for Hero Academia DxD4/14 c9 
22redskin122004
you got too much going on in this story. bowing out. good writing but waaay too much of multiverse shenanigans going on
22redskin122004you got too much going on in this story. bowing out. good writing but waaay too much of multiverse shenanigans going on
3/17 c56 9K. M. Donovan
...are you crossing marvel with DXD and MHA now? because the only Doom I know of who speaks in the third person like that is Victor Von Doom AKA Doctor Doom, supervillain and ruler of Latveria.
I mean I know you added Doctor Strange to the story, and had Stan The Man do a cameo, but I thought those were one off additions.
this is starting to look like it is heading towards a full Marvel Comics crossover.
which if that is the case... meh, honestly i am Ambivalent to that. could be good, could be bad, but i do not care enough to have an opinion. mainly BECAUSE it could be good or Bad. and until i see which? i reserve my judgement for later.
9K. M. Donovan...are you crossing marvel with DXD and MHA now? because the only Doom I know of who speaks in the third person like that is Victor Von Doom AKA Doctor Doom, supervillain and ruler of Latveria.
I mean I know you added Doctor Strange to the story, and had Stan The Man do a cameo, but I thought those were one off additions.
this is starting to look like it is heading towards a full Marvel Comics crossover.
which if that is the case... meh, honestly i am Ambivalent to that. could be good, could be bad, but i do not care enough to have an opinion. mainly BECAUSE it could be good or Bad. and until i see which? i reserve my judgement for later.
3/15 c49 K. M. Donovan
twilight healing not working is not surprising. its not like Orihime's Shoten Kesshun which can reject reality. that is the only "Healing" ability i know of that could possibly reverse the damage done to Toshinori. anything else is going to fall short of the mark.
twilight healing not working is not surprising. its not like Orihime's Shoten Kesshun which can reject reality. that is the only "Healing" ability i know of that could possibly reverse the damage done to Toshinori. anything else is going to fall short of the mark.
3/14 c31 K. M. Donovan
you are going to regret making the harem so large. mass harems almost always fail.
6-10 girls max. any more and it becomes exponentially more difficult to balance the harem and the plot.
you see this quite often in Harem Manga. do a tally, and i guarantee, that the active harem, that is the girls CURRENTLY in the harem, will not exceed 6 girls.
in all harem series, the harem fluctuates. girls enter the harem, and girls leave. some remain as part of the friend group, but are no longer romantically interested in the protagonist. some girls are interested in one of the other male characters, and are instead only loosely connected to the group.
but either way, the active harem almost NEVER exceeds 6 girls. that is because any more then 6-10 and the harem begins to overwhelm the plot, and the overall story falls apart.
fanfiction as a medium grants us some wiggle room on various rules, but that wiggle room has its limits.
the only example of a mass harem i have seen work? is a pure smut fic. basically P0rn with a plot. and given the fact it is almost 100% pure smut? that plot is VERY loose. as in a barely there framework to hold everything together.
outside of that? very few stories that employ a mass harem reach completion. i have been a member of since 2009, but have been reading fics since before that. and in all that time? i have seen 3 fics with mass harems complete. only3, out of literally thousands of stories that i have read. only 3 mass harem fics finished. the rest were all abandoned.
so, i do not write this review as a demand you change things. nor is it a flame, or me being a troll.
this is me simply making a statement. you are likely going to regret making the harem so large.
that is all i wanted to say.
and as always
thank you for your time.
you are going to regret making the harem so large. mass harems almost always fail.
6-10 girls max. any more and it becomes exponentially more difficult to balance the harem and the plot.
you see this quite often in Harem Manga. do a tally, and i guarantee, that the active harem, that is the girls CURRENTLY in the harem, will not exceed 6 girls.
in all harem series, the harem fluctuates. girls enter the harem, and girls leave. some remain as part of the friend group, but are no longer romantically interested in the protagonist. some girls are interested in one of the other male characters, and are instead only loosely connected to the group.
but either way, the active harem almost NEVER exceeds 6 girls. that is because any more then 6-10 and the harem begins to overwhelm the plot, and the overall story falls apart.
fanfiction as a medium grants us some wiggle room on various rules, but that wiggle room has its limits.
the only example of a mass harem i have seen work? is a pure smut fic. basically P0rn with a plot. and given the fact it is almost 100% pure smut? that plot is VERY loose. as in a barely there framework to hold everything together.
outside of that? very few stories that employ a mass harem reach completion. i have been a member of since 2009, but have been reading fics since before that. and in all that time? i have seen 3 fics with mass harems complete. only3, out of literally thousands of stories that i have read. only 3 mass harem fics finished. the rest were all abandoned.
so, i do not write this review as a demand you change things. nor is it a flame, or me being a troll.
this is me simply making a statement. you are likely going to regret making the harem so large.
that is all i wanted to say.
and as always
thank you for your time.
3/13 c21 K. M. Donovan
actually Water itself is also a poor conductor of electricity. in fact, purified water is an insulator. what actually conducts electricity is the IMPURITIES in the water, not the water itself. its why things like ocean or stagnant water will conduct electricity war better then pure water.
hence why Ice is such a bad conductor. in it's frozen state, the impurities are isolated and the electricity cannot arc to them.
the most you might get is some minor conductivity on the surface layer due to the ice melting.
actually Water itself is also a poor conductor of electricity. in fact, purified water is an insulator. what actually conducts electricity is the IMPURITIES in the water, not the water itself. its why things like ocean or stagnant water will conduct electricity war better then pure water.
hence why Ice is such a bad conductor. in it's frozen state, the impurities are isolated and the electricity cannot arc to them.
the most you might get is some minor conductivity on the surface layer due to the ice melting.
3/12 c6 K. M. Donovan
first time reading this. i am going to assume, from the lack of Akeno, and momo's use of lighting, that you have combined akeno with momo, and she will soon become Rias's queen.
the question now becomes, is momo half fallen like Akeno? and if so, does she hate her fallen side?
first time reading this. i am going to assume, from the lack of Akeno, and momo's use of lighting, that you have combined akeno with momo, and she will soon become Rias's queen.
the question now becomes, is momo half fallen like Akeno? and if so, does she hate her fallen side?
1/12 c62 Guest
You really need someone to make Deviantart pictures for what all of these girls were wearing for the pole dancing.
You really need someone to make Deviantart pictures for what all of these girls were wearing for the pole dancing.
1/9 c9 SHWAT
Nah, this is not for me. This is not a review of how good or bad this fic is. In fact, I've enjoyed it till now but I don't like when elements of too many fictional universes are mixed up.
Nah, this is not for me. This is not a review of how good or bad this fic is. In fact, I've enjoyed it till now but I don't like when elements of too many fictional universes are mixed up.
12/23/2024 c62 muffinseahorse
But couldn't Yaoyorozu make more material for costumes? I'm just asking, it's not a complaint.
But couldn't Yaoyorozu make more material for costumes? I'm just asking, it's not a complaint.
12/23/2024 c62 PhoenixCinder
I loved the chapter, especially the last 2 parts, I like that you are not willing to force things to happen because it would damage the story, but that you are not afraid to make and show the relationships move forward either.
I loved the chapter, especially the last 2 parts, I like that you are not willing to force things to happen because it would damage the story, but that you are not afraid to make and show the relationships move forward either.
12/22/2024 c62 leoromerocalvo
great chapter, and rest assured, the chapter was amazing without the lemon and you're right, this is a High School DxD fanfic, so it wasn't awkward or anything like that since this is what is expected.
great chapter, and rest assured, the chapter was amazing without the lemon and you're right, this is a High School DxD fanfic, so it wasn't awkward or anything like that since this is what is expected.
12/17/2024 c62 Deathwing
I hope the other girls will be on Izuku's Harem. Such as Izabela, Kuroka, Mirko, Ryukyu the Dragon Hero, and maybe the Grayfia.
I hope the other girls will be on Izuku's Harem. Such as Izabela, Kuroka, Mirko, Ryukyu the Dragon Hero, and maybe the Grayfia.
12/16/2024 c62 4Recentreader325
Nice chapter and Happy Birthday Izuku! It was really nice for the girls to make their own Katsudons for Izuku since they all knew it’s his favorite food despite how Momo’s was pretty disastrous. Izuku having a 3P with Rias and Milia was unexpected because I was expecting Rias to take Izuku’s first time but I’m not complaining. Shame there isn’t a lemon but hopefully there will be in the future. Another thing I want to see is Izuku doing the Walk of Shame in front of his Mom but doing it in front of his classmates would be a lot funnier.
So the I-island expo arc is coming meaning Melissa Shield would be showing up since she will be part of Izuku’s harem due to the closeness they had in the movie despite not being romantic not for this story though. Makes me wonder if Melissa would have her own Sacred Gear since she’s quirkless.
4Recentreader325Nice chapter and Happy Birthday Izuku! It was really nice for the girls to make their own Katsudons for Izuku since they all knew it’s his favorite food despite how Momo’s was pretty disastrous. Izuku having a 3P with Rias and Milia was unexpected because I was expecting Rias to take Izuku’s first time but I’m not complaining. Shame there isn’t a lemon but hopefully there will be in the future. Another thing I want to see is Izuku doing the Walk of Shame in front of his Mom but doing it in front of his classmates would be a lot funnier.
So the I-island expo arc is coming meaning Melissa Shield would be showing up since she will be part of Izuku’s harem due to the closeness they had in the movie despite not being romantic not for this story though. Makes me wonder if Melissa would have her own Sacred Gear since she’s quirkless.