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4/25 c2 Paperclip-kun
I'm liking this, but I think it would be a good idea to break up that big paragraph at the end there so it's easier to read, especially where dialogue is concerned.

For example, instead of...

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"Hey Aeris? Remember that time you were getting pissed about the Jet Pack people?" She threw up her arms. "Those Jet Packs are bullshit, okay? And don't even get me started on that damn Armor Lock!" Leo chuckled and took a bite out of his pizza as he set up a matchmaking game. "You wanna join?" He asked Aeris with a welcoming tone in his voice. "No, I'm tired. I think I'll just watch you play. Leo's ear twitched. "Alright, whatever you say."

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...try this instead...

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"Hey Aeris? Remember that time you were getting pissed about the Jet Pack people?"

She threw up her arms. "Those Jet Packs are bullshit, okay? And don't even get me started on that damn Armor Lock!"

Leo chuckled and took a bite out of his pizza as he set up a matchmaking game. "You wanna join?" He asked Aeris with a welcoming tone in his voice.

"No, I'm tired. I think I'll just watch you play."

Leo's ear twitched. "Alright, whatever you say."

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It just helps it read easier. Anyway, keep it up.
3/16 c4 anon
I actually loved it! Hope you can make more really nice stories in the future! :)
10/3/2019 c2 Destiny
Made me laugh- keep it up.
10/3/2019 c1 Guest
haha very love to see more- Destiny

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