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3/1 c5 3Madmanminers
So great story.
Try using google docs and copying and pasting onto here that way tou can get spelling and grammar cheek. Also if you need an editor i would be happy to help. Also you have a different paragraph or line for when some ones speaking.

For example
"..." Alex said.
"..." Someone else said.

That more of a blunt example.

If your interested in me helping you edit pm me
3/1 c4 Madmanminers
I remember trying to sneak a couch past black watch. They really dont like couches they call in air support and tanks...
1/8 c5 Disabled-doctor
It’s alright but grammar needs work
12/16/2019 c4 Atryx10
Mercer also can't be rendered unconscious by anything less than a hostile strand of blacklight.
Dropping this here, as he's too OOC and the writing feels like it's all over the place.
12/16/2019 c3 Atryx10
Mercer is acting OOC.
12/16/2019 c2 Atryx10
This feels rushed.
Slow down the pace so that you can fit in more character interactions/development and what not.
11/8/2019 c3 alphaprince0
can it be a harem with blake and salem
9/21/2019 c5 1GCU Grey Area
Interesting concept .
Also alex can get powers without killing like how he got armor from alpha hunter midfight .
Also interestingly this isnt out of character after first game alex tried to live a normal life but was cheated that made him go full armstrong crazy.
9/8/2019 c5 Guest
cool
8/22/2019 c2 Earthly Entity
There are grammar issues here and there, but the story idea is interesting
8/22/2019 c5 Cyfier
Some errors here a and there, but the story it self is good.
Keep up the good work. :3
8/22/2019 c1 Earthly Entity
"Ruby started to wonder who or what is he" is Ruby stating this in third person?
8/19/2019 c5 Jorin
Finally, a fanfic that shows how broken and strong Alex Mercer is. You have earned a follow and favorite.
8/15/2019 c4 Guest
cool
8/13/2019 c4 CrazzyTony
interesting so far. hope to see more!
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