for A Spider is Born3/6/2020 c2 
1Lord Grise
A bit rushed on the character introductions, but overall well done! Story and author followed!
1Lord GriseA bit rushed on the character introductions, but overall well done! Story and author followed!
9/6/2019 c1 rachel
You have an interesting premise, and I'd very much like to read more. The grammar seems pretty good too.
That said, I find the present-tense narration distracting, and the long paragraphs make following the plot harder. I recommend getting a beta reader who is good at working on those aspects to polish it up a bit more.
You have an interesting premise, and I'd very much like to read more. The grammar seems pretty good too.
That said, I find the present-tense narration distracting, and the long paragraphs make following the plot harder. I recommend getting a beta reader who is good at working on those aspects to polish it up a bit more.