for Third Time's the Charm1/25 c1 
2ExXiled
I don't necessarily feel comfortable with the sexual undertones in this story, simply because Tanya is 12 years old. Story writers can obviously explore heavier topics such as body dysphoria and r*pe in their fanfics, but if you do so, bear in mind the tonal clash that it would create and the protagonist that you're using.
You were trying to give the story a serious tone, and while I feel that during warfare, war crimes like r*pe, torture, massacres are ever-present, I also feel like Tanya is far too strong to be subjected to anything like that. And the only reason it was added as a plot point is because she's female. Which I didn't want to bring up since it might not have been your intention. But if so, it's slightly misogynistic.
Your writing is incredibly good, but you need to learn how to balance a serious plot with a setting like Konosuba.
2ExXiledI don't necessarily feel comfortable with the sexual undertones in this story, simply because Tanya is 12 years old. Story writers can obviously explore heavier topics such as body dysphoria and r*pe in their fanfics, but if you do so, bear in mind the tonal clash that it would create and the protagonist that you're using.
You were trying to give the story a serious tone, and while I feel that during warfare, war crimes like r*pe, torture, massacres are ever-present, I also feel like Tanya is far too strong to be subjected to anything like that. And the only reason it was added as a plot point is because she's female. Which I didn't want to bring up since it might not have been your intention. But if so, it's slightly misogynistic.
Your writing is incredibly good, but you need to learn how to balance a serious plot with a setting like Konosuba.
1/7 c24 Knowledgeless
I really appreciate exploring the inherent trans-ness of Tanya in this fic. Tanya's gender is often glossed over or played for laughs, but gender dysphoria is no joke and colors so many basic interactions in life. The LN has depictions of disassociation in the early volumes, and that is a common trait related to not identifying with ones body.
I can imagine you have a lot of readers disliking a transmasculine transition, but they should really self-reflect about why it bothers them when an AFAB gets top surgery or something. It isn't their body. They don't own female bodies. They aren't owed access to these bodies.
I always related heavily to Tanya myself but as a trans woman. I had been a Salaryman in a corporate job, following all the rules of society gave me. I functioned like a robot to deal with the dysphoria and struggled to understand other people. Tanya/Salaryman is described as being a cyborg and a robot in the LN. When I write fanfiction, I tend to lean into a more gender non-conforming transfeminine version of Tanya because of this identifying with the protagonist. However, I have worked on and discussed more transmasculine portrayals like this one.
It is a lot darker when you go the transmasculine route because you are dealing with a character that is in way more pain in their current life as opposed to reconciling with pain from a past life. While gender dysphoria is not necessary to be trans, I think it something writers should consider more seriously when writing characters like Tanya. The downside is taking dysphoria seriously means your character is hurt by even the most banal conversation as people casually keep reminding the character of their perceived gender and their lack of control over it.
I thought your description of feeling trapped in a prison unable to interact with women was particularly relatable. Though I am a lesbian coming from the opposite side of things, I felt unable to properly interact with women who were interested in me because they saw a man and not me. So I kept far, far away from dating and romance, only confessing to my closest friend who I developed a crush on and who knew I was actually woman.
Pre-transion, I admit I struggled to read transmasculine stories due to gender envy making my feelings to messy, but after my transition in 2022, I became able to get past my gender envy and really appreciate transmasculine stories like this one.
Anyways, wanted to talk about this. I appreciate your work in this fic.
I really appreciate exploring the inherent trans-ness of Tanya in this fic. Tanya's gender is often glossed over or played for laughs, but gender dysphoria is no joke and colors so many basic interactions in life. The LN has depictions of disassociation in the early volumes, and that is a common trait related to not identifying with ones body.
I can imagine you have a lot of readers disliking a transmasculine transition, but they should really self-reflect about why it bothers them when an AFAB gets top surgery or something. It isn't their body. They don't own female bodies. They aren't owed access to these bodies.
I always related heavily to Tanya myself but as a trans woman. I had been a Salaryman in a corporate job, following all the rules of society gave me. I functioned like a robot to deal with the dysphoria and struggled to understand other people. Tanya/Salaryman is described as being a cyborg and a robot in the LN. When I write fanfiction, I tend to lean into a more gender non-conforming transfeminine version of Tanya because of this identifying with the protagonist. However, I have worked on and discussed more transmasculine portrayals like this one.
It is a lot darker when you go the transmasculine route because you are dealing with a character that is in way more pain in their current life as opposed to reconciling with pain from a past life. While gender dysphoria is not necessary to be trans, I think it something writers should consider more seriously when writing characters like Tanya. The downside is taking dysphoria seriously means your character is hurt by even the most banal conversation as people casually keep reminding the character of their perceived gender and their lack of control over it.
I thought your description of feeling trapped in a prison unable to interact with women was particularly relatable. Though I am a lesbian coming from the opposite side of things, I felt unable to properly interact with women who were interested in me because they saw a man and not me. So I kept far, far away from dating and romance, only confessing to my closest friend who I developed a crush on and who knew I was actually woman.
Pre-transion, I admit I struggled to read transmasculine stories due to gender envy making my feelings to messy, but after my transition in 2022, I became able to get past my gender envy and really appreciate transmasculine stories like this one.
Anyways, wanted to talk about this. I appreciate your work in this fic.
1/1 c1 Guest
Just write an oc next time
Just write an oc next time
11/29/2023 c60 1setokayba2n
At this rate with how bad Tanya luck is going, it could not surprise me if any god decide "Okay, it's over" and throw a meteorite to Tanya
1setokayba2nAt this rate with how bad Tanya luck is going, it could not surprise me if any god decide "Okay, it's over" and throw a meteorite to Tanya
10/27/2023 c59 Conbur
chapter fifty seven still isn't working, now displaying as a missing chapter.
Also, and they don't stop coming, and they don't stop coming, and they don't stop coming, and they don't stop coming, and...
chapter fifty seven still isn't working, now displaying as a missing chapter.
Also, and they don't stop coming, and they don't stop coming, and they don't stop coming, and they don't stop coming, and...
10/24/2023 c14 allblushingmalemcarecucks
Her hating religion is not the same as liking it, its like saying all mothers are pedos because they have had children inside of them... such as stupid and very much nonsensical comparison.
Her hating religion is not the same as liking it, its like saying all mothers are pedos because they have had children inside of them... such as stupid and very much nonsensical comparison.
10/23/2023 c4 allblushingmalemcarecucks
Not a fan of Tanya blushing at all, it is so NOT her. Big minus points for that.
Not a fan of Tanya blushing at all, it is so NOT her. Big minus points for that.
10/23/2023 c59 1setokayba2n
Maybe Tanya should try to find the inverse, instead of a blessing to not have children, a curse to not have children she have Vanir and Wiz that maybe know something like that, and it could be more effective that a condom that 'bad luck' could make it break.
Let's hope she manage to gen some free time for herself, so she can enjoy being a male.
1setokayba2nMaybe Tanya should try to find the inverse, instead of a blessing to not have children, a curse to not have children she have Vanir and Wiz that maybe know something like that, and it could be more effective that a condom that 'bad luck' could make it break.
Let's hope she manage to gen some free time for herself, so she can enjoy being a male.
10/10/2023 c56 Mernom
chapter 56 ends with the advent of the final battle of Axel, and chapter 57 starts with a birthday date or something? is there a missing chapter or something in the middle?
chapter 56 ends with the advent of the final battle of Axel, and chapter 57 starts with a birthday date or something? is there a missing chapter or something in the middle?
10/10/2023 c57 fanfic-addict0
Uhmm, did you just skip a chapter? Because in 56 everyone was raring to go to battle and now we're in the aftermath?
Also feels like a chapter called "Set Them Up" should be followed by "Knock Them Down"...
Uhmm, did you just skip a chapter? Because in 56 everyone was raring to go to battle and now we're in the aftermath?
Also feels like a chapter called "Set Them Up" should be followed by "Knock Them Down"...