for Sword and Shield5/2 c43 Arrondir
When are u going to continue
When are u going to continue
4/23 c43 joshdougherty0605
Well done that was quite a bit of lore you manafed to present and still keep things flowing smoothly amazing chapter as usual. Ill look forward to the reunion
Well done that was quite a bit of lore you manafed to present and still keep things flowing smoothly amazing chapter as usual. Ill look forward to the reunion
4/18 c43 silentwarrior257
You did well! This chapter has been awaited for a long time by me, and now I await for the next chapter! Man I hope its soon! Until then, Emblem!
You did well! This chapter has been awaited for a long time by me, and now I await for the next chapter! Man I hope its soon! Until then, Emblem!
4/16 c43 Chris
Excellent work, as always.
It’s a pleasure to see things wrapped up in Kizuna’s world… for now. Kyo is still at large, but hopefully won’t manage to do anything too terrible. Now it’s finally time to check in and see how the rest of the team has been faring while we the readers were elsewhere.
Hopefully everybody has been managing, more or less, while our favorite white-haired couple were gone. With Naofumi being leagues stronger in this timeline, Ren being genuinely capable as a hero, and Motoyasu at least being competent, I certainly hope that the Spirit Tortoise situation was slightly less of a clusterfuck…
(Who am I kidding?)
At the very least, I hope that nobody we care about has died offscreen.
It’s hard to get a clear read on the timeline, so I don’t know if Takt is going to start being a problem soon. Either way, if he doesn’t come looking for trouble, they know enough about the Vanguards at this point that the team will go looking for HIM.
I eagerly await the reunion of our protagonists… and the awkward re-introduction of L’Arc and Therese. Naofumi is going to be wishing for all of the advil…
Excellent work, as always.
It’s a pleasure to see things wrapped up in Kizuna’s world… for now. Kyo is still at large, but hopefully won’t manage to do anything too terrible. Now it’s finally time to check in and see how the rest of the team has been faring while we the readers were elsewhere.
Hopefully everybody has been managing, more or less, while our favorite white-haired couple were gone. With Naofumi being leagues stronger in this timeline, Ren being genuinely capable as a hero, and Motoyasu at least being competent, I certainly hope that the Spirit Tortoise situation was slightly less of a clusterfuck…
(Who am I kidding?)
At the very least, I hope that nobody we care about has died offscreen.
It’s hard to get a clear read on the timeline, so I don’t know if Takt is going to start being a problem soon. Either way, if he doesn’t come looking for trouble, they know enough about the Vanguards at this point that the team will go looking for HIM.
I eagerly await the reunion of our protagonists… and the awkward re-introduction of L’Arc and Therese. Naofumi is going to be wishing for all of the advil…
4/15 c43 To Zekiel Ash
Just wanted to point out that Last Episode Shirou(the one who didn't made a contract with the world and went to Avalon) had gears in his UBW too. Tho youre right in that we didn't see it in teen Shirous(Miyuverse and UBW) but only in adult ones with or without contract with Alaya afaik.
Iirc Shirou always knew his ideal was impossible, even Kiritsugu was sure to point out the impossibility of saving everyone to him when they talked about it and Shirou understood as well. He still kept going with it because he's stubborn as hell and saving others being the only thing he can allow himself to find any joy in. That and even if he didn't realise it consciously, he felt that ideal was beautiful. Archer wasn't telling him things Shirou himself didn't know, just ones he prefer not to think about. Same as Shirou making Archer remember what he had forgotten but was there all along
Just wanted to point out that Last Episode Shirou(the one who didn't made a contract with the world and went to Avalon) had gears in his UBW too. Tho youre right in that we didn't see it in teen Shirous(Miyuverse and UBW) but only in adult ones with or without contract with Alaya afaik.
Iirc Shirou always knew his ideal was impossible, even Kiritsugu was sure to point out the impossibility of saving everyone to him when they talked about it and Shirou understood as well. He still kept going with it because he's stubborn as hell and saving others being the only thing he can allow himself to find any joy in. That and even if he didn't realise it consciously, he felt that ideal was beautiful. Archer wasn't telling him things Shirou himself didn't know, just ones he prefer not to think about. Same as Shirou making Archer remember what he had forgotten but was there all along
4/12 c43 Zekiel Ash
And another arc drives to a close, feels like the Dungeon one was just yesterday. Thanks for your hard work.
I've been giving these last few chapters a read and reread these last few days to try and pick everything I could about Shirou's growth lately. His new weapon was something bound to happen I feel and I'm quite satisfied with it seeing as he got a Kojiro-like teacher now to practice with. Not gonna drag this one out I'm really curious about how you're gonna handle UBW, it's been eating at me these last few days.
For starters, I wanna question it's appearance.
I get the grass it's symbolic of life meaning that said life can grow there and it isn't just a barren wasteland made with one objective alone like the other UBWs.
I get the sun and the moon, they may represent his new racial magic of light and shadow, or him being caught between the Sunrise and Twilight of something, don't know what yet.
But here's what bothers me, the gears. They only time I've seen them afaik is in EMIYA's world, and I know they represent his feeling of being a tool to a greater power, of just being an instrument for Alaya to use as it fits them. So why does your Shirou have them as well? He shouldn't feel as such, not only his ideal hasn't betrayed him yet but he instead has been reinforcing it ever since he arrived here, his best achievement walking right alongside him. That is without taking into account that Naofumi also tries to show him a better way than just dedicating his entire existence to it (I remember reading something along these lines sometime ago, dunno which chapter was). Honestly it's bugging me a lot, unless they're there just because they look cool I can't imagine their meaning. (I know it could be a representation for him being a maker, seeing as he is a crafter, but I think there should be a better way to exemplify it than Archer's gears, like the sound of a hammer striking an anvil in the background).
Secondly (yeah I know I wrote a wall already and that was only about it's appearance) it's the Aria. This is the part I wanna focus the most about. The aria is supposed to be a poem about Shirou's very being, what he feels not only about himself but about his life, or at least that's how I've always felt it should be. The first three lines are like always:
"I am the Bone of my SwordMy body is made out of swords"
"Steel is my body and fire is my bloodMy blood is of iron and my heart of glass"
"I have created over a thousand bladesEmerging from countless battlefields undefeated"
So far, so good. Those lines are a representation of Shirou as himself, of him being a Sword. Usually the next fourth and fifth lines are a contradiction or a dichotomy, not necessary by any means so I don't care that you didn't do one. But your fourth line is quite literally the other meaning of the third line, to me it feel like he is repeating himself. Then comes the fifth:
"Fighting for an impossible ideal"
This, to me, feels very barebones and simple, like literally any other Shirou Emiya could use it. And yet, it feels not quite accurate for him yet.
I remember two chapters ago that Shirou has made a breakthrough when it comes to his ideal. He noticed that he can't save everyone. He acknowledged that sometimes to save somebody he has to kill another for it. And yet, he hasn't been challenged by his ideal so far outside of that concession. He shouldn't accept it as impossible or at the very least not yet.
I can see he's still living by it, his stunt of literally using his soul as a channel to bring back Kizuna is enough evidence on its own seeing as one mistake could have meant his soul would be sealed in the labyrinth, but that again just proves that he shouldn't consider it impossible or unattainable just yet. It feels shallow, for a lack of a better word.
All of that was to say, I know that an aria at its core is just a way a magus has so channel his od better for the magecraft they are working on and that depending on how said magus is feeling it can be changed. In fact, you could probably be holding onto Shirou's real aria for UBW for a later use and for all I know I just wasted both of our times with this. But just in case I'm onto something here and I can help you iron out some details for the future of the fic I'm willing to write this monster of a text wall to try and pinpoint a future problem.
I really like what you have written so far, I love what you have been doing with Atla and Shirou, and also I just outright enjoy reading everything about it. Here's to the next chapter, thanks again and take care.
PS: I now wanna see Fohl's reaction to Atla being so bold with Shirou, poor guy it's probably gonna think it's all a nightmare
And another arc drives to a close, feels like the Dungeon one was just yesterday. Thanks for your hard work.
I've been giving these last few chapters a read and reread these last few days to try and pick everything I could about Shirou's growth lately. His new weapon was something bound to happen I feel and I'm quite satisfied with it seeing as he got a Kojiro-like teacher now to practice with. Not gonna drag this one out I'm really curious about how you're gonna handle UBW, it's been eating at me these last few days.
For starters, I wanna question it's appearance.
I get the grass it's symbolic of life meaning that said life can grow there and it isn't just a barren wasteland made with one objective alone like the other UBWs.
I get the sun and the moon, they may represent his new racial magic of light and shadow, or him being caught between the Sunrise and Twilight of something, don't know what yet.
But here's what bothers me, the gears. They only time I've seen them afaik is in EMIYA's world, and I know they represent his feeling of being a tool to a greater power, of just being an instrument for Alaya to use as it fits them. So why does your Shirou have them as well? He shouldn't feel as such, not only his ideal hasn't betrayed him yet but he instead has been reinforcing it ever since he arrived here, his best achievement walking right alongside him. That is without taking into account that Naofumi also tries to show him a better way than just dedicating his entire existence to it (I remember reading something along these lines sometime ago, dunno which chapter was). Honestly it's bugging me a lot, unless they're there just because they look cool I can't imagine their meaning. (I know it could be a representation for him being a maker, seeing as he is a crafter, but I think there should be a better way to exemplify it than Archer's gears, like the sound of a hammer striking an anvil in the background).
Secondly (yeah I know I wrote a wall already and that was only about it's appearance) it's the Aria. This is the part I wanna focus the most about. The aria is supposed to be a poem about Shirou's very being, what he feels not only about himself but about his life, or at least that's how I've always felt it should be. The first three lines are like always:
"I am the Bone of my SwordMy body is made out of swords"
"Steel is my body and fire is my bloodMy blood is of iron and my heart of glass"
"I have created over a thousand bladesEmerging from countless battlefields undefeated"
So far, so good. Those lines are a representation of Shirou as himself, of him being a Sword. Usually the next fourth and fifth lines are a contradiction or a dichotomy, not necessary by any means so I don't care that you didn't do one. But your fourth line is quite literally the other meaning of the third line, to me it feel like he is repeating himself. Then comes the fifth:
"Fighting for an impossible ideal"
This, to me, feels very barebones and simple, like literally any other Shirou Emiya could use it. And yet, it feels not quite accurate for him yet.
I remember two chapters ago that Shirou has made a breakthrough when it comes to his ideal. He noticed that he can't save everyone. He acknowledged that sometimes to save somebody he has to kill another for it. And yet, he hasn't been challenged by his ideal so far outside of that concession. He shouldn't accept it as impossible or at the very least not yet.
I can see he's still living by it, his stunt of literally using his soul as a channel to bring back Kizuna is enough evidence on its own seeing as one mistake could have meant his soul would be sealed in the labyrinth, but that again just proves that he shouldn't consider it impossible or unattainable just yet. It feels shallow, for a lack of a better word.
All of that was to say, I know that an aria at its core is just a way a magus has so channel his od better for the magecraft they are working on and that depending on how said magus is feeling it can be changed. In fact, you could probably be holding onto Shirou's real aria for UBW for a later use and for all I know I just wasted both of our times with this. But just in case I'm onto something here and I can help you iron out some details for the future of the fic I'm willing to write this monster of a text wall to try and pinpoint a future problem.
I really like what you have written so far, I love what you have been doing with Atla and Shirou, and also I just outright enjoy reading everything about it. Here's to the next chapter, thanks again and take care.
PS: I now wanna see Fohl's reaction to Atla being so bold with Shirou, poor guy it's probably gonna think it's all a nightmare
4/11 c43 Satisfied Reader
To conform, yes, you did a good job! In my opinion, this was one of the best chapters you've written so far.
To conform, yes, you did a good job! In my opinion, this was one of the best chapters you've written so far.
4/8 c43 Guest
Kinda confused why La'rc and Theresa are going to Raphtalia's world specially since they have yet to take care of 2 more possible Vanguard of Waves back in their world.
Kinda confused why La'rc and Theresa are going to Raphtalia's world specially since they have yet to take care of 2 more possible Vanguard of Waves back in their world.
4/8 c43 Arctic Fox 322
Dunno if it's just me but I would rather Shirou keep his restrictions on weapon usage if he reamins the Katana Hero. It's more fun seeing his finding work arounds around his restrictions if they exist and if not, just learning to live with it. If all his restrictions are removed, him becoming the Katana Hero would just be a Gary Stu powerup with no drawback. At that point why not make Naofumi able to function as DPS too
Dunno if it's just me but I would rather Shirou keep his restrictions on weapon usage if he reamins the Katana Hero. It's more fun seeing his finding work arounds around his restrictions if they exist and if not, just learning to live with it. If all his restrictions are removed, him becoming the Katana Hero would just be a Gary Stu powerup with no drawback. At that point why not make Naofumi able to function as DPS too
4/8 c43 
25NewMystery356
[Food Level] made me feel super-nostalgic for Toriko; which doesn’t get neatly the attention it deserves, but I digress. As for the Ancient Labyrinth Library, that one made me nostalgic for “Library Island” from Mahou Sensei Negima!. As for Atla calling the Heavenrend something as mundane as “awesome”, it was very wholesome~ Also made me think of Inuyasha, but then again, its hard to be completely “originalmost Isekai is basically a parody of “A Connecticut Yankee in King Arthur’s Court”. As for the Wave being such a wash… Awesome~
25NewMystery356[Food Level] made me feel super-nostalgic for Toriko; which doesn’t get neatly the attention it deserves, but I digress. As for the Ancient Labyrinth Library, that one made me nostalgic for “Library Island” from Mahou Sensei Negima!. As for Atla calling the Heavenrend something as mundane as “awesome”, it was very wholesome~ Also made me think of Inuyasha, but then again, its hard to be completely “originalmost Isekai is basically a parody of “A Connecticut Yankee in King Arthur’s Court”. As for the Wave being such a wash… Awesome~
4/7 c43 keybladelight
Happy that Shirou and Atla with Kizuna help they buried the Axel of the 3 other vassals heroes and all that left for them is to defeat the corrupted book hero.
You know they try to make sure their world and Naofumi temporary world of the holy weapons can't be destroyed maybe the answer can be found either on shirou's reality marble Unlimited Blade Works or maybe if by some miracle have shirou contact Zeltrech if by miracle of it so that the troll vampire appear with the second true magic kaleidoscope and meet that Shirou Emiya and maybe help him with his problems to safe not just atla homeworld but also Glass world and the others worlds with other heroes. After all Zeltrech is a true ancestor.
Still hope that Kizuna see the sheath of avalon the scabbard of King Arthur and maybe she could be a fan of the Arthurian Legends and see how powerful the sheath is and also how it wouldn't leave shirou because of his connection to sword and future bond with Saber to Artoria Pendragon when shirou and those that will go to Shirou's earth the nasuverse the one's that will he chosen to go earth nasuverse and well experience the holy grail war and they see the fate route romance of shirou x artoria.
Hope you respond to my questions.
Happy that Shirou and Atla with Kizuna help they buried the Axel of the 3 other vassals heroes and all that left for them is to defeat the corrupted book hero.
You know they try to make sure their world and Naofumi temporary world of the holy weapons can't be destroyed maybe the answer can be found either on shirou's reality marble Unlimited Blade Works or maybe if by some miracle have shirou contact Zeltrech if by miracle of it so that the troll vampire appear with the second true magic kaleidoscope and meet that Shirou Emiya and maybe help him with his problems to safe not just atla homeworld but also Glass world and the others worlds with other heroes. After all Zeltrech is a true ancestor.
Still hope that Kizuna see the sheath of avalon the scabbard of King Arthur and maybe she could be a fan of the Arthurian Legends and see how powerful the sheath is and also how it wouldn't leave shirou because of his connection to sword and future bond with Saber to Artoria Pendragon when shirou and those that will go to Shirou's earth the nasuverse the one's that will he chosen to go earth nasuverse and well experience the holy grail war and they see the fate route romance of shirou x artoria.
Hope you respond to my questions.