for Memories of a Future9/5/2022 c4 Guest
Have you thought that some roles of various characters (Main and secondary) are altered and change the whole history that Weiss, Blake and Jaune know... For example, you imagine a Blake (new timeline) with the personality of Adam Taurus or Yang is wearing the red hood and not Ruby, or Cinder hasn't gone bad.
Have you thought that some roles of various characters (Main and secondary) are altered and change the whole history that Weiss, Blake and Jaune know... For example, you imagine a Blake (new timeline) with the personality of Adam Taurus or Yang is wearing the red hood and not Ruby, or Cinder hasn't gone bad.
8/30/2022 c5 Nice
You could make Jaune save Summer's life... I know what you think, that topic has already been seen and it's very repetitive...
Look at it this way, that in this version, Jaune is aware that she is Summer Rose (unlike Relic of the future) and has a mental conflict, since Summer's death is supposed to be what will cause Ruby to become a huntress and they meet, however he also would not let another person die in front of his eyes...
And about Adam Taurus, I like the idea that it changes his life for the better, but I would like Weiss to save him, not Blake. (More than anything because of the irony, that Adam has a great hatred for the Schnee and in this new life, it would be the opposite...)
You could make Jaune save Summer's life... I know what you think, that topic has already been seen and it's very repetitive...
Look at it this way, that in this version, Jaune is aware that she is Summer Rose (unlike Relic of the future) and has a mental conflict, since Summer's death is supposed to be what will cause Ruby to become a huntress and they meet, however he also would not let another person die in front of his eyes...
And about Adam Taurus, I like the idea that it changes his life for the better, but I would like Weiss to save him, not Blake. (More than anything because of the irony, that Adam has a great hatred for the Schnee and in this new life, it would be the opposite...)
8/30/2022 c5 Guest
Didn't had any hope so when I saw a new chapter I thought it was a closing. But that's even more a good surprise. Good luck
Didn't had any hope so when I saw a new chapter I thought it was a closing. But that's even more a good surprise. Good luck
8/29/2022 c5 Pwucachu
Really excited, I was a huge fan of relic of the future, and Blake, Weiss, and Jaune seem like an interesting trio of protagonists.
Really excited, I was a huge fan of relic of the future, and Blake, Weiss, and Jaune seem like an interesting trio of protagonists.
8/29/2022 c5 
7MidKnightMoonglow99
I’ll be completely honest. I have no idea what to write here.
I’ve been trying to figure out for the past hour or so a good response to give you, but I’ve truly hit a brick wall in terms of what I could meaningful write. So I’m just going to keep it short and simple:
I’m overjoyed to see that you’re back to have another crack at creative write after a sizeable hiatus - especially in regards to “Memories of a Future”. I’ve also had a read of what you had to say within you AN of “ Little Grimm Riding Hood” and it’s good to see you pumped to get back into the swing of things.
All I have to say however though is to make sure that you don’t accidentally burn yourself out with this. You’re a talented write, and I’d hate to see you take another hiatus due to you overdoing it. Moderate and variety is key when writing for some, after all. If you think you’re capable, that’s fine. Just take care ether way.
Best of luck to you.
7MidKnightMoonglow99I’ll be completely honest. I have no idea what to write here.
I’ve been trying to figure out for the past hour or so a good response to give you, but I’ve truly hit a brick wall in terms of what I could meaningful write. So I’m just going to keep it short and simple:
I’m overjoyed to see that you’re back to have another crack at creative write after a sizeable hiatus - especially in regards to “Memories of a Future”. I’ve also had a read of what you had to say within you AN of “ Little Grimm Riding Hood” and it’s good to see you pumped to get back into the swing of things.
All I have to say however though is to make sure that you don’t accidentally burn yourself out with this. You’re a talented write, and I’d hate to see you take another hiatus due to you overdoing it. Moderate and variety is key when writing for some, after all. If you think you’re capable, that’s fine. Just take care ether way.
Best of luck to you.
8/29/2022 c5 Malorvik Valmorinchal Xaltulon
Good to hear things are going better for you, man. I look forward to continue reading your work.
Good to hear things are going better for you, man. I look forward to continue reading your work.
5/10/2020 c5 hirshja
Kinda hard to understand something when no details are given. That said, I do respect your decision and hope all is well mentally, emotionally and physically.
Kinda hard to understand something when no details are given. That said, I do respect your decision and hope all is well mentally, emotionally and physically.
4/21/2020 c4 Ph0enixPhant0m
Yes, more. Let them see the ‘True’ Darkness of Humanity. They can’t even fathom the Darkness possesses.
Show them, what have been going behind their back.
Make them Despair, Hopelessness, Hate, Disgust, Rejection, let them go through it all. Develop them! Make them better! They need to be better! They have 18 Years (actually maybe less than that), they need to develop in power, skill and most of all mentality. Once they did it know anything and when they started to gain knowledge, the truth of the hidden darkness, Salem, they could;it accept it, they could;it carry the burden. But now it has to be different, they can’t always do that or look away, they need develop. If they don’t want to then the situation should force them to develop, it isn’t something they have control over.
There is so much to do. They have so much to do. Create a new identity, have to get rid of their names for a new one soon, need funds, need to build up completely new connections, need to train, need to learn and so much more. As I said, so much to do.
I understand your the way you’re taking romance, but for now it could be used actively. I mean, I honestly love Jaune x Weiss. It is my all time fav RWBY ship/couple. I would have loved it if you took Sun x Blake route but it seems hard for now, I don’t know which route you’re taking with Blake. Tbh, I’m fine with Jaune x Weiss x Blake.
Thx for the chapter. Looking forward to the next chapter.
PSJust a friendly reminder, avoid the usual mistakes people made in time-traveling fic.
Yes, more. Let them see the ‘True’ Darkness of Humanity. They can’t even fathom the Darkness possesses.
Show them, what have been going behind their back.
Make them Despair, Hopelessness, Hate, Disgust, Rejection, let them go through it all. Develop them! Make them better! They need to be better! They have 18 Years (actually maybe less than that), they need to develop in power, skill and most of all mentality. Once they did it know anything and when they started to gain knowledge, the truth of the hidden darkness, Salem, they could;it accept it, they could;it carry the burden. But now it has to be different, they can’t always do that or look away, they need develop. If they don’t want to then the situation should force them to develop, it isn’t something they have control over.
There is so much to do. They have so much to do. Create a new identity, have to get rid of their names for a new one soon, need funds, need to build up completely new connections, need to train, need to learn and so much more. As I said, so much to do.
I understand your the way you’re taking romance, but for now it could be used actively. I mean, I honestly love Jaune x Weiss. It is my all time fav RWBY ship/couple. I would have loved it if you took Sun x Blake route but it seems hard for now, I don’t know which route you’re taking with Blake. Tbh, I’m fine with Jaune x Weiss x Blake.
Thx for the chapter. Looking forward to the next chapter.
PSJust a friendly reminder, avoid the usual mistakes people made in time-traveling fic.
4/6/2020 c4 MidKnightMoonglow99
First off, this was a good read - Well done.
Thank you for you gratitude, I’m always willing and happy to help whenever I can.
Now, the review:
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Primarily, this chapter suffered from the near constant changing of locations between Blake, Weiss and Jaune - also including past-future Ruby and Jaune. As a result of this, each scene appeared shorter with not much truly happening within them.
I’d say that the Blake segment where the better of the three scenarios, with the ones including Weiss and Jaune being the worst - mostly due to nothing really memorable happened within them.
If you’re going to continue with the word count of around six thousands, I’d recommend that you keep the transitions to around three. At this point that would include one with Blake, one with Weiss and Jaune, and one set within the past future.
On a similar vain, it might be nice to have some interactions with those that accompanied Blake within the arena and Blake herself (well, the two which survived anyways). I could see the breathiest snippets of characteristics being shown within the chapter and I wouldn’t say no to seeing them being explored a bit more.
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I must admit, at times, I may have overthought a few things that you included within the story.
The song that the Scarred man was singing, for instance, about three kinds of people. A part of me instantly thought that it could be in reference to Weiss, Jaune and Blake - that there could be something there... But then I came to the conclusion that it’s more than likely just a coincidence. As a result I didn’t put any further thought into it.
Also, I don’t know why it didn’t come to my attention before, but Tyrian would probably really like the Ntah and how they operate - they really fit rather well with his character, What with their misconstrued godly worship and manic murdering. Honestly, when I was reading the Blake sections, I kinda expected him to just appear randomly at some point.
It would be completely possible for him to be in Vacuo during this point in time. He was a Remnant-wide serial kill after all. I personally doubt that he’d be affiliated with Salem at this point in time though. Probably him doing his own thing.
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I believe that is all that stuck throughout my read.
Hopefully what I’ve mentioned is helpful. If you wish, we can go into further detail and discussions of the chapter and what occurred through our usual way of communication.
First off, this was a good read - Well done.
Thank you for you gratitude, I’m always willing and happy to help whenever I can.
Now, the review:
—
Primarily, this chapter suffered from the near constant changing of locations between Blake, Weiss and Jaune - also including past-future Ruby and Jaune. As a result of this, each scene appeared shorter with not much truly happening within them.
I’d say that the Blake segment where the better of the three scenarios, with the ones including Weiss and Jaune being the worst - mostly due to nothing really memorable happened within them.
If you’re going to continue with the word count of around six thousands, I’d recommend that you keep the transitions to around three. At this point that would include one with Blake, one with Weiss and Jaune, and one set within the past future.
On a similar vain, it might be nice to have some interactions with those that accompanied Blake within the arena and Blake herself (well, the two which survived anyways). I could see the breathiest snippets of characteristics being shown within the chapter and I wouldn’t say no to seeing them being explored a bit more.
—
I must admit, at times, I may have overthought a few things that you included within the story.
The song that the Scarred man was singing, for instance, about three kinds of people. A part of me instantly thought that it could be in reference to Weiss, Jaune and Blake - that there could be something there... But then I came to the conclusion that it’s more than likely just a coincidence. As a result I didn’t put any further thought into it.
Also, I don’t know why it didn’t come to my attention before, but Tyrian would probably really like the Ntah and how they operate - they really fit rather well with his character, What with their misconstrued godly worship and manic murdering. Honestly, when I was reading the Blake sections, I kinda expected him to just appear randomly at some point.
It would be completely possible for him to be in Vacuo during this point in time. He was a Remnant-wide serial kill after all. I personally doubt that he’d be affiliated with Salem at this point in time though. Probably him doing his own thing.
—
I believe that is all that stuck throughout my read.
Hopefully what I’ve mentioned is helpful. If you wish, we can go into further detail and discussions of the chapter and what occurred through our usual way of communication.
12/29/2019 c2 John-Matik
This pretty much is a spin off on coeur's relic of the future but a (what if) with two others, I'll give this story a shot.
This pretty much is a spin off on coeur's relic of the future but a (what if) with two others, I'll give this story a shot.
12/29/2019 c3 Haxler
Never really pay much attention to ratings, so i don't have anything to say in that.
Still very intrigued with this idea.
Never really pay much attention to ratings, so i don't have anything to say in that.
Still very intrigued with this idea.
12/28/2019 c3 MidKnightMoonglow99
In all honesty, a T rating would work. If you’re planning on adding elements of heavy gore or sexual themes however, I’d say stick with a M rating.
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Overall the chapter was presented quite well.
There were a few points were I thought you might be foreshadowing some in relation to the White Fang, but there wasn’t enough evidence to truly support any possible connections - be them though specific people or influences. Though, I feel like I’ve seen the situation at the end of the chapter before - in another story; I just can’t remember what it was.
But, besides that, it was another great chapter. Good job.
In all honesty, a T rating would work. If you’re planning on adding elements of heavy gore or sexual themes however, I’d say stick with a M rating.
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Overall the chapter was presented quite well.
There were a few points were I thought you might be foreshadowing some in relation to the White Fang, but there wasn’t enough evidence to truly support any possible connections - be them though specific people or influences. Though, I feel like I’ve seen the situation at the end of the chapter before - in another story; I just can’t remember what it was.
But, besides that, it was another great chapter. Good job.