for Special Moments11/19/2020 c9 Zate560
Once again I really enjoyed this chapter. You made the most with the premise given absolutely. You did a good job giving each of the opposing teams and teamates believable dynamics and tactics they would employ. It's always a treat reading how people write Claude as a schemer and him sniping people from rooftops feels very appropriate and sort of a mirror to Byleth and Bernadettas strategy.
Outside of that it was just a very cozy chapter all around, especially near the end when the contest ended and everyone could relax and chat over a nice warm hot chocolate. Got me in the mood for some whole hiding under my covers for sure. If it was snowing here too that would've been just lovely.
Well done again Sentinel.
Once again I really enjoyed this chapter. You made the most with the premise given absolutely. You did a good job giving each of the opposing teams and teamates believable dynamics and tactics they would employ. It's always a treat reading how people write Claude as a schemer and him sniping people from rooftops feels very appropriate and sort of a mirror to Byleth and Bernadettas strategy.
Outside of that it was just a very cozy chapter all around, especially near the end when the contest ended and everyone could relax and chat over a nice warm hot chocolate. Got me in the mood for some whole hiding under my covers for sure. If it was snowing here too that would've been just lovely.
Well done again Sentinel.
11/12/2020 c9 Guest
I missed this story
I missed this story
11/9/2020 c9 
9Starfighter364
Re-read the whole thing so that I could make sure I didn't miss anything, and it's a good thing I did. I never got around to reading the last two chapters up until now, but I didn't remember the Ashen Wolves being involved in the earlier chapters.
You got everyone in character by what I could see, except for maybe Edelgard, as I'm not sure she would do as you had her do when she informed Bernadetta about how the war was going, along with her classmates rebelling. This is the woman who is so stubborn that she refuses to even consider that she might not be 100 percent right, and is willing to commit war crimes, so I think she likely would have done something to force her into service or lock her away if she felt Bernadetta might have gone against her.
Bernadetta is so precious, I swear, whenever I hear about how her father treated her, I want to punch him in the face repeatedly, and I'm not to fond of Hubert either, in fact, he is quite possibly my least favorite character you can control.
Overall, I enjoy this story very much, and I'm looking forward to seeing where things go from here.
9Starfighter364Re-read the whole thing so that I could make sure I didn't miss anything, and it's a good thing I did. I never got around to reading the last two chapters up until now, but I didn't remember the Ashen Wolves being involved in the earlier chapters.
You got everyone in character by what I could see, except for maybe Edelgard, as I'm not sure she would do as you had her do when she informed Bernadetta about how the war was going, along with her classmates rebelling. This is the woman who is so stubborn that she refuses to even consider that she might not be 100 percent right, and is willing to commit war crimes, so I think she likely would have done something to force her into service or lock her away if she felt Bernadetta might have gone against her.
Bernadetta is so precious, I swear, whenever I hear about how her father treated her, I want to punch him in the face repeatedly, and I'm not to fond of Hubert either, in fact, he is quite possibly my least favorite character you can control.
Overall, I enjoy this story very much, and I'm looking forward to seeing where things go from here.
9/2/2020 c8 Zate560
Very comfy chapter! I had a Nintendo Winter music compilation going while reading it and it was a very pleasant vibe all throughout. I love how Byleth just casually calls Bernadetta "Bernie" and that she's just glued to his hip this chapter. It's just very cute, and that comparison you made between them was very true, they're both very socially stunted for different reasons and I loved reading them do things they never got to do.
Sorry for the late review, but I hope this suffices. Good luck on the next chapters! I'll be looking forward to it.
Very comfy chapter! I had a Nintendo Winter music compilation going while reading it and it was a very pleasant vibe all throughout. I love how Byleth just casually calls Bernadetta "Bernie" and that she's just glued to his hip this chapter. It's just very cute, and that comparison you made between them was very true, they're both very socially stunted for different reasons and I loved reading them do things they never got to do.
Sorry for the late review, but I hope this suffices. Good luck on the next chapters! I'll be looking forward to it.
8/4/2020 c7 2ArcherOfHoshido
I gotta say, this fanfic is great. Bernie is my favorite 3H character, and I'm very impressed with how you held true to her character.
Keep up the great work! I really look forward to more chapters!
2ArcherOfHoshidoI gotta say, this fanfic is great. Bernie is my favorite 3H character, and I'm very impressed with how you held true to her character.
Keep up the great work! I really look forward to more chapters!
7/16/2020 c7 Guest
Can you pls make more chapters pld
Can you pls make more chapters pld
7/9/2020 c7 Zate560
Welp, I finally got to rereading this in a single sitting and it's just as I remembered. It's good. What this chapter tries to convey is that Bernadetta finally has the solitude she's been saying she wanted but it becomes more and more clear that with the state the world is in and the connections she's made, it makes it basically impossible to enjoy her life in the estate. I think every moment does a good job at reinforcing this and keeps that very lonesome and depressing tone.
As for things I'm sure you want highlighted. I do believe that scene with Bernadetta and Esmerelda was great. Bernie is scared of her mom but not in the same way as her dad. You don't sugarcoat Esmeralda at all. She was complicit in Bernadettas abuse because she saw it as a necessary means to Bernadetta becoming a noble heir and she continues that trend by shutting down her daughters relationship with Byleth and forcing Noble Training on her. She's a serious and business oriented woman through and through, but we also see why Bernadetta never hated her, because all that comes from a place of wanting the best from Bernadetta which is why she's concerned of her daughter hating her. I do hope she comes back at some capacity as she does have room for growth.
Now the maids, I can't say theyre the most fleshed out. We don't get a good Idea of what they look like or see them do much which is fair enough. Bernadetta did want to isolate herself so it makes sense why she didn't want to attach herself much to them
Now Edelgard is pretty damn cool and spot on. She comes off as cold but fair in her presence. She's honest to Bernadetta about how she's just been in her manor stagnating while the rest of the world and her friends have moved on without her. And most importantly, she wants her friends to follow what's right just like she did and in a tragic way that involves forcing poor villagers to fight in her war. Really nice and unique interpretation you managed to portray here, Sent.
Closing thoughts, it's a nice and tonally consistent chapter with some really stand out moments like the fight with Bernadetta and Esmeralda, and the later conversation with Edelgard. It could be more concise but other than that it's another really well executed concept chapter from you, Sent.
Welp, I finally got to rereading this in a single sitting and it's just as I remembered. It's good. What this chapter tries to convey is that Bernadetta finally has the solitude she's been saying she wanted but it becomes more and more clear that with the state the world is in and the connections she's made, it makes it basically impossible to enjoy her life in the estate. I think every moment does a good job at reinforcing this and keeps that very lonesome and depressing tone.
As for things I'm sure you want highlighted. I do believe that scene with Bernadetta and Esmerelda was great. Bernie is scared of her mom but not in the same way as her dad. You don't sugarcoat Esmeralda at all. She was complicit in Bernadettas abuse because she saw it as a necessary means to Bernadetta becoming a noble heir and she continues that trend by shutting down her daughters relationship with Byleth and forcing Noble Training on her. She's a serious and business oriented woman through and through, but we also see why Bernadetta never hated her, because all that comes from a place of wanting the best from Bernadetta which is why she's concerned of her daughter hating her. I do hope she comes back at some capacity as she does have room for growth.
Now the maids, I can't say theyre the most fleshed out. We don't get a good Idea of what they look like or see them do much which is fair enough. Bernadetta did want to isolate herself so it makes sense why she didn't want to attach herself much to them
Now Edelgard is pretty damn cool and spot on. She comes off as cold but fair in her presence. She's honest to Bernadetta about how she's just been in her manor stagnating while the rest of the world and her friends have moved on without her. And most importantly, she wants her friends to follow what's right just like she did and in a tragic way that involves forcing poor villagers to fight in her war. Really nice and unique interpretation you managed to portray here, Sent.
Closing thoughts, it's a nice and tonally consistent chapter with some really stand out moments like the fight with Bernadetta and Esmeralda, and the later conversation with Edelgard. It could be more concise but other than that it's another really well executed concept chapter from you, Sent.
5/24/2020 c6 Robin Olyvestone
man i love this a hella lot. that slow burn even when they were together 5 years. I do hope this fanfic continue to the end, cuz this is some gourmet shit.
man i love this a hella lot. that slow burn even when they were together 5 years. I do hope this fanfic continue to the end, cuz this is some gourmet shit.
5/15/2020 c6 Zate560
I know you had trouble writing this chapter and you're uncertain about the quality. For what it's worth, I found it to be one of your most entertaining chapters yet.
The premise was just ripe with adorableness since we'd get to see how much Bernadetta and Byleth grew individually and in their relationship. Reading about how Bernadetta became a prestigious writer, artist, and just overall benefit to the monastery was such a delight. As well as seeing how everyone saw the sparks between them.
This definitely felt the most whole of all the multi special moment chapters since every scene was connected while still having all of them feel impactful and heartwarming in some way. How the story was paced with Byleths growing awareness for his affection for Bernadetta also helped make the story more cohesive.
And I must compliment you on your dialogue this chapter. A lot of it was just so funny and it all flowed so naturally. There might have been a few repeated phrases but that's really as far as critique I have for this chapter.
That ending tho. It all being a self induced escape for Byleth to find purpose before waking up was just amazing. It's nice depth to this chapter and was the perfect wrap-up as it likewise created more purpose for this chapter coming into being.
I congratulate you for stepping outside your comfort zone and creating something so great and I look forward to how this story will go.
I know you had trouble writing this chapter and you're uncertain about the quality. For what it's worth, I found it to be one of your most entertaining chapters yet.
The premise was just ripe with adorableness since we'd get to see how much Bernadetta and Byleth grew individually and in their relationship. Reading about how Bernadetta became a prestigious writer, artist, and just overall benefit to the monastery was such a delight. As well as seeing how everyone saw the sparks between them.
This definitely felt the most whole of all the multi special moment chapters since every scene was connected while still having all of them feel impactful and heartwarming in some way. How the story was paced with Byleths growing awareness for his affection for Bernadetta also helped make the story more cohesive.
And I must compliment you on your dialogue this chapter. A lot of it was just so funny and it all flowed so naturally. There might have been a few repeated phrases but that's really as far as critique I have for this chapter.
That ending tho. It all being a self induced escape for Byleth to find purpose before waking up was just amazing. It's nice depth to this chapter and was the perfect wrap-up as it likewise created more purpose for this chapter coming into being.
I congratulate you for stepping outside your comfort zone and creating something so great and I look forward to how this story will go.
3/19/2020 c5 shephawk
Can I suggest that when Bernie reunites with byleth she hugs him and absolutely refuses to let go because she wants to be sure his there the others eventually get her to release him also should have Yuri trick Bernie into admitting her feelings for byleth
and can I suggest you do a after the war chapter that shows byleth and Bernie wedding and married life
Can I suggest that when Bernie reunites with byleth she hugs him and absolutely refuses to let go because she wants to be sure his there the others eventually get her to release him also should have Yuri trick Bernie into admitting her feelings for byleth
and can I suggest you do a after the war chapter that shows byleth and Bernie wedding and married life
2/21/2020 c5 Zate560
I think this chapter was really well done for the most part. To get my gripes out of the way, I think there was more potential in hearing all the characters say their reasons for joining the class and what they planned to do after graduation. I feel like it would given more life to the side characters and just would've added a lot of flavor to the vibe of this chapter. And the transition from Byleth helping Leonie and Bernadetta, to the start of the evacuation felt a bit disconnected. I feel like a scene from the perspective of Byleth might've helped as a glue connecting them, while also being a cap for Byleths character for this arc.
Other than that I think you did a great job creating anticipation, anxiety, and ultimately regret with Bernadetta. We see that arc with her contemplating by Jeralts grave, finally being proactive with Byleth which creates hope for their future, only for that to be taken away and she needs to be saved and dragged towards safety because she's just so distraught by the potential loss of her future. I think that's what makes that gift so apropo; a gift that never had a chance to be finished just like the time she had with Byleth. And that last image you leave us with is just oddly comforting yet sad. They live to see another day and the bravery the Ashen wolves and the knights of Seiros display for their sake is inspiring. Its just Bernadetta snug under the covers with Lindhart just chilling and Caspar feeling powerless like Bernadetta was when she thought about how she doesn't have the strength to protect Byleth. Her last view of the monastery is just the culmination of that.
I will give extra props for how you wrote Claude and the Ashen Wolves in particular. You could really get a sense of Claude being really stressed out near the end and that added more tension to the evacuation. It contrasts well with how he usually acts. The Ashen wolves coming out at just the nick of time was just epic. Yuri in particular really felt like the light Bernadetta and the audience needed at such a bleak point of the story. The dude is just too cool for his own good and you portrayed that mavelously.
Hope this review didn't come out too late. Talk to you later!
I think this chapter was really well done for the most part. To get my gripes out of the way, I think there was more potential in hearing all the characters say their reasons for joining the class and what they planned to do after graduation. I feel like it would given more life to the side characters and just would've added a lot of flavor to the vibe of this chapter. And the transition from Byleth helping Leonie and Bernadetta, to the start of the evacuation felt a bit disconnected. I feel like a scene from the perspective of Byleth might've helped as a glue connecting them, while also being a cap for Byleths character for this arc.
Other than that I think you did a great job creating anticipation, anxiety, and ultimately regret with Bernadetta. We see that arc with her contemplating by Jeralts grave, finally being proactive with Byleth which creates hope for their future, only for that to be taken away and she needs to be saved and dragged towards safety because she's just so distraught by the potential loss of her future. I think that's what makes that gift so apropo; a gift that never had a chance to be finished just like the time she had with Byleth. And that last image you leave us with is just oddly comforting yet sad. They live to see another day and the bravery the Ashen wolves and the knights of Seiros display for their sake is inspiring. Its just Bernadetta snug under the covers with Lindhart just chilling and Caspar feeling powerless like Bernadetta was when she thought about how she doesn't have the strength to protect Byleth. Her last view of the monastery is just the culmination of that.
I will give extra props for how you wrote Claude and the Ashen Wolves in particular. You could really get a sense of Claude being really stressed out near the end and that added more tension to the evacuation. It contrasts well with how he usually acts. The Ashen wolves coming out at just the nick of time was just epic. Yuri in particular really felt like the light Bernadetta and the audience needed at such a bleak point of the story. The dude is just too cool for his own good and you portrayed that mavelously.
Hope this review didn't come out too late. Talk to you later!
2/20/2020 c5 kill x hunt
YOOOOO Ashen wolves pop up!
YOOOOO Ashen wolves pop up!
2/19/2020 c4 3Quasi11
You’ve completely nailed all of the characters’ personalities. And I love how much you’ve included Annette in the story. She’s my favorite girl from three houses (Bernie is second lol) and she doesn’t get enough love in the community. This story is genuinely wonderful to read and I can’t wait for future updates!
3Quasi11You’ve completely nailed all of the characters’ personalities. And I love how much you’ve included Annette in the story. She’s my favorite girl from three houses (Bernie is second lol) and she doesn’t get enough love in the community. This story is genuinely wonderful to read and I can’t wait for future updates!