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11/8 c94 1axissun01
cant wait to continue reading this though is ash going to catch any of his other mainstay pokemon at all like kingler, torkoal? and will he get the ash greninja? and any other paldea Pokemon?
11/6 c94 patelnirav3065
when you are going to be releasing the new chapters?
10/21 c94 Firaz ryahuZ
Where more chapter?
I am very interesting in this.
10/18 c1 grim reaper of gods
will he catch legendarys
10/15 c6 Fill-them-up
Can you go back thought your story and put it eaier that ash can carry more pokemon it would make sense why he have so many pokemon
10/13 c94 Guest
Hopefully other girls like may misty leaf and others we haven't seen travel with ash for a long time have there turn to travel with him again and even let Mallow and Lana eventually travel with him as well like Lille is doing glad to see dawn will eventually be with ash she definitely be in for some surprises that will make her love him even more than before and when she finds out he has more girlfriends as for other girls that should also end up with ash Zoey Ursula Candice princess Silvia Angie iris gerogia skyla Alexa miette Shauna aria korrina nessa Marnie (Pokemon sword and shield) Gloria (female protagonist of Pokemon sword and shield) and liko(female protagonist of Pokemon horizons anime series) ann(likos friend from Pokemon horizons anime series)
10/12 c94 Guest
welcome back to the story
10/11 c94 Guest
I still love Dawn wearing her white beanie and pink boots.
10/11 c94 RKF22
AWESOME START TO SINNOH
10/11 c94 4Monster King
Awesome work please continue the story it's incredible your doing great work
10/1 c42 Dragons963
did you forget all about Blair the blackthorn gym? it's 8 badges not 7
9/18 c93 patelnirav3065
when is the Sinnoh Region will be uploaded.
9/9 c93 11Lokolow
When the Johto arc ended, I waited for you to upload the entire Hoenn arc before reading it, to get a general understanding of everything...and honestly I was disappointed.

When Johto ended, you had Ash become a very strong protagonist, but in Hoenn he becomes someone who never suffers a really important defeat. All the 'defeats' happened in moments where nothing was at stake. What's the point in a story where the protagonist always wins? Don't take this as gratuitous hate, I like the story, but my disappointment is great because Hoenn and Sinnoh are the two regions that I like most, both in games and in the anime, it was in them where Ash showed evolution before regressing the character to the act childish as seen in Alola for example.

Another very unnecessary factor was this Shadow Legion thing. Man, there are SO many villain options that could be used, it wasn't necessary to create something that seems (to me) forced to have a 'main villain'. Hoenn had two terrorist organizations, Sinnoh has a damn megalomaniac who wants to destroy the universe to create one in his image. Unova has a radicalist who wants the freedom of Pokémon, being manipulated by an aspiring dictator. Kalos? Team Flare is literally an example of a paramilitary organization trying to stage a coup d'état. In Alola a crazy woman wants to ascend to divinity...but instead of all that, you create a criminal organization where the leader is a psychopathic lesbian woman (this was a description that is written in your story).

Another thing was the sexual approach...man, you wrote sexual scenes involving one, no, TWO adult women with a teenager under the age of 15 (?) and not once thought that something was out of place? And sexual scenes between the protagonists, where one of them is 10 YEARS OLD?! I'm not accusing you of anything, but couldn't you have left this side of the story to be developed in the future? This is uncomfortable to read, there's no way I'm being exaggerated, it's literally something that would be a horrible crime in real life, I understand it's a story and you may honestly not have seen the problem, but it could have been avoided. Hoenn had a lot of potential, and unfortunately (for me) there are too many negatives to mention, and few positives.

The only positive point worth noting was the development of the 'lore' around the protagonist's ancestors, which opens up a huge scope for development.

And unfortunately, from what you said, Sinnoh is ready and if it follows this same line of development, I will be even more disappointed, however, I hope I'm wrong and I'll give this story another chance.
9/6 c93 Guest
I hope the story is more light toned less dark and negative and more positive compared to what hoenn and Kanto was like also could you have dawn Ursula Zoey Candice lrida and Akari (these two look very similar to may and dawn from Pokemon legends in the hisui region which is called sinnoh region in the present but called hisui in the past) be part of ashs hearm
9/5 c93 thor94
so hoenn is over.
why involving alola only to skip it, you could just move directly to sinnoh like the anime, and bring alola after kalos.
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