for Fated Family1/29 c2 Star
U clearly have no idea how the story is progressing and how to right a sensible one in the first place...
U clearly have no idea how the story is progressing and how to right a sensible one in the first place...
1/8 c2 kieffer
This is a really good start i'm interested on where you will go with it.
This is a really good start i'm interested on where you will go with it.
11/6/2020 c2 Guest
Please update, and what do you think about adding Aria to Shiro's harem and having him be Yuni's father.
Please update, and what do you think about adding Aria to Shiro's harem and having him be Yuni's father.
7/6/2020 c2 Gemie
Awesome story! Hope you update soon.
Awesome story! Hope you update soon.
4/1/2020 c1 Cheli
Mas pprfavor me gusta este gran fanfiction
Mas pprfavor me gusta este gran fanfiction
1/13/2020 c2 
3Apostle-of-Darkness
This is a nice start for this story, dude. Hope you plan to release the third chapter soon, since I’m rather certain that a vast majority of us would really like to see what happens when Tsuna finally wakes up.
3Apostle-of-DarknessThis is a nice start for this story, dude. Hope you plan to release the third chapter soon, since I’m rather certain that a vast majority of us would really like to see what happens when Tsuna finally wakes up.
11/4/2019 c2 Phoenix
This is so interesting thanks for writing it. And I can't wait until you're able to write and post another chapter
This is so interesting thanks for writing it. And I can't wait until you're able to write and post another chapter
10/12/2019 c2 67Novirp13
I wish he lived with Rin and Shiro from now on. Maybe visit Nana once a month or smth. I just...I don't like how the anime portrayed Nana. Because Nana in manga is not as oblivious. She's just like any other mother. Nice to strangers and strict to her own kid. Not in a bad way. She just want Tsuna to take his study seriously. Honestly, i don't understand why they made her so...absentminded in the anime
67Novirp13I wish he lived with Rin and Shiro from now on. Maybe visit Nana once a month or smth. I just...I don't like how the anime portrayed Nana. Because Nana in manga is not as oblivious. She's just like any other mother. Nice to strangers and strict to her own kid. Not in a bad way. She just want Tsuna to take his study seriously. Honestly, i don't understand why they made her so...absentminded in the anime
10/9/2019 c2 3spartaleox
really liking the idea so far, good job!
you got me curious though, the weak circuits and "flame" spells; are you refering to the rank and file of the mafia? cause i remember thiking while watching KHR that eaither you goy lucky on the gene lottery with the flame affinities or you were grunt for life. that big was the chasm between "awakened" and "active" flame users and even then rae were the strong flame users outside of the families.
following your idea of double secret society it'd make sense not all details are known. specially seing how likely are the magi to reconsider or even admit a mistake on their part.
trexboy164 raised an interesting point, though i'd say rings actually amplify the flame not produce it so maybe rin can fiddly-xplodey-something. maybe rin jump start the ring tecnology (wink, wink, lol) since those came during the future arc.
3spartaleoxreally liking the idea so far, good job!
you got me curious though, the weak circuits and "flame" spells; are you refering to the rank and file of the mafia? cause i remember thiking while watching KHR that eaither you goy lucky on the gene lottery with the flame affinities or you were grunt for life. that big was the chasm between "awakened" and "active" flame users and even then rae were the strong flame users outside of the families.
following your idea of double secret society it'd make sense not all details are known. specially seing how likely are the magi to reconsider or even admit a mistake on their part.
trexboy164 raised an interesting point, though i'd say rings actually amplify the flame not produce it so maybe rin can fiddly-xplodey-something. maybe rin jump start the ring tecnology (wink, wink, lol) since those came during the future arc.
10/6/2019 c2 Supremum Rex Stulti
Good story but wouldn't be better to call flames a(or looks like) water downed version of gem magecraft i mean they use rings and everything kind a fits
Good story but wouldn't be better to call flames a(or looks like) water downed version of gem magecraft i mean they use rings and everything kind a fits
9/29/2019 c2 5FATEMURDER
Does this mean not everyone can use the ring flame?
You did realize in KHR anyone can create dying will flame as long as they have a certain amount of will, I think you need to come up with a loophole so Shirou and Rin could use the ring as well.
5FATEMURDERDoes this mean not everyone can use the ring flame?
You did realize in KHR anyone can create dying will flame as long as they have a certain amount of will, I think you need to come up with a loophole so Shirou and Rin could use the ring as well.