for Deceived8/23/2019 c1 Guest
I enjoyed this story. Thank you!
I enjoyed this story. Thank you!
8/23/2019 c1 
10302pilot
Well done and an excellent answer to that prompt! I can totally see Juliet, in the heat of the moment, latching onto that one particular utterance in the midst of the confusion and goings on. She didn't have the background info that Thomas had so she took it at face value. Love how Thomas didnt even hesitate to toss her out the door, knowing what they would have done to her. Loved Katsomoto's down to business attitude, laced with just enough hints of caring. You write him so well! You write them all well, true to character and voice. I'm so glad she overheard them talking so she didn't go stalking off mad but found out the truth. She has such a hard time trusting, but hopefully she learned yet again that Thomas is true to his word, and his Ohana will always come first-and she is part of his Ohana. Loved this! Thanks so much for sharing!
10302pilotWell done and an excellent answer to that prompt! I can totally see Juliet, in the heat of the moment, latching onto that one particular utterance in the midst of the confusion and goings on. She didn't have the background info that Thomas had so she took it at face value. Love how Thomas didnt even hesitate to toss her out the door, knowing what they would have done to her. Loved Katsomoto's down to business attitude, laced with just enough hints of caring. You write him so well! You write them all well, true to character and voice. I'm so glad she overheard them talking so she didn't go stalking off mad but found out the truth. She has such a hard time trusting, but hopefully she learned yet again that Thomas is true to his word, and his Ohana will always come first-and she is part of his Ohana. Loved this! Thanks so much for sharing!
8/23/2019 c1 Megth
Loved it! Magnum will always think of his friends (or not friends) first. Glad they are both okay. Loved the Magnum whump.
Loved it! Magnum will always think of his friends (or not friends) first. Glad they are both okay. Loved the Magnum whump.
8/23/2019 c1 Lhaven
What a great story. Thank you! I’m glad Higgins learned the truth while overhearing the conversation. Wonderful dialog and feelings shared in the hospital room at the end.
What a great story. Thank you! I’m glad Higgins learned the truth while overhearing the conversation. Wonderful dialog and feelings shared in the hospital room at the end.
8/23/2019 c1 2Elise Deschat
Good adaption of the prompt...
enjoyed the story... good chemistry of characters
2Elise DeschatGood adaption of the prompt...
enjoyed the story... good chemistry of characters