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11/10/2019 c2 27RobertBruceScott
Interesting concept. I had forgotten about the Guardian. Nice buildup in Chapter 1 to the introduction of the alternate Captain and nice action sequences and problem solving by the Commodore.

There are a number of typos that you will want to clean up, particularly in Ch. 1 - it would probably help to have a Beta-Reader to catch those for you. In the last sentence correct grammar would be "where their destiny lay" (past tense of lie (recline) as opposed to its homonym, lie (tell an untruth) and its past tense, lied). Probably one of the trickiest intransitive verbs in the English language.

Always happy to see a hero with the last name Scott... Thanks! rbs

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