1/17 c5 yahska
20 acres is nowhere enough to establish a city. At best it could be considered a small village.
20 acres is nowhere enough to establish a city. At best it could be considered a small village.
1/6 c8 1Joe Lawyer
I love world building in my fics, and so far Percy is doing a nice job of that. I do wish, though, that he'd take more pleasure from his role.
I've noticed you haven't done anything with the shadow powers Hades gave Percy other than being able to see in the dark. Was that forgotten about?
Is Percy able to breathe underwater still? It hasn't happened yet or been answered in this fic. There are likely very valuable shipwrecks sitting on the bottom of the sea that only he could access.
I hope you come back to this one.
I love world building in my fics, and so far Percy is doing a nice job of that. I do wish, though, that he'd take more pleasure from his role.
I've noticed you haven't done anything with the shadow powers Hades gave Percy other than being able to see in the dark. Was that forgotten about?
Is Percy able to breathe underwater still? It hasn't happened yet or been answered in this fic. There are likely very valuable shipwrecks sitting on the bottom of the sea that only he could access.
I hope you come back to this one.
12/19/2023 c8 newboy
When the iron islands revolt, Percy should free some of the many slaves that the iron islands have, especially the ones in the mines. They would be perfect candidates to join his new city.
When the iron islands revolt, Percy should free some of the many slaves that the iron islands have, especially the ones in the mines. They would be perfect candidates to join his new city.
11/30/2023 c3 NathanielTheCat
My immediate problem is that Percy's fatal flaw is loyalty, and he would not forget Annabeth, especially not that quickly.
My immediate problem is that Percy's fatal flaw is loyalty, and he would not forget Annabeth, especially not that quickly.
11/26/2023 c1 Poplar4073
ugh, I can't stand these wish novels. Especially when there's some omnipotent being doing it. It's just too cringe. It's way better to just have unexplained reincarnation and powers.
ugh, I can't stand these wish novels. Especially when there's some omnipotent being doing it. It's just too cringe. It's way better to just have unexplained reincarnation and powers.
11/15/2023 c1 Romeperson
Your saying they can build a castle with 60 ft high walls which are 8 ft thick in two years? Sorry to say but no. Cutting the stones for something of that size would probably take at minimum half a year with the tools available at the time. Most castle walls in the medevial period were at most 30ft tall and thoes normally toom between 5-10 years (for a regular castle, just a castle) only smaller castles could be built as quick as two years. Percy however is building a castle and a city wall. Don’t get me started on the 40 MILE long STONE sewage tunnel. Whic would probably take even longer than the castle.
Your saying they can build a castle with 60 ft high walls which are 8 ft thick in two years? Sorry to say but no. Cutting the stones for something of that size would probably take at minimum half a year with the tools available at the time. Most castle walls in the medevial period were at most 30ft tall and thoes normally toom between 5-10 years (for a regular castle, just a castle) only smaller castles could be built as quick as two years. Percy however is building a castle and a city wall. Don’t get me started on the 40 MILE long STONE sewage tunnel. Whic would probably take even longer than the castle.
11/2/2023 c8 prinzjay1998
Dialogue is pretty meh (how tf did Olenna even knew they are in a planet? Also, "Dear" King Robert? Really?) and pacing is awful but the premise still somewhat interests me.
Yeah, the mind influence thingy is still a bit of stretch but ok, I guess. Tho I find it hard to believe that he can influence Ned into giving him a whole-ass land yet he can't influence someone close to him into not betraying him lol. Btw was that Claire?
Also, the Targaryens aren't the only dragon riding family in Old Valyria. Heck, they are even considered a minor house back then. Daenerys should've assumed that Percy must've been one of the dragonseeds left by the Valyrian Freehold, instead of assuming he was some sort of Targaryen pretender.
Dialogue is pretty meh (how tf did Olenna even knew they are in a planet? Also, "Dear" King Robert? Really?) and pacing is awful but the premise still somewhat interests me.
Yeah, the mind influence thingy is still a bit of stretch but ok, I guess. Tho I find it hard to believe that he can influence Ned into giving him a whole-ass land yet he can't influence someone close to him into not betraying him lol. Btw was that Claire?
Also, the Targaryens aren't the only dragon riding family in Old Valyria. Heck, they are even considered a minor house back then. Daenerys should've assumed that Percy must've been one of the dragonseeds left by the Valyrian Freehold, instead of assuming he was some sort of Targaryen pretender.
10/31/2023 c8 Guzel
Bro please don't make Percy end up with Margaery. Her lame ass don't deserve to be at up front.
Bro please don't make Percy end up with Margaery. Her lame ass don't deserve to be at up front.
11/1/2023 c8 8CRUDEN
Ah well a lot of people are going to try to play the game against Percy only to find out that he can be a literal force of nature sucks for them
Ah well a lot of people are going to try to play the game against Percy only to find out that he can be a literal force of nature sucks for them
10/30/2023 c8 maxe03
Don't get why they re calling Percy a pretender when he's never stated himself to be a Targaryen.
Didn't expect what's happening with ned. Given little finger knew enough to get someone close to Percy have to think he's the one intercepting needs ravens
Don't get why they re calling Percy a pretender when he's never stated himself to be a Targaryen.
Didn't expect what's happening with ned. Given little finger knew enough to get someone close to Percy have to think he's the one intercepting needs ravens
10/30/2023 c3 Kingrafi
Wasnt he suppose to get his three wishes is he dumb or something or am i tripping
Wasnt he suppose to get his three wishes is he dumb or something or am i tripping
10/30/2023 c3 Kingrafi
Bruh what the actual fuck is going on why would ned just say hey since i just met you and you saved my wife and kid im going to give a whole chunk of land without knowing anything else im sure you can defend the north from the ironborn
Bruh what the actual fuck is going on why would ned just say hey since i just met you and you saved my wife and kid im going to give a whole chunk of land without knowing anything else im sure you can defend the north from the ironborn