than to escape fatal danger is downright stupid.
So in a nutshell, by the time the fatal danger came for him, he didn't have the ability to fly, and had he not used the ability to fly he wouldn't have come to attract fatal danger in the first place.
If the whole thing couldn't have been easily avoided, if the MC had a bit a sense, it would have been a good thrill.
As it is, I found the whole ordeal involving Vernon of bad taste.
So the author wanted a world where magic can't easily fix injuries even tho in canon wizards can fix broken bones with a quick spell and missing bones with some spell work a potion and a relatively tiny amount of time.
That's all well and good.
But two things:
1) If taking Vernon to the hospital was always an option then Harry deciding to amputate the leg himself becomes completely outrageous!
That's on it's own, without taking in the part of abusing healing magic to do harm.
And
2) If the motorcycle was infact "a powerhouse in terms of speed" even without it's ability to fly then that's like saying that Harry could have avoided the whole conflict with the police and hit wizards just by taking a little bit more time to get where he needed to go. If the bloody flying runes were not going to last anyway, only provided a marginal increase in speed and brought a guaranteed chance of drawings unwanted attention then Harry's choice to use them at all other than to escape fatal danger is downright stupid.
So in a nutshell, by the time the fatal danger came for him, he didn't have the ability to fly, and had he not used the ability to fly he wouldn't have come to attract fatal danger in the first place.
If the whole thing couldn't have been easily avoided, if the MC had a bit a sense, it would have been a good thrill.
As it is, I found the whole ordeal involving Vernon of bad taste.
11/6/2022 c1 Guest
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10/31/2022 c16 Mr.Heller
This unfortunately wasn't worth 3 hours I spent on reading, tries too hard in horror, the result is edgy cringe.
This unfortunately wasn't worth 3 hours I spent on reading, tries too hard in horror, the result is edgy cringe.
10/30/2022 c16
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Please write the next chapter already. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot. I am sorry if I am being rude or annoying you with my reviews; I don’t mean to be rude or annoy you with my review; I just really enjoy your story a lot.

Please write the next chapter already. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot. I am sorry if I am being rude or annoying you with my reviews; I don’t mean to be rude or annoy you with my review; I just really enjoy your story a lot.
10/29/2022 c14 Phazer12
Cloak Me!? Wow, man, you have a way with words. And what a genius move to incorporate the three unforgivable with the three hallows and the lore. There's so much that can happen. But this scene just now reminded of the time in 4th book.
Voldemort Resurrected; Harry Resusciated
Both got the tilt to their voice (italics)
And now the Robe me/Cloak me scene. The followers themselves started calling him master and lord. The magic has recognized it. Still waiting for other major characters to enter (Voldie, Neville, Bella etc) And MOM to start destroying. There's another thing to take note of. Nymphadora Tonks to work with the auror.
Cloak Me!? Wow, man, you have a way with words. And what a genius move to incorporate the three unforgivable with the three hallows and the lore. There's so much that can happen. But this scene just now reminded of the time in 4th book.
Voldemort Resurrected; Harry Resusciated
Both got the tilt to their voice (italics)
And now the Robe me/Cloak me scene. The followers themselves started calling him master and lord. The magic has recognized it. Still waiting for other major characters to enter (Voldie, Neville, Bella etc) And MOM to start destroying. There's another thing to take note of. Nymphadora Tonks to work with the auror.
10/29/2022 c12 Phazer12
Man, you are making me excited with this last response about higher powers. You are right, you are brilliant, incorporating elements just as the readers think of it. I was wondering for past two chapters about the students at hogwarts, but now the news will no doubt follow. Wow, really interested to know exactly what corrupted the magical AI MoM, the alchemical blood and what will make that one go all dark and apocalyptic.
Man, you are making me excited with this last response about higher powers. You are right, you are brilliant, incorporating elements just as the readers think of it. I was wondering for past two chapters about the students at hogwarts, but now the news will no doubt follow. Wow, really interested to know exactly what corrupted the magical AI MoM, the alchemical blood and what will make that one go all dark and apocalyptic.
10/29/2022 c10 Phazer12
Wow, that was a good plan. Harry is definitely tipping over. But I like that there's a pattern. He feels what happened to him in his school years and the reactions of others, and now he wants them to feel the same. Forcefully bringing the group to the war instead of them sitting and thinking Harry and Dumbledore will win it for them. Lucius hates the crimes. The way he is preparing his army, it looks like he knows that the war will be brutal and long between Dark lord Voldy and himself walking a similar path. He wants a war where the two sides really fight it out and not act as a hero or assassin who killed the leader and think it's over.
Plus, he has no qualms himself spilling the war into the muggle world as it is. Why? I think a small flashback is needed to show how the magical world is integrating into the muggle world, taking it over as we saw through Yaxley's eyes. But still, to think the magical don't only have a one-on-one connection to the PM offices like explored in many fics but also to Police Head and other people.
Wow, that was a good plan. Harry is definitely tipping over. But I like that there's a pattern. He feels what happened to him in his school years and the reactions of others, and now he wants them to feel the same. Forcefully bringing the group to the war instead of them sitting and thinking Harry and Dumbledore will win it for them. Lucius hates the crimes. The way he is preparing his army, it looks like he knows that the war will be brutal and long between Dark lord Voldy and himself walking a similar path. He wants a war where the two sides really fight it out and not act as a hero or assassin who killed the leader and think it's over.
Plus, he has no qualms himself spilling the war into the muggle world as it is. Why? I think a small flashback is needed to show how the magical world is integrating into the muggle world, taking it over as we saw through Yaxley's eyes. But still, to think the magical don't only have a one-on-one connection to the PM offices like explored in many fics but also to Police Head and other people.
10/29/2022 c9 Phazer12
THis chapter needs a proofread. But damn Harry's decision at the last just goes on to deliver that he is indeed walking on the path. Just like Dumbledore, he is also not interested in those who would better remain in the neutral than join one side.
THis chapter needs a proofread. But damn Harry's decision at the last just goes on to deliver that he is indeed walking on the path. Just like Dumbledore, he is also not interested in those who would better remain in the neutral than join one side.
10/29/2022 c7 Phazer12
The first recruits of two sides. The one led by harry Potter and one by James Warren, father of Myrtle
The first recruits of two sides. The one led by harry Potter and one by James Warren, father of Myrtle
10/29/2022 c6 Phazer12
Man, these are so good. Magic being advanced to the stage that it will strike back just as natural disasters. Isn't it? Magical disasters. Flamels, Ghosts, and most of it all that dreamcatching sequence of Dudley showed us, that its going to be global.
Man, these are so good. Magic being advanced to the stage that it will strike back just as natural disasters. Isn't it? Magical disasters. Flamels, Ghosts, and most of it all that dreamcatching sequence of Dudley showed us, that its going to be global.
10/29/2022 c5 Phazer12
Ohhhh damn. Its true, Yaxely's right. The War has now started. I know its going to be dark and apocalyptic. Thanks Sinisterman for recommending this in his ifc. This great and has the potential to be one of the legendary fics. Go Go Go
Ohhhh damn. Its true, Yaxely's right. The War has now started. I know its going to be dark and apocalyptic. Thanks Sinisterman for recommending this in his ifc. This great and has the potential to be one of the legendary fics. Go Go Go