for Chaotic Good7/17/2023 c1 WeepingDiscord
Hope your all right man, you said you would be more active but it’s been around a year since the last checked in
Hope your all right man, you said you would be more active but it’s been around a year since the last checked in
57/10/2023 c15 JimmyBlah
Caught up, sad that this is where we left off, but at the same time thank you so much for sharing this wonderful work with all of us. Hope to see more of you in the future :D
Caught up, sad that this is where we left off, but at the same time thank you so much for sharing this wonderful work with all of us. Hope to see more of you in the future :D
6/28/2023 c15 Carlmike94
This was very different from basically any other Overlord fic I've read. Good job!
Looking forward to when Evileye (or Landfall? Not sure what she's called at this point) shows up, and now I'm really curious to see if you're gonna have the 13 heroes vs whatever-they-were-called or if Nazarick replaced them. Still, as long as it's a fun read I don't really care
This was very different from basically any other Overlord fic I've read. Good job!
Looking forward to when Evileye (or Landfall? Not sure what she's called at this point) shows up, and now I'm really curious to see if you're gonna have the 13 heroes vs whatever-they-were-called or if Nazarick replaced them. Still, as long as it's a fun read I don't really care
6/27/2023 c6 Carlmike94
I was not expecting the message from the Developers. That was surprisingly touching :)
Also, they unknowingly made him the scariest thing that the New World has ever, or will ever, see
I was not expecting the message from the Developers. That was surprisingly touching :)
Also, they unknowingly made him the scariest thing that the New World has ever, or will ever, see
6/24/2023 c8 Guest
Reading this so far I’m just gutted Albedo and Shalltear aren’t with our Ancient One that is incredibly disappointing
Reading this so far I’m just gutted Albedo and Shalltear aren’t with our Ancient One that is incredibly disappointing
6/18/2023 c15 The Druid's Codex
This is one of my favorite fan fictions of all time I cant wait until the reactions of Mamonga when he arrives maybe Ko can make some sort of beacon that will draw Mamonga's soul and body twords Nazeric faster so it still takes a wile for him to arrive but still before cannon. please keep writing
This is one of my favorite fan fictions of all time I cant wait until the reactions of Mamonga when he arrives maybe Ko can make some sort of beacon that will draw Mamonga's soul and body twords Nazeric faster so it still takes a wile for him to arrive but still before cannon. please keep writing
5/30/2023 c9 Guest
One of the biggest wastes of my time this year.
You obviously wanted the reader to connect with, understand, and follow your main character through their years of suffering, development, and wild wacky schemes. However, you gave just enough attention and detail to show the reader that "developments happened", "The characters are stronger now", and "years have passed between chapters", without anything noteworthy or meaningful being delivered to the readers. We are told "he's stronger now" or "he's bigger now", but we have no sense of scale for it. The character speaks with the same bored tone when he's describing days unending of monotonous grinding with little to no sleep as he does turning an entire world into a lava filled crater. There is not excitement, no development, no change in tone or pace to enthrall the reader or even keep their attention. If you wanted to simply give a banal list of "cool facts what happened before the important part.", do so inside a single chapter and make the rest interesting.
Here we are in this "New World", what should be the most exciting and interesting thing to happen yet, and I'm bored out of my skull. "Don't worry, he has plans and is unshakable in the face of danger.", the main character reassures me about himself in between lines of how something didn't go to plan and he's totally shaken, never mind how he doesn't act, think, or plan differently because of it. Never mind how we are told "He's really smart and that's how he does crazy cool stuff that makes everyone else wary of him.", because every time I read his thoughts and perspective it's a simplistic "I bashed my head against the wall and it broke, again." The whole thing reads like a financial report or a high school thesis on an assigned reading. I wanted to like it, it's why I bothered to give it this much time and effort, but it's a waste of everyone's time, including the author's.
One of the biggest wastes of my time this year.
You obviously wanted the reader to connect with, understand, and follow your main character through their years of suffering, development, and wild wacky schemes. However, you gave just enough attention and detail to show the reader that "developments happened", "The characters are stronger now", and "years have passed between chapters", without anything noteworthy or meaningful being delivered to the readers. We are told "he's stronger now" or "he's bigger now", but we have no sense of scale for it. The character speaks with the same bored tone when he's describing days unending of monotonous grinding with little to no sleep as he does turning an entire world into a lava filled crater. There is not excitement, no development, no change in tone or pace to enthrall the reader or even keep their attention. If you wanted to simply give a banal list of "cool facts what happened before the important part.", do so inside a single chapter and make the rest interesting.
Here we are in this "New World", what should be the most exciting and interesting thing to happen yet, and I'm bored out of my skull. "Don't worry, he has plans and is unshakable in the face of danger.", the main character reassures me about himself in between lines of how something didn't go to plan and he's totally shaken, never mind how he doesn't act, think, or plan differently because of it. Never mind how we are told "He's really smart and that's how he does crazy cool stuff that makes everyone else wary of him.", because every time I read his thoughts and perspective it's a simplistic "I bashed my head against the wall and it broke, again." The whole thing reads like a financial report or a high school thesis on an assigned reading. I wanted to like it, it's why I bothered to give it this much time and effort, but it's a waste of everyone's time, including the author's.
5/24/2023 c8 Kiyan Tribe
Now this is interesting I only read one fic where MC and Ainz were in different timeline. Though that was in beta phase and fic never came out officially as author. is busy irl. Sad. Man also I like Evileye so that's a plus
Now this is interesting I only read one fic where MC and Ainz were in different timeline. Though that was in beta phase and fic never came out officially as author. is busy irl. Sad. Man also I like Evileye so that's a plus
5/24/2023 c8 Kiyan Tribe
Am I wrong to think that Albedo should have been in Ancient One's harem rather than Momonga. I don't like it. Sue me I guess
Am I wrong to think that Albedo should have been in Ancient One's harem rather than Momonga. I don't like it. Sue me I guess
5/19/2023 c15 xDanilor
Hi! I have no idea you'll ever read this, but even if you won't, I have a thing that I must tell you. And that is thank you. Thank you for this fic, which has been an absolute delight to read from start to finish. I loved every second of it, form the first chapters of Yggdrasil to the cozy slice of life with the waifus. Your way of writing made this fic really unique from the rest, and Archer's first time? My heart skipped a few hundred beats there.
If you ever feel like coming back to this work again, which I hope with every fibre of my being, please continue the story in a way that makes every part of MC's early planning come into fruition. Make him do his thing, be that conquering, fighting, plotting or whatever. I wanna see the New Worlders utterly shocked at the sheer power of MC and his clique!
Oh and btw, i absolutely adored your OCs. Archer and Noa are two incredible characters, and I have found myself also loving Rubedo a lot. That other dragon, I don't really care much about him, but you seemed to have fun messing with him, so that's fine by me.
Anyway this up. Thanks so much for spending the time to write this, I won't forget this fic for as long as I can. If only I could i would forget it all and read it from page 1. Hopefully you'll come back, but even if you won't, just know that your work has been appreciated, a lot. Thanks one final time, and all the best.
Hi! I have no idea you'll ever read this, but even if you won't, I have a thing that I must tell you. And that is thank you. Thank you for this fic, which has been an absolute delight to read from start to finish. I loved every second of it, form the first chapters of Yggdrasil to the cozy slice of life with the waifus. Your way of writing made this fic really unique from the rest, and Archer's first time? My heart skipped a few hundred beats there.
If you ever feel like coming back to this work again, which I hope with every fibre of my being, please continue the story in a way that makes every part of MC's early planning come into fruition. Make him do his thing, be that conquering, fighting, plotting or whatever. I wanna see the New Worlders utterly shocked at the sheer power of MC and his clique!
Oh and btw, i absolutely adored your OCs. Archer and Noa are two incredible characters, and I have found myself also loving Rubedo a lot. That other dragon, I don't really care much about him, but you seemed to have fun messing with him, so that's fine by me.
Anyway this up. Thanks so much for spending the time to write this, I won't forget this fic for as long as I can. If only I could i would forget it all and read it from page 1. Hopefully you'll come back, but even if you won't, just know that your work has been appreciated, a lot. Thanks one final time, and all the best.
5/18/2023 c15 StarBoundDisaster
The most interesting and entertaining concept that has been explored in this AU has to be the apprenticeship of Cure-Elim, as well as the crafted lore that our MC presented to him. My favorite thing in fiction is subterfuge so I'm glad this was taken to the 11th degree in those final chapters.
There are some things that drag this story though, as others have pointed out, the romance for example, I think there is just too much of it being given 'screen' time. It should be there but not everything needs to happen on 'screen' so the plot can be given more time to progress. If you do come back with future chapters, I hope does chapters focus on moving the timeline forward, indulge more in the apprenticeship, maybe have interactions with the other dragons, etc. At least that's what I'd like to see.
Anyways, thank you for sharing this story.
The most interesting and entertaining concept that has been explored in this AU has to be the apprenticeship of Cure-Elim, as well as the crafted lore that our MC presented to him. My favorite thing in fiction is subterfuge so I'm glad this was taken to the 11th degree in those final chapters.
There are some things that drag this story though, as others have pointed out, the romance for example, I think there is just too much of it being given 'screen' time. It should be there but not everything needs to happen on 'screen' so the plot can be given more time to progress. If you do come back with future chapters, I hope does chapters focus on moving the timeline forward, indulge more in the apprenticeship, maybe have interactions with the other dragons, etc. At least that's what I'd like to see.
Anyways, thank you for sharing this story.