for The Grecian Pureblood7/23/2022 c1 erstwhile-S
Stumbled upon this story today. An intriguing start to be sure. Too bad it wasn’t continued.
In case you come back to this, my vote is for the Grangers to be loving and wonderful parents.
Stumbled upon this story today. An intriguing start to be sure. Too bad it wasn’t continued.
In case you come back to this, my vote is for the Grangers to be loving and wonderful parents.
3/29/2020 c1 Guest
(This next part is copied directly from Philosopher's Stone, for sheer doubt I can describe him better) — you shouldn’t add these in the midst of the story; it breaks the narration. It would be better suited for an AN.
Also, your ANs feel longer than your actual story. Long ANs are fine if the chapter is 7k words or so. If you clean these two up, I think you can get better.
~rx
(This next part is copied directly from Philosopher's Stone, for sheer doubt I can describe him better) — you shouldn’t add these in the midst of the story; it breaks the narration. It would be better suited for an AN.
Also, your ANs feel longer than your actual story. Long ANs are fine if the chapter is 7k words or so. If you clean these two up, I think you can get better.
~rx
12/20/2019 c1 Guest
I think it’s pretty good. Ummm maybe write more? I mean just write another chapter because I like it so far and I think it’s really good.
I think it’s pretty good. Ummm maybe write more? I mean just write another chapter because I like it so far and I think it’s really good.
10/29/2019 c1 mariwmelgae1124
I loved is perfect I wish you can make Severus snape Hermione’s Godfather or close to the family ️
I loved is perfect I wish you can make Severus snape Hermione’s Godfather or close to the family ️
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