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4/23 c6 1BurningHeretic
The dialogue feels a little bit forced, but the story is pretty good. Already hyped for the next chapter
3/31 c6 1Chaosgod3456
Enjoy the story hope you update it some more it was and is a very interesting story
3/23 c6 warrlod
poggers
2/26 c6 Guest
YEEAAAAH! Im hoping for more Eugen x Jaune reactions and for it to get better between the two XD
2/26 c6 LoneRider-09
Interessant.
2/26 c6 2Th3DarkAngel
Yo I'm really liking this story, looking forward to the next chapter!
2/25 c6 13JAYSEN
Things are getting even MORE interesting. It's probably for the best Adam wasn't left with Grozny...For his own good.
2/25 c6 willywonka3234
This is looking good
2/25 c6 ivanruzic3758
The one issue I might bring up is that Akagi would need to be watched, as her personality may cause... issues, and seeing that she has eight people worrying over her could mean that she would latch onto one of them(very likely Yang, with their shared theme of flames, though Ruby is an option too), and I think that gender makes no difference to the Sakuran fleet carrier.
Good to see that you are back to writing.
10/17/2020 c5 LoneRider-09
I look for the next chapter, Herr.
8/25/2020 c5 1Jack Lycan
You should definitely have RWBY and JNPR join the Ironblood also more Prinz hitting on Jaune.
6/11/2020 c5 2Rinter215
Blake thinks she’s seen the horrors of Warfare. Wait til USS Enterprise enters. Strike Hard Strike Fast Strike Often.

looking forward to more
6/5/2020 c5 necros434
Alright pretty good so far I'm interested I'll read a few more chapters
PROS
- a few spelling mistakes in the first chapters cleared up by the end
-I like the Ghostly Crew
- overall I like the direction this seems to be going
CONS
- definitely feels like you're trying to force team Ruby and Bismarck to stick together I know you have to do it for the story but definitely feels a bit haphazard and even cringey in a few places, then again you always seem to follow that up with a see i really like so I understand why you have to do it
- in some places it seems like you have to force Bismarck to act OOC it seems to be clearing up a bit too
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In conclusion

You seem to have some pretty decent ideas for what you want the story to be but you seem to be having some trouble with the incompatibility of some characters and compatibility of others

So you've brushed over and forced your way to the bits that you really want to do and to your credit they tend to out really good

So far the good outweighs the bad

I love Bismarck so probably I'll probably try to leave a detailed review on new chapters that you publish with the story excited to see more
6/4/2020 c5 1onearmedduck
epic :)
6/1/2020 c5 Guest
imagine if taihou, roon, akagi, takao and friedrich catch wind of jaune...thats gonna be fun XD
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